Chapter 10
Murder
Raynor was following Strong Shield since the event at the ice cream shop a couple of minutes ago, hidden in a cart, he was replaying in his head all that had happened. He had seen everything; how Strong Shield talked to Onyx about the Gryphon Empire, he had seen Strong Shield get payed by a gryphon, but strong shield refused, saying that he didn’t want Onyx in the castle. Never would he would have thought Strong Shield to be a traitor, when Raynor was still in the Royal guard, Strong Shield was already a captain, and he was the most loyal guard ever.
Raynor sighed, this mission was supposed to be the most relaxing mission he could ever have, watching a 7 year old foal, but now his mission has turned into a dangerous one. He couldn’t let Celestia lose her unique foal to a traitor like Strong Shield.
Raynor followed Strong Shield until he turned into a dark alley.
“Why is it always in a dark alley that the bad ponies go into? It’s so cliché.” he whispered to himself.
He silently turned behind a corner and hid. He looked around for Strong Shield, hoping to find him. But unfortunately he did not see Strong Shield anymore. Raynor looked around hurriedly, sweat from his nervousness obstructing his view.
‘But where is he?’ he thought to himself. He crawled out of is hiding place and walked in the alley, trying to spot where Strong Shield could have gone. Until he felt a presence behind him slowly approaching him, he quickly turned around, only to see Strong Shield holding a crossbow to Raynor’s face.
“Well well, its seems that the old Raynor is back into business. Why are you stalking me? I didn’t know your barn door swings that way.” He taunted, keeping aim the at Raynor.
“Even if you were the last pony on Equestria, I would never look at you in that way, your coat color is really too much... white for me.” Answered back Raynor, trying to buy time to find something to defend himself.
“Awww sorry to hear that.” Strong Shield mocked, still holding the crossbow with his magic. He walked in the direction of Raynor. “So what will you do now? I guess if you’re following me it’s because you heard what happened at the restaurant... Am I right?” Raynor was breathing heavily, he didn’t bring the weapon for this mission, he thought it would be easy, he had no way to fly the hay out of there before Strong Shield would shoot him, nothing in this alley had the potential to block the bolt.
“You know, we could team up, all I want to do is protect the kingdom” Raynor glared at Strong Shield
“And how in the hay, will sending the prince into the gryphon kingdom help Equestria?”
“Hahah should I really explain? Celestia is weak, she has this creature with her. What would happen if somepony took him hostage? Celestia would easily give anything to whoever took him.”
“And you think the better solution for this situation is to give Onyx to the more agressive kingdom of the 5? I know that the guards could be stupid but YOU win the prize titled ‘Biggest asshole In Equestria’ and ‘most stupid guard of the year.’” Strong Shield didn’t wait any longer, He developed a devilish grin, then he shot the bolt out of his crossbow in the direction of Raynor. Raynor tried to dodge it but Strong Shield was too close when he shot the bolt. Time seemed to flow slowly, as he felt his skin tear apart, cell by cell. He fell, clutching the wound that the bolt caused, praying to Celestia for help The metallic flavor of blood enveloping his mouth. As the Darkness started forming in his eyes he let out his last few words “F-F-Fuck... Y-You...” Then the darkness swallowed him, Taking him to the scale in Tartarus, to see whether or not he would go to elysium.
“Pfft, what a loss, you could have helped me. But you prefer to let the kingdom of Celestia rest in the princes claws.” Strong Shield turned to walk out of the alley but a gryphon blocked his path.
“I saw you take care of him” Said the emperor of the gryphon empire who was wearing his armor.
“Yes, he saw me talking with Onyx, I didn’t have a choice.” Answered back Strong Shield, nervously
“Poor little pegasus, so young.” The king swiftly grabbed his sword, his sword was in fact, a dragon scale cut in form of a sword, and struck the Strong Shield’s crossbow out of his magic, then with his claw, he grabbed him by the throat and threw him against the wall. Strong Shield tried to regain his composure but the king was already on him, with his sword on his throat.
“Bu...but why...?” Asked Strong Shield. The gryphon emperor start to laugh.
“Why? Strong Shield, Tell me this, have you ever seen a pony and a gryphon allied? I can’t be seen allied to a weak pony. You have played your role perfect, and I applaud you for that, now I don’t need you anymore. Don’t worry, I will tell Celestia that you have fought like a true hero versus the “thief” but unfortunately I have come here too late and only found your dead body.” Strong Shield was trying to get away from the emperor but the emperor’s grip was stronger.
“Good bye little pony, I wish you a good travel to Tartarus.” Then the emperor Put pressure on his sword, pushing the metallic blade into Strong Shield’s throat, slicing the sword the emperor cut the throat of Strong Shield, the blood sprayed out of Strong Shield like a fountain, Strong shield was trying to cover up the cut with his hoof to stop the bleeding, but the cut was too deep. When finally his body stopped moving, the emperor cleaned his weapon on the dead body of the ex-captain, before he walked away into the direction of the castle.
So... I'm gonna be a bitch... First comment motherfucker. YEAH
that last line in the authors notes confudles me
2033574 He meant only one person who read figured out who onyx will love.
Does Blackwing know you are using his character?
One good guy dies
One bad guy dies
One asshole lives
FUCK
O.o umm Celestia 2 people overseeing your son just died simultaneously...take the hint, smite the EMPRAH....oh god- I mean emprah SHIT!, does that make me heretical...NOOOOOOOO!!!!! how will I get my EMPRAH brand muffins now!
2033584 ... I hope you know that its not his character. With your logic your saying if someone has the same name as you, they are copying you. It's just a name, not the same character
ah i died
OH SHIT!! Take cover for shit is about to hit the fan.
2033613 It was meant as a joke.
2