was this rewritten or something like that? it appeared as unread again...

what the heck? I could have sworn I already read this.

Sorry, I re-uploaded them with better editing so people would find them easier to read.  There will be a new chapter posted shortly though, sorry for the confusion.  

interesting  guessing this is a TwiDerpy ship  that last ship with those two i saw was Rain Rain Come Again, that was before the author took that down

>>16294591629459   Yep, it is indeed a TwiDerpy ship...  I didn't think I had seen many, and somehow I just liked the idea, so... here we go!

>>16293541629354>>16292971629297  Sorry for the confusion on the repost on the first 2 chapters; I realized after posting that there is no 'edit' on chapters (at least that I've found) after you put them up... The only solution I could come up with to make them easier to follow for readers was to repost them entirely and remove the old blocky versions.   My apologies if that bothered anybody.

Apologies said on my faux pas, here is chapter 3, and I hope everybody enjoys it.  

again interesting

I find this much like the golden arches of McDonalds in the sole fact that I am indeed lovin' it. I hope to continue to do so, as you seem to know what you are doing. Godspeed, Remedy, godspeed.

I... I can't handle the cute... hnnng

OK. You got me interested. So far this looks like a really good TwiDerpy fic.

Too bad that there hasn't been that many good fic about these two, since most of them are bit... well... hasty. They don't take their time if you know what I mean.

But, looking forward how this story is going to develop

Very well written story with many many feels for all.

one question ...

Is there or will there ever be a Dinky in this fic?

Adorable unicorn fillies are adorable!

>>16317181631718 I hadn't planned on Dinky being in the story, being mature/romance, but the story is far from finished and you never know when inspiration might strike unexpectedly.    Likely not in THIS one though.  I may write another or a sequel though; who knows?  

And everybody, thanks for the kind comments, I'm glad you are enjoying it and that makes writing further even more alluring.  

This... needs work.  I like it, but it's a little... bland.

not bad

If she can't find anything, maybe the Princess can

Liking this quite a bit.

Write on!

Aroused Twilight is best Twilight.

I'm loving this story so far, keep up the great work!

I'm glad you're not just jumping into the clop for clop's sake, the buildup created by Twilight's affections and Derpy's somewhat slower rise to affection really makes me a happeh.

And........we have two idiot antagonists who don't see WHY the grey one is what she is.

again i am glad to see a TwiDerpy ship rarely see those on this site

Good going AJ! Even though you do not like Derpy personally you are capable of letting Twilight make her own decisions with her love life.

Don't you even think about interfering, Rainbow Dash!

Thanks everybody for the positive comments!  To be honest I wasn't sure how this was going to turn out as this is the first story I've ever written, but it's getting more and more fun to write!  Only got about 5 hours of sleep last night before I woke up with anticipation of what was going to be happening in the next chapters.  I have to say it's exciting to have people become invested in the characters like this.

Hard to believe I started this intending for it to be relatively short; it's taken off far more than I ever thought it would.

Here's hoping I can keep up with updates with relative frequency; I'll be hiding at home from the mobs on Black Friday so maybe I can get some extra work in that day.

Once again, thanks everybody for the comments, favorites, and likes!  It keeps me motivated knowing that people enjoy it.  

This shipping is my OTP. You have my faith and loyalty.

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Derpy's characterization is still awesome! Moar pls.

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>>16596761659676 And lo... They said MOAR!  And so it was.  

Derpy may not be comfortable with the risk, but if it was what her friend truly wanted she needed to be sure to not let the pegasus down.

Shouldn't this be Twilight?

Not enough... never enough... MOAR TWIDERP... That is the ship name, right??

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and lo...  they ask for even more

>>16599911659991 I actually DID mean Derpy, but I supposed it wasn't worded as clearly as it could have been.  Just reworded it so it'd be more obvious what the meaning was, thanks for the tip off.  

>>16600151660015 You know, I never really know how the ship name is agreed upon.  DerpLight sounds fun too though!    Either/or I like the pairing.  

BTW kudos to anybody if they actually realized any significance (not MLP related mind you) of the library section names.  

Nuremberg Code, Declaration of Helsinki, Declaration of Geneva, for any readers who feel like Googling. Assuming I'm right, anyway.

Helsinki......

I see what you did there.

>>16607461660746>>16607711660771  Hehe you got it...  all medical ethics codes...  

>>16600151660015 I always liked Twitzy, but that only works if you call her Ditzy doo . . . . so I think that DerpLight would be the appropriate title of shippage.

DerpLight.

Delicious, nutritious and tastes just like Muffins!

bravo bravo

They ain't nearly as accepting as you think they are, kiddo. Just ask your love interest.

>>16788551678855 It can be true - though at this point their intentions are good.  I am trying to stick true to the personalities of the M6 as I can, but then again, characters are multifaceted... we shall see how this develops.  

