Chapter 8
The First Day
Onyx looked around him, he wanted to throw up, when Axandrea had said that everypony here ate meat, he never had thought that it would be raw meat! Some gryphons at his table were eating raw fish, others ate raw rabbits and Axandrea was eating... something... he did not know what it was but the smell was horrible. The table was covered in little pieces of flesh and organs, it made him sick, but he didn’t show it because he wanted to look brave in-front of her.
“So Onyx, are you sure you don’t want to try it” Axandrea asked, showing him the thing she held.
“Heh Heh Heh, thank you, but no thank, the sandwich was enough, I’m full” Onyx answered back, trying not to show the horror in his face. The only thing Onyx wanted right now, is an empty bag to throw up in.
The bells finally rang and all the students went back to class, Onyx looked at his schedule, the next class was P.E.
“Well, maybe this time class will be fun.
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Onyx was waiting for the teacher to stop talking. He was a HUGE earth pony named Legend, he has a olive green coat, with a dark mane, and a dragon skull for cutie mark. He was talking about the safety rules, about how he would teach them, about how he had became a sports teacher, and about how he earned his cutie mark. It was booriiinnggg.
“And then, I found a letter where it was written The cake is a lie. Can you imagine how angry I was to have run around the entire city for nothing?” If Onyx had to choose between watching Axandrea eat, or listen to the teacher for five more minutes, he would choose the first one, by far. Finally the teacher stopped talking.
“Okay now you will team up in a group of 2. Okay...lets see... alright, I will make the teams myself and give you a color. The team who will have the most points at the end of the class will win something.” The teacher started to split up the students, Onyx was hoping to be with Axandrea, but unfortunately she was sent with a other gryphon named Glide. Onyx was teamed with the pony named Vallis, and he was happy about that because maybe he would be able learn more about him. they both took the little flag of color the teacher have gave them, Onyx and Valiis were the red team. Onyx felt the hoof of a pony, looking back it was the hoof of Vallis, who took off his shades.
“Ready to wubs the other, partner?” He asked with a smile.
“Yeah sure!” Onyx answered back even thought he had no idea what ‘wubs’ meant.
The test was easy, the first one was just a simple test to know the equilibrium of each other.
Then it was the race test, this one Onyx finish last because unlike all the other students, he walked on 2 legs, and running with four legs is faster than running with 2, even if he finished last. Vallis cheered him on while the race was going. The next test was climbing, a rope was suspended from the ceiling and one of the partners needed to climb it and touch the roof. This time, Onyx was the winner by far, since he looks like a monkey, and with that point, him and Vallis had reached second place.
Never before had Onyx felt so good, he could feel all his muscles move independently, hear his heartbeat pushing blood throughout his body, the adrenaline flowing in his veins making him alert to all movements around him. The teacher was in-front of the class, all the students were sitting at the side of the room watching the teacher explain the rules of the last test. Only the top 3 teams are able to do the next test and Onyx was in the first three. Him and Vallis are in second place, the third place was Lightning and Arcanus, and the first team was Aurora and Orion.
“Alright, when I say go, one member of each team will run to get that flag, then they will need to give it to their partner, when your partner has the flag, they will have to climb this pole and put the flag at the top, the first team to do all that will wins, and remember, no magic, no wings, just your legs!”
Onyx looked at Vallis and asked “Do you think you can do the first part, like you have seen, I’m not the best one for racing, but I can climb.” Onyx asked, Vallis poked him playfully with a large smile
“Don’t worry partner, You can do the climbing, I’ll do the running, sounds good?” asked Vallis, Onyx just nodded. They both looked at the 2 other teams expectantly, until the teacher asked the Person/pony that will be running to take their marks. Onyx along with 1 member from each team stepped up to take their marks
“Ready? Three... Two... One... GO!”
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“WE WIN WE WIN WE WIN!” Onyx and Vallis hugged each other (Totally no homo), They won the last test, Onyx secretly wished that the school ended now, this way he would be able to tell his mom how he won, he was so excited.
The second place was Aurora and Orion, who both walked toward the winners.
“Nice competition, It was really impressive how you used that thing around your hoof to have a better grip on the rope!” Orion complimented. He was the one in his team that climbed the rope
“Well these are called fingers, and thanks! You and your sister were hard to beat” Onyx said with real enthusiasm.
Aurora started talking,“We should hang both hand out sometime, I came here to make friends, and you two look like some good ponies” Onyx was smiling, this day he didn’t just start school, but he made 4 friends, Blueblood was wrong and it was fine for Onyx.
