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For Rarity, the words left unsaid are often most meaningful. A life of standards and a sense of class has led her to assume that breaking these standards are wrong, and that reining in one's true emotions is a path to success.
However, something has been keeping her up at night and threatening to break the mold she has lived by throughout her life. Which will crack first, her presumed lifestyle or herself?
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So, first shipfic in a long while (Roughly a year now). I hope you enjoy it, and don't forget to point out any criticism or errors you may find! Since this has been my first work in many months, some areas are probably rusty.
Poor Rarity. She's fighting with herself.
I like the internal conflict, always have, always will. It's a good start, by chance could you tell me how often you think an update will take?
I hope updates come soon! I love this story, please say it is going to be updated fairly regularly? (Like, at least every two weeks?)
It's nice to see a great Rarilight fic pop-up. You're off to a great start and I can't wait for the next chapter.
Hmm, well, besides this next chapter coming up, I think consistent updates will be easy enough. Let's say, seven to ten days?
For this next one however, it will be a bit difficult. I have school starting soon (AKA in 11 hours), so that will be a bit of a drag until I can get my bearings. Besides that I just have to wrap up a few album submissions and then I should be good!
All I'm saying is, is that Chapter 2 may be cutting it a bit close to the two week mark. We'll see.
beating around the bush, a tactic used by many people, myself included. She's seeking approval from everyone, as weird as that sounds its exactly why she cannot force herself to go beyond those 'rules' set by herself, but the beating of said bushes gets things through (usually) allowing others to figure out what they are really thinking.
And I sound like a psychologist...
This story intrigues me, keep going, I want to see where you take this.
Following.
This intrigues me. I've never read a Rarilight fic before and I think this is pretty nice start so far.
Well that began interestingly enough. Spin the bottle
I really liked Rarity's reaction and descriptions for kissing RD 
I want to see more of Rarity fighting with maintaining her high standards and her love for Twilight. Can't wait for the next chapter.
Cute and good but is there no continuation? it deserves a more happy ending, but its still good.
Hm, I never really put much thought into Rarilight before. But you got me thinking it just might work. Keep it up my good sir.
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it says incomplete.
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Oh didnt notice thanks for the reminder.
Cannot wait to read! I'm a huge fan of Rarilight stories. ( I'm upploading this comment from my iPod )
Also, I love the idea about music mixed with story. University Days and Two's Company both have this kind of idea going.
How very intriguing.
A good start with a lot of potential. I'll be watching.
Write on!
Intriguing, Rarity is now exhibiting traits that are just so, Rarity, and so, everypony in general, we all need the approval of others before our subconscious mind will allow us to preform what ever it is we want to do. You have done a magnificent job capturing this aspect, please continue this, I love it.
Yay for consecutive free-nights! Thank god I got a break, or else this chapter would have not been finished for a week.
As the story evolves, so does my subconscious view on writing it. I'm sorry if you notice the "feel" of the story is changing a little too quickly, but I'm still trying to mold the correct palette of emotions for this story. Not all the foreseeable events have been planned out, but I'm making my way through them, and as I do, I have to occasionally make adjustments so I can compliment further events.
Enjoy!
And then a Cliffhanger
Well besides the Cliffhanger (i hate thoose
), it was a very good chapter.
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I don't blame you! But, from my perspective, it was the best way to end the chapter without divulging so much info that the next chapter would be lopsided. (If I went any further, it would have interrupted the flow for chapter 3).
CUTE! cant wait for the rest!
Cliff hangers are the only way to end chapters. :P I like how this is going.
The bomb has been dropped. Now for the glorious explosion that cascades into the next chapters.
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Gosh darn Cliffhangers.
chocolate-covered strawberries... kinky
Damn, that took some doing....
If I'm reading Fluttershy right, I'm betting she already had something of an inkling of exactly what Rarity was building up to. I can't really see her finding it a bad thing, but then I might be reading her wrong. 
