Poor Spike, having to deal with all these crazy mares. I enjoyed seeing Trixie showing a little bit of vulnerability. She does strike me as the one who would have the hardest time dealing with "sharing", but as Celestia has observed she really does seem to be developing feelings for the others.
Now I'm definitely looking forward to the "shenanigans" Trixie and Cheerilee have planned for when mom goes home. Also while I wasn't really sold on the "big bad" subplot before, I now must admit my interest has been piqued, also Plain Sight is a BAWSS. Cannot wait for the next chapter.
didn't you put one to many didn't in this sentence?
and almost wish she hadn't
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You've created a beautiful dynamic with Celestia here. It takes a very pure love to want someone else's happiness above your own. Keep up the great work, and I hope you can keep up this kind of pace, I'm feeling spoiled with how fast this one came out
19452241945372 That's sweet of you to say. Thank you. I'm glad I was able to change your mind about the subplot. I didn't really mean for Plain Sight to overshadow the main protagonists. Gonna have to scale her back a bit I guess. 1945327 You can bet Luna is panicking on the inside. 1945351 The way I have her set up here, she doesn't like being vulnerable; and putting her feelings for Twilight out there when Twilight herself not only returns the feelings, but also feels the same about two others? That's vulnerable. 1945417 You can bet that Twilight will make the suggestion. 1945471 Oh, that club has many more members that that. 1945477 Who will light our darkest hour?
1946041 Hey, when you get a free show... He just has to ignore Twilight, and he gets to be around three hawt mares. 1946042 Thank you for catching those. I guess I was in a bit of a rush to publish, and let them slip by me. And thank you even more for the lovely compliment. That's pretty much what I was going for with Celestia. She's rather practiced at it, but that doesn't make it any easier. And with what I have planned for Twilight, it will make all the scenes with Celestia a lot more poignant.
1946279 Agreed, Mommylestia IS best Celestia, her mother/daughter dynamic Twilight is perhaps one of the most heart breaking and sweetest things I've seen, also I wonder how Twilight's biological mother feels about it?
Very nice new chapter to the story! Looking forward to further progression in the mystery villain as well as the growing relationship with Twilight's HMFF (Hottest Mare Friends Forever )
I admit, I just want Celestia folded into Twilight's harem because Trixie, Spitfire and Cheerilee's initiation for her would be epic. Epic in the sense of being worthy of the work of ancient Greek bards, I mean.
Hey, just a heads up, there are several dozen grammatical errors in here. I'd be more than happy to help correct them, but you'll need to PM me, and ask me for my help. It's not an egotistical thing, it's just that I'm currently wasted, and that's the only thing that will draw my attention back to this story.
Best of luck to you , hoping you'll enlist my help. Hazzard
Glad you see cheery needed to stay back. But anyway great chap and loved the hole idea of nightmare night at the palace that sounds really interest. And imagine how Celestia's feels walking in on her student drooling over her soaking wet marefriend. Insert awkward moment here.
1946279 When I first saw that comment, I read that with a comma between mommy and Celestia... 1946288 Believe me, I'd rather not. She's too interesting a character to do that to her. I'll just have to carefully consider any scene with her in future. Either that, or balance them with more scenes of Twilight's herd. 19463101947304 Thank you kindly. 1946316 You're going to find out... eventually. 1946380 Heh, heh. HMFF. 1946446 I don't think Twilight (or at least, this version of her) has an Oedipus complex. Another version of her that I'd like to write however, does. 1947021 Not sure to what that's referencing... 1947329 That was just temporary insanity brought on by the fear of losing Twilight. I also have a few scenes for Nightmare Night in the Palace, so it might even make it into the story. And Celestia walking in at that moment, I imagine she had an expression much like she did at the end of the parasprite episode.
1947979 Trixie, Cheery, and Spitfire were all agreeing that, yes, Twilight does indeed have "The Touch". If ya know what I mean, nudge nudge, wink wink. Unfortunately, it kinda falls flat with the new way images are done on the site. Screws up the extra emotes.
Oh dear. Seems like the "nightmare" part of Nightmare Moon wants some revenge. I am eager to see how this plays out. Plain Sight will handle things, I'm sure. Besides, she's got a platoon of knights to work with now. Good stuff. Also wet Spitfire is best Spitfire.
However I must admit, the whole forest scene was a tad underwhelming. Cheerilee's heartfelt 'bon voyage' to her herd + AJ was sweet and all, but in the end it was almost completely unwarranted! All they did was walk over to near the Everfree Forest. They never even went in it! I was expecting a rather tense scene of them wandering about the Everfree but instead just got a cursory examination of the CMC's play area. And wasn't that 'expedition' supposed to take all day? Seemed awfully short to me. Anyways, just a little nitpick I had. Didn't feel like the buildup to this scene was warranted in the end.