>>16788491678849 Thanks for the uplifts! Can't wait to get to the real centerpiece that I'm heading toward, but I don't want to sacrifice the quality just for instant gratification.  Sooooo.... it may be drawn out longer, but it at least will be (hopefully) good quality.  

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to be honest i hate to see stories end when they are this good, so feel free to draw it out as long as you want but don't sacrifice the quality is all i ask

I love this story! Congratulations

>>16809651680965 >>16909081690908  Thanks for the comments!  I guess I have no choice but to keep it going strong (not that there was any other option. )  If all goes as planned, chapter 8 will be out soon!

I really like how this story is going. I read literally zero clop stories for this show. I believe this is the 4th I've attempted. If I read a description and take that someone is just have sex just for the hell of it it completely turns me away from the story. I know I'm a minority because of the amount of clop that is constantly featured. Anyway I gave this story a shot because it has a lot of background and emotion between ponies, not just random sex. Romance Reports is the best "clop fic" I've read, but I think stories like that and this are just mature shipping. As long as this doesn't turn in to all out clopping every chapter like TAW's work, I'll continue reading.

>>16945381694538 There's going to be clop material, but it's not planned to be anywhere near the focus.  It is meant to follow along with the story and serve to further relationships (and of course be fun as well), but yeah, not gonna be there just for the sake of turning it into a giant clopfest.     Hope it keeps the story enjoyable without turning you away, and thanks for the favorite!

/slow claps  

bravo bravo bravo

>>17045181704518  Thanks for the feedback, to be honest I wasn't sure how this chapter would be received.  I've never written anything remotely to cloppish and didn't want it to feel rushed, so I'm hoping that's what I was able to convey.  

And then Spike walked into the room, snifed a couple of times and said "Twilight? That smell is back.... Ackkkk! Unsee! Unsee! Hang a sock on a doorknob or something! I'm sleeping in the basement. YOU clean it up this time!"

>>17046571704657

i will be honest its not the best clop i read but it sure as hell isn't the worst , i would have to say this clop was some what on par with most of the clop i have seen on this site

only thing I don't like about this is that you portray a brand new couple as having sex immediately. and that's mostly from exasperation from most other clop writers doing as much. to be fair, though . . . this is some pretty damn adorable cloppage.

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That was beautiful!

>>17052681705268 My apologies on the sudden elevation in the relationship; I saw the problem from the start but the only idea I got was either string it out over the course of years, or have them form a close emotional bond.  As the storyline doesn't take years I went with the latter. Hopefully when all is finished the timing and placement will make more sense; but for now, yep, super speedy escalation.  

This is a great story so far. Favorite couple! Can't wait for more.

I do take solace in how understanding Dash and AJ were for Derpy, you've definitely ,ade an emotional bond between the reader and Derpy's bully problems, etcetera. I must say I am very intrigued to how well your story telling goes, I will be watching this closely, and considerably taking mental notes on how well it is displayed, I have not noticed a single grammatical error (and I notice a lot of them in Shipping fics)! Thank you for creating a lucious storyline, something that reminded Derpy of me when I was younger, and still witness today (societal problems etc).

>>17053531705353>>17288471728847>>17327241732724 Thanks very much for the kind comments!

>>17327241732724  I am very glad I have been able to make it possible for readers to relate to the story and the character relationships.  That's what I was striving for and what made me change my mind from making this a short one-shot to a full-blown story; I couldn't leave the idea I had short without sacrificing emotion or content.  

I can't take credit for the grammatical content, that honor goes to slip_stitch, who has been kind enough to tolerate both proofreading my story and putting up with me for years IRL.  

Regardless, I am happy to hear that I have succeeded in describing the characters in a way that allows readers to become emotionally invested in them.  

DeLight shipping? I practically feel obligated to read this! (I shall do so later - sadly have no time right now :( )

Can't. Stop. Heart. From melting. So much love . Thak you good sir for another great chapter.

you dropped a d'waaaaaaaaaa bomb on us good author

bravo bravo

A DerpyXTwilight ship fic--it'll never work. *twenty minutes later*:

I can appreciate the heartfelt tenderness of the two mares, and Twilights understanding of how much anguish Derpy had to go through after making a new mare friend she thought she was never capable of befriending, or dating. I have become rather attached to Derpy (or Ditzy, I need a name that doesn't counteract her damned life, a real name. Not something that was pulled out of some bullys nut sack of insults) as her character really exemplifies the rules of compassion from other ponies, you can't help but feel sorrow and eventful sadness over her. A truly remarkable story.

You can really reach people with your characters, oh fine Author. Keep it up!

no muffins???

>>17436561743656 Clearly getting away from some more preconceived ideas!

>>17448701744870>>17436561743656  The muffins idea just kinda hit me - everybody just immediately gave her a default personality of nothing but 'Derp derp I like muffins!'  I wanted to actually give her a personality of her own, and hey, if I ate a muffin with worms in at and got insanely sick, I sure wouldn't want one again.  