Regardless, an excellent chapter.
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You bet it's kinky, because it's a foreshadowing device for all the borderline clop I have coming up (that was a joke).
Excellent, your writing style is great, however the cliffhanger is a real killjoy, but this is still great. Keep writing!
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i know that cliffhangers are popular, and most of the time necessary.
Still doesn't mean i have to like them
Dat cliff
Raritwi, Twirity, or whatever it's called has always been one of my favorite ships, and I LOVE the way that this fic is done. Cannot wait for the next chapter! Please finish soon, that cliff hanger is WAY worse than anything I've done.
I'm working on it! I just have to wrap up some music work and some school-related writing before I can pound out the final 2,000 words or so. Expect something by mid-week.
Cliche ending is cliche.
To be honest, this chapter was a little choppy because I originally had a lot more words in it (~5,500), but I ended up taking out a lot of "fluff" because it was all rather useless and cumbersome.
It's also a brick of dialogue, but that's to compensate for the next chapter. Sorry if it bores you.
Well, at least Rarity knows she's got a foothold with Twilight.
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That's certainly better than the cliche hooking up while drunk.
also, charity, heh
Well done, Rarity.
That was the honourable thing to do. 
Haven't even read it. Can already tell that it's a Rarity x Twilight ship fic. Starts thinking. Fuck, what if Spike finds them making out? Most awkward tailboner ever.
Thumbs up and favorited. The tension and inner dialogue is just right. I wonder if Rarity realizes that Twilight essentially is that little piece of Royalty she always dreamed of? Bearer of the Element of Magic, personal pupil of Celestia, saved Equestria more than once, sister to Canterlot's Captain of the Guard, sister in law to Princess Cadance (which technically makes Shining Armor a Prince as well)...
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Shush don't think too deeply into this because your guesses are cutting it close! xD
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Woo hoo! I'm glad someone caught that.
Halcyon441, eh? I See what you did thar. dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Twilight_Sparkle_lolface.png
Cliches get that way because they are used. They are used because, when not abused, they are very effective and pleasing.
So! Nothing wrong with a cliche ending when used right. You used it right.
Plus, it was sweet.
I am very much liking this story. Especially much with how much it's focusing on Rarity's perceptions and emotions, and rendering them understandable even in this unusual situation. Bear in mind, I don't really identify with Rarity at all- but I do have a lot of respect for her as a character. Kind of like Rainbow Dash or Fluttershy, I just don't have a grip on how she thinks, but I can see that she's portrayed as a whole person and while I can't necessarily say why something is or is not consistent with her character, I can identify it as consistent or not. This whole story is very consistent with its characters, and I appreciate that a lot.
Also the emotions, because they're there and they're pleasing, but they're not so heavy-handed as to come off all syrupy.
In short- well done, good use of cliche prevents tiredness of cliche, like the story, write on!
The only error I found in this story was this little segment in chapter 1.
That should be "You're."
Other than that, I think it's great so far
Rarity's self-doubt is really well portrayed; being so set on appearances can be quite the effective flaw when writing fics like this.
Oh, and you wrote Rennaisance of the Moon too, didn't you? I do believe you're in for a Watch dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Lyra_smile.png
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Leaving little fun tidbits throughout the story is something I love to do. Expect more!
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Thanks! Trying to keep the characterization consistent with what's canon is one of my biggest worries.
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Oh, yep, that's my bad! And yeah, Renaissance of the Moon was my first ponyfic (Such a long time ago).
You tease!
And the second I read Charity, I knew you did that on purpose.
Methinks this would be appropriate.
awesome story is awesome! just wanted to let you know keep it up!
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Thanks! I'm about 65 - 70% done with the next chapter, so if not tomorrow, then over the weekend the next one will pop up!
EDIT: Errmm, scratch that. Some stuff has popped up that I have to deal with.
1349741 Hope it's nothing serious. Looking forward to the next chapter.