A/N: Wow, this one was a bit of a turn up, eh? I want to thank all of those who read my blog post about this chapter and responding so positively. Without you, this chapter might have been a lot shorter. As always, I own nothing in this but the arrangement of the words. All else belongs to Hasbro and Lauren Faust, and I thank them fro letting me play in their sandbox. dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Lyra_dealwithit.png

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Not talkin'
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Dun, dun DUUUNNN!
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The hotness got turned up to 11. dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Twilight_Sparkle_lolface.png

Alrighty. Glad to see this updated. Commence read.

I won't lie was wondering what the ummm... development would be like reading. All in all it's wasn't anything too radical, especially compared to a lot of the other stuff on this website. I do agree with Twi that the other needs to tone it down a bit (specifically Trixie and Cheery). Still it was pretty hot and a good read, though I just have to ask what is with Cheerilee and talking like she's still in the 80s all of a sudden?

1722384 I'm glad you listen to us. It really fit well with the story....now let me be the first to say THAT WAS HOT!
EDIT : damn second stupid iPad didn't load don't matter though

This was a good chapter, dood.

And finding some Futa-Twi in this si always a plus.

i knew it was gonna go futa when you mentioned the "spell" instant win
and im thinking its chrysalis that teamed up with the diamond dog. also trixie and cheerilee have become quite the horny ones. could they be replaced with changlings we must wait and see

1722366 Daaaaaaaaaaaaaammmmmmmmmmmmmmmmnnnnnnnnnnnnnn dude. I'm happy you didn't back out of the clop here. approves

I agree with Twi there. There's love and then there's borderline public indecency, which might prove problematic for Cheerilee and Spitfire...

Still a good read however! and hot to boot

Can I be the first to predict the futa-twi from way back when she had the dream I mean come how else are they gonna sexily make a baby. Otherwise great chapter, but I can't help but think you got inspiration from Of Maid & Mistresses. Keep up the good work its really great.
Till Next Time Peace.

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Cheerilee's speech patterns will be explained soon. Be patient.
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Thank you kindly.
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Honestly, I didn't think that futa would go over so well with so many. dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_TwilightWut.png
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There's a reason behind the insanity. Don't worry. dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Octavia2.png
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Maids and Mistresses was a good story, but I've been a fan of the fetish long before coming here. dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Lyra_dealwithit.png

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Along with many others appearentlly. And to cheerilee and trixie's perpetual horniness as of late I think I might be simmering up an anwser.

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Yup, figured as much, time for the fan girlish "CALLED IT!"

Right, forgot to comment. Ok, so... I have nothing against futa/genderbending anyway, just wanted to say that.
Now, onto the real stuff. I feel like the story is spiraling into pointless clop. I want to think things will turn around and it's not going to be just, well... pointless clop all around, so no, I'm not going to say stupid crap like "you are out of my favorite list and into my 'to read' list" and shit, I just hope there's something more here. Or rather, that it gets to that something soon.

And... I still can't wrap my head around Cheerilee's dialogues. I figure someone (Trixie?) asked her to speak like that or something, because otherwise, yeah, why? (And given that she didn't speak like that in TSW) But that's just a minor gripe anyway. ;p

Wrabbit...THIS WAS ALL KINDS OF HOT!!! We told ya that that was a good idea! And in the words of Masaomi Kida (Durarara) "LONG LIVE POLYGAMY!"

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Ravencroft Approved

You devious bastard you. You combined my two favorite things, dom-Twi, and futa. It was the best thing ever! Probably the best clop I've ever read, also, I think you also hold the record, in my book, for most, sex(described or otherwise) and sexual references in a single chapter. For fuck sake, those are the horniest characters in all of my reading or viewing experience, they're unstoppable!
On a more serious story note I hope I see where you might be going with this story, because as much as I enjoy excessive clop, I still like seeing well developed stories.

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That answer is coming. dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Twilight_Sparkle_lolface.png
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Let's just say that things are building to a head in the sex department. This will likely be the biggest clop chapter I ever write, with a return to a stronger plot (no, not that plot) presence next chapter. This was just something that needed to be done. dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Lyra_dealwithit.png To put it another way...
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Awww but exceptionally horny Cheers and Trixie are funny, we cant lose them! =P

Somehow I'm guessing Twi missed the race

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Yes, yes I know. Not saying their horny antics aren't entertaining, just saying they should listen to Mistress Twilight and only do that in private. In the privacy of their own home they can get as crazy as they want (which they seem to be doing).