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The bell had finally rung, informing the students that school has ended. Onyx was on his way to the castle, thinking about what he would do when he got home. First he would show Twilight all that he had learned today, and tell his mother about the competition and how he had won, but when Onyx reached the entrance of the throne room where his mother was generally, 2 guards blocked him at the entrance.
“Why can’t I go see mommy?” Onyx asked, hoping that it was nothing too important.
“Your mother has a meeting with the king of the gryphon kingdom, your highness... She clearly stated that she didn’t want to be disturbed.” Onyx knew that sometimes his mother had royal duty to do, even if he knew that, he felt that it was stupid that he couldn’t go talk to his mom right now, so he waited in his room, hoping that Twilight would come soon.
i see what you did ther GLaDOS
Onyx and Vallis
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Good chapter
No it was a good chapter. And ya a new cover would be nice.
First, it's a good chapter. Second, I think your current cover art is good enough.
Why was the chapter horrible to write?
The cake is a lie, I see what you did there, and this chapter wasn't bad, as for your cover art; it's not that bad, no need to change right now when this story is still young. maybe later when you make progress with the story
2014526 He didn't have any inspiration, luckily me and his editor john helped him, still hard to write for him probably, I don't know, as I'm not him. But thats what he told us.
2014526
idk, no inspiration for this one, i have spent a full night on it, and only have done 1k word
so is that all the OCs you are going to use or are you going to introduce more on the second day?
2014559
Oh. Well that does tend to happen with filler chapters.
Anyway, next time this happens you should take much more time to gather ideas. Just one night isn't really enough.
Well, good luck with writing the next one.
I don't know what exactly, but it felt rushed and the was parted up a little too much. I feel that this chapter was lacking compared to the others.
2014591
its is i got no inspiration for this one, but the one i wrote right now will be much better
nice work dude. it felt a tad rushed, but those things happen when you write, so don't worry about it too much. Looking forward to the next chapter.
2014618 I know I replied with short and fast ones instead of long and slow ones, but above all else.... quality is better than quantity!
So just take your time. The story I'm helping proofreading for released a chapter on nearly 8k, but we didn't really before we (author, editor and I) were all satisfied with it (after almost 3 months).
If it means we're getting better and not longer chapters, I think no one will complain.
2014457>>2014719
did have do a yugioh reference
2014727 Yugioh abridged yes.
2014735
where
There will be sads won't there
Or do the griffins know about humans
2014747 I had to insert that when I did the proofreading, It was just too funny to pass up.
"they are called fingers" How the fuck would he know that?
So will there be more OCs on his second day or is that it for OCs?
2014457 Lol dude
Interesting.
Do continue
2014719at the end ALL OF THE HOMO. I died
any chance to addmore OCs ?
loving the atory so far!
New chapter! Sorry for rushing you earlier silver fang. I just couldn't wait to see Onyx shove it in Blueblood's face he had friends
2015399
its fine and dont worry, blueblood will be punish...but not now
2014905m they probably have monkeys there
2012400 I get a migraine, and that usually happens when my mom is watching a particularly loud movie in the other room, so, it really sucks.
So, when will you be able to put Crimson in there? You said that it would be this chapter, but, I didn't see her...
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Silver, a proof reader isn't made for just right clicking and correcting words. They are used for sentence restructuring, and fixing errors such as misused past tense/present tense words.
Aurora Orion, rainbow factory!!!! I like the reference.
I'll just leave this here...
2015503
the boy is like, 5 to 7. i don't think he know what "homo" is.
i thought "legend" was master chief's pony name
2018147
They dont know, but my proof reader have add this reference for the fun2019030
how did you know
2019151 because im so smartakal
2019191
well if you are so smart, i dare you to try to found where come from the Onyx name
have fun
2019215 do you mean why onyx is named onyx
2019239
he named Onyx because the color of his hair, but where the name Onyx come from? (i did not get this name from pokemon)
2019292 lets see his hair is black, it many be a reference to the hip hop group, the character onyx from monsterful (great web comic the creator is a brony), the comic book character from batman<( i google that). Im wrong on all accounts aren't I
2019325
eeyup
2019330 Molag? No, no... Little Tim, the toymaker's son? The ghost of King Lysandus? Or... Yes! Stanley, that talking grapefruit from Passwall
2019338
Not even close
2019343 you don't get the joke do you owell th08.deviantart.net/fs70/200H/i/2013/016/9/f/sheogorath__you_mad__bro__by_missvulture93-d5rp2ir.png
2019363
i did get the joke...but i did not show it