>>17449791744979 Good good, originality ftw.

Poor Derpy. I wish I could give her a hug. </3

N-no muffins!?

I- I don't even, what...

This is...

You.....

An absolutly perfect shipping fanfic. I really love Derpy/Ditzy Doo fanfics in this kindand the descreption of Derpy's cutiemark is pure wonderful. Great job! And the muffin idea: i'm ok with that. I ask myself many time why anyone think Derpy is obsessed at muffins.

The characterization of the others and particularly Twilight is great too. E.g.  I really like Twilights train ride back home and what she think about her, Derpy and how anypony react.

Of course the other things in your tale honest genius. How you work with emotions, well timed appearance of anypony/dragon and a nice mix of mature and canon theme.

And the best thing: it's not over yet!

Good luck and may you touched by the muse anytime!

Can you feel the tonight!!!  

I just wanted to say thanks to everybody who has left feedback, favorited, and/or liked my story. I'm glad to know that people are enjoying it, and as such I've been working hard on getting the next chapter out.  It seems I'm as eager to write it as you are to read it.

Additionally feel free to leave constructive criticism if there's something that strikes you as not quite right - we learn through mistakes, so knowing any problems can help me improve.  Thanks everybody!  

arrggg! cliff hangers great chapter though good sir

>>17590081759008 Every story needs a good cliffhanger now and then. I already have the next chapter planned out though, so hopefully it should be here soon.   Very glad you liked it, though!

yaaaaaaaaaaay?

>get home from work

>see this updated

>get happy

>outta freaking nowhere cliffhanger to the face

and now i wait

>>17591521759152>>17591021759102>>17590081759008 I knew cliffhangers left with suspense, but my apologies on it - I didn't realize how despised they can be.   I shall try to keep the wait short for you as best I can.  Thankfully, I have the weekend off.  Doubletime it is!  

Did it work?

that ending is a little vague guess next chapter we will find out if it worked or not

bravo none the less

Both ponies staring straight ahead? Sounds like it worked!

>>17592631759263 its all good man its all good but i currently have 152 fics that are cliffhanging ....153 now and my brain meats need fuel to get me through work now i get to go off on my own imaginations but still can't wait for update

>>17605311760531 Ok, glad to know I'm at least not making you guys all , but regardless I'm as eager to get to the next part as you guys.  

I want MOAR

This is a beautiful story and I hope you keep up the good work :)

Simply amazing, I am very glad to have stumbled across this today.

Keep up the good work, good sir.

I hope her eyes are bettered by this but my eyes are leaking alot from this tale of love and trust

GODDAMN IT!!!!!

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Well shit.

wow just wow

>>17739391773939>>17739571773957>>17740411774041  I'm just curious on the feedback - is it in response to the chapter being bad, or not what you wanted, or did you like it as is?  Guess I'm just not clear if the frustration is because of the story or reactions for the characters... if that makes sense.    Regardless thanks for the responses, I just hope it didn't let you down or anything.

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i am more shocked than angry, no denying that this was a great chapter just shocked at where it went

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I'm angry at what happened to Derpy.

>>17740771774077 Thanks for the clarification - at original concept I thought that's what I wanted, but it just seemed too... trite.  Problem solved first try, and everyone lived happily ever after... just didn't seem to fit.

>>17740861774086 She does just seem to get trodden on a lot, I'll give you that. I guess she's the 'tragic heroine', but there's always hope for our winged friend.

OMG!....I just...wow.

That's just...

Really great story but still...

This made my night. I was pretty glad when Derpy's eyes didn't get fixed.

I mean, I don't hate Derpy, and I do want them to be fixed, but I like how you brought tragedy before happiness.

Most authors I know don't take that step, and make their stories shorter than they could be.

Pretty impressive for a weekends worth of work IMO. Ya still got me glued to the story even without the cliffhanger hahaha.

This chapter really does well in showing beauty in tragedy. It also really makes a much larger emotional investment between the characters and the readers. Well done.

Well, Applejack certainly deflated kinda quick. Too bad somepony nice and stupid will have it in her empty head that it's somepony else's fault that the spell got cast wrong.

As for the chapter itself, we need a word for really good but really sad.

The process you used for this story, almost certainly ripped a few emotions out of me. I'm of course insinuating that the story, really brought a tear to my eye after the process of the spell failing. Truly a gut wrenching moment. I do like how you showed how someone who has been blinded reacts to the feel of another person/pony touching them then skittishly jump. I am like that a good 98% of the time, and it doesn't contain itself to just foreign feelings, loud noises, pretty much anything scares me.

Anyway, your story truly has the emotional feeling other shipping fics lack, I commend you honourably for unlocking your imaginative potential in this story. I look forward to the next chapter, good day Remedy.