But eh I can't really blame them, Twilight is pretty irresistible

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UP TOP! /)

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Ohhh, I hope "It" is a FO:E:PE style Star Demon! Like the one which took over Luna to turn her into Night Mare Moon.

Well I sure do hope someone picks up that phone...

Because I freakin' called it!

It is a sad day when a romance fic turns into mindless clop. Sorry you lost me with this one, too much random clop and not a slight tinge of development in their relationship.

Jesus bloody cheesecakes... Since when did these three suddenly turn into rabid horndogs in mating season!? Somepony outta sort them folks out double quick, BEFORE they do something that they'll regret. I mean, they DO have other lives to lead besides being virtual sex slaves to Twilight at this point. It is a wonder they aren't drugged up or something of the like. I'd be VERY worried for their well being, especially that of Twilight. Poor girl has to deal with three demanding mares. All of whom seem to be lost to reason at the moment and seem hell bent on shattering our poor librarian. Someone must give them the talk.... Perhaps Fluttershy?

At the rate they are going, not only Ponyville will know of their escapades, but ALL of Equestria will know by the time the year is over. And if I had to be completely honest? I doubt that the three alone could handle Twilight when she is in her crazy "Tardy" mode. Sweet merciful Celestia and Luna above help them if that happens. I can't imagine how much damage the town itself could sustain if that were to happen.

UNF.

LAWD HAVE MERCY. I thought your previous writing was delicious but DAAAAYYUUMM. That was DANGEROUSLY spicy. Ergh. Amazing. Absolutely amazing. Loved poor Amethyst Star. This mysterious new villain has my curiosity quite piqued.

...I came.

dude, you could start stackin some serious paper if you decided to start writing romance novels. That showers scene was HOT!

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And it hurt, alot.
But this was insanely sexy!

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That is what she cums isn't it? And here I was wondering where she got all her paper from ...

Something's off....

Spitfire, she seems sensible, like her mental faculties are all there and she's, y'know, stable. I wouldn't expect Cheerilee to be off-kilter for no apparent reason, but Trixie....ooh, Trixie's got some baggage, and I'm wondering what exactly's going on that has caused such an intense change in the demeanor of them all. I can understand it's a budding relationship and they're all basically just 'getting it out of their systems', let's face it we've all done that in new relationships, it's magical in the beginning for most.

The overall behavior is a bit worrisome, confusing even. If they're all totally legit, like, their heads haven't been messed with, this is just really poor representation of their more sexual side. Cheerilee and Trixie have both been living with Twilight and Spike, and they're just doing and saying really brazen sexual things right in front of him? In front of others, when it's clearly freaking Twilight out on some level (while likely turning her on as well)? They were never this unattentive before, they were all freaking hawks when it came to paying attention to Twilight's desires, and I just can't see these mares carrying on like that if it's clearly bothering her.

"You want this, don't you?"
Jeez, Emperor Twilight Palpatine. Not sure if cock or Luke's lightsaber.

It was too good to be true....

Wgy does it have to always end with futa........ I hate that style, but How I hate it.
Still the story is good, so I guess I'll go with it..

Um...okay then. Different but definitely readable. Good job!

What was that? They changed. I don't understand. It doesn't make any sense! The story is starting to go downhill!
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I TRUSTED YOU

Twilight just groaned as she trotted faster to the town hall, hoping that forty-two was still open.

I see Twi is still as content as ever to find... or quite possibly BE the meaning of life, huh?

Twilight broke the awkward silence that had resettled over them by proclaiming very loudly, “Well, thank you for all your help, Amethyst, we'll see you at the race tomorrow, bye now!” She pushed all three of her fillyfriends out the door, Trixie and Cheerilee looking as if they were about to orgasm right then and there from the rough treatment.

Minuette sidled up to the younger unicorn, saying in a low voice, “Wow, who'd have thought it, huh?” Shaking her head, she added, “It's always the quiet ones.”

Yep.

“Yes, and it's possible I'm a time traveling incarnation of a fundamental force of nature, waiting to rejoin my fellow incarnations, but it's highly unlikely,” Twilight retorted as they caught up with her fillyfriends.

how come this sentence smells suspiciously like a cat named Baast?

Still not so sure about the 'villain intros' at the end. Might risk pushing the story out of the cozy genre, but it could also end in a hilarious curb stomp from twilight sparkle.

Also not so sure all three of those mares would be okay with that spell. I'd think at least one would show nervous second thoughts.

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Thank you for giving the villain parts a chance. It was a bit of a departure from the last story, so not everyone in the comments cared for the turn.