I found one.....I finally found one.... a Lunashy......they said it was a myth.....but I found one....it's in th background of sorts BUT I NOW KNOW THAT IT IS POSSIBLE!
Further discussion was quelled, and the continued in silence until they reached the clearing with the hill the foals had turned into a soapbox ramp. Twilight looked at the “emergency stop” at the bottom incredulously. “Oh, no. This is all wrong! If they had to use this, it would have launched them instead of stopping them! Applejack, you have to let me help them with these kinds of things next time. They could have seriously hurt themselves on this!”
hold up, did I miss something. 1: Celestia's just waiting for twilight (probably after alicorn hood) to date her. but most importantly 2: luna and fluttershy have been screwing off camera since the first book. what does she mean 'you were supposed to kiss her tonight' brah, they've been doing that since book one. It was very obvious, messy mains, the smells, etc. They are not good at hiding it.
Is this a mid second book retcon? LOL... what?
Also based on an earlier statement, I have funny feeling Celestia is Twilight's dad and knocked up her mom. so it makes the fact she won't deny wanting to ravage Twilight's little mare body more... well okay I like it more but I'm a weirdo.
11851498 It's amazing the things people read into a story that the author never put. And no, there is no retconning going on here. As for the last thing, that's an interesting story idea, especially since my headcanon is that alicorns embody all aspects of ponies, regardless of race or sex (check out my story, I've Been Waiting for A Girl Like You; no relation to the TSW series, so no spoilers in it).
I wake up to an awesome Romance Reports sequel, and tonight I get an update to my favorite poly-amorous fic ever!
Good day, good day.
So, tis the Nightmare that is responsible for things that are amiss. Verily, we art doomed.
*ahem* Nice chapter, looking forward to more. Hopefully, Twilight's blindness will wear off soon.
Poor Spike, having to deal with all these crazy mares.
I enjoyed seeing Trixie showing a little bit of vulnerability.
She does strike me as the one who would have the hardest time dealing with "sharing", but as Celestia has observed she really does seem to be developing feelings for the others.
Now I'm definitely looking forward to the "shenanigans" Trixie and Cheerilee have planned for when mom goes home. Also while I wasn't really sold on the "big bad" subplot before, I now must admit my interest has been piqued, also Plain Sight is a BAWSS. Cannot wait for the next chapter.
hmm maybe you should make Spitfire a roman centurion warrior for nightmare night.
Looking forward to Celestia's four-on-one induction into the Twilight's Plot Fan Club.
"Till all are one" eh?
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Commence read.
All these mares and Spike just tagging along.
didn't you put one to many didn't in this sentence?
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You've created a beautiful dynamic with Celestia here. It takes a very pure love to want someone else's happiness above your own. Keep up the great work, and I hope you can keep up this kind of pace, I'm feeling spoiled with how fast this one came out
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That's sweet of you to say. Thank you. I'm glad I was able to change your mind about the subplot. I didn't really mean for Plain Sight to overshadow the main protagonists. Gonna have to scale her back a bit I guess.
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You can bet Luna is panicking on the inside.
1945351
The way I have her set up here, she doesn't like being vulnerable; and putting her feelings for Twilight out there when Twilight herself not only returns the feelings, but also feels the same about two others? That's vulnerable.
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You can bet that Twilight will make the suggestion.
1945471
Oh, that club has many more members that that.
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Who will light our darkest hour?
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Hey, when you get a free show... He just has to ignore Twilight, and he gets to be around three hawt mares.
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Thank you for catching those. I guess I was in a bit of a rush to publish, and let them slip by me. And thank you even more for the lovely compliment. That's pretty much what I was going for with Celestia. She's rather practiced at it, but that doesn't make it any easier. And with what I have planned for Twilight, it will make all the scenes with Celestia a lot more poignant.
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But, mommy Celestia is best Celestia.
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Noooo!
Don't scale back Plain Sight!
She's awesome!
Besides, its not like she could ever really overshadow the hawt lesbian 4way relationship =P
1946279 Agreed, Mommylestia IS best Celestia, her mother/daughter dynamic Twilight is perhaps one of the most heart breaking and sweetest things I've seen, also I wonder how Twilight's biological mother feels about it?
Very nice new chapter to the story! Looking forward to further progression in the mystery villain as well as the growing relationship with Twilight's HMFF (Hottest Mare Friends Forever )
I admit, I just want Celestia folded into Twilight's harem because Trixie, Spitfire and Cheerilee's initiation for her would be epic. Epic in the sense of being worthy of the work of ancient Greek bards, I mean.
Hey, just a heads up, there are several dozen grammatical errors in here. I'd be more than happy to help correct them, but you'll need to PM me, and ask me for my help. It's not an egotistical thing, it's just that I'm currently wasted, and that's the only thing that will draw my attention back to this story.
Best of luck to you , hoping you'll enlist my help.
Hazzard
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Oh boy, now THAT'S got the potential to be awkward.
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Wonder what would happen if we threw a dude into the mix. //dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Soarin_dayum.png
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Yes. Yes she does.
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That Luna entrance had me laughing! And the sadlestia brought out the feels!
Amazing chapter as all the others are.
Glad you see cheery needed to stay back. But anyway great chap and loved the hole idea of nightmare night at the palace that sounds really interest. And imagine how Celestia's feels walking in on her student drooling over her soaking wet marefriend. Insert awkward moment here.
1946279
When I first saw that comment, I read that with a comma between mommy and Celestia...
1946288
Believe me, I'd rather not. She's too interesting a character to do that to her. I'll just have to carefully consider any scene with her in future. Either that, or balance them with more scenes of Twilight's herd.
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Thank you kindly.
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You're going to find out... eventually.
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Heh, heh. HMFF.
1946446
I don't think Twilight (or at least, this version of her) has an Oedipus complex. Another version of her that I'd like to write however, does.
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Not sure to what that's referencing...
1947329
That was just temporary insanity brought on by the fear of losing Twilight. I also have a few scenes for Nightmare Night in the Palace, so it might even make it into the story. And Celestia walking in at that moment, I imagine she had an expression much like she did at the end of the parasprite episode.
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Trixie, Cheery, and Spitfire were all agreeing that, yes, Twilight does indeed have "The Touch". If ya know what I mean, nudge nudge, wink wink. Unfortunately, it kinda falls flat with the new way images are done on the site. Screws up the extra emotes.
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Ah, now I see. I can't even get to the extra emotes, so you're way ahead of me on that.
I keep thinking this was all borrowed from some comedy-drama anime I can't recall yet. It all just fits that kooky dynamic so well.
Now Twilight Sparkle, light our darkest hour!!!
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Oh dear. Seems like the "nightmare" part of Nightmare Moon wants some revenge. I am eager to see how this plays out. Plain Sight will handle things, I'm sure. Besides, she's got a platoon of knights to work with now. Good stuff. Also wet Spitfire is best Spitfire.
However I must admit, the whole forest scene was a tad underwhelming. Cheerilee's heartfelt 'bon voyage' to her herd + AJ was sweet and all, but in the end it was almost completely unwarranted! All they did was walk over to near the Everfree Forest. They never even went in it! I was expecting a rather tense scene of them wandering about the Everfree but instead just got a cursory examination of the CMC's play area. And wasn't that 'expedition' supposed to take all day? Seemed awfully short to me. Anyways, just a little nitpick I had. Didn't feel like the buildup to this scene was warranted in the end.
frabjous!
It is a thing! Wiki said so!
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Celestia : Arise, Twilicorn Sparkle.
Twilight Sparkle : Celestia...
Nightmare Moon: NO! *Magic Missiles*
TS : This is the end of the road Nightmare!
I found one.....I finally found one.... a Lunashy......they said it was a myth.....but I found one....it's in th background of sorts BUT I NOW KNOW THAT IT IS POSSIBLE!
3503611 https://www.fimfiction.net/story/10474/four-of-two
Ah, so it was Plain Sight. Should've known.
Sadly, actual professional motorsports organisers have been just as bad.
hold up, did I miss something. 1: Celestia's just waiting for twilight (probably after alicorn hood) to date her. but most importantly 2: luna and fluttershy have been screwing off camera since the first book. what does she mean 'you were supposed to kiss her tonight' brah, they've been doing that since book one. It was very obvious, messy mains, the smells, etc. They are not good at hiding it.
Is this a mid second book retcon? LOL... what?
Also based on an earlier statement, I have funny feeling Celestia is Twilight's dad and knocked up her mom. so it makes the fact she won't deny wanting to ravage Twilight's little mare body more... well okay I like it more but I'm a weirdo.
11851498
It's amazing the things people read into a story that the author never put. And no, there is no retconning going on here. As for the last thing, that's an interesting story idea, especially since my headcanon is that alicorns embody all aspects of ponies, regardless of race or sex (check out my story, I've Been Waiting for A Girl Like You; no relation to the TSW series, so no spoilers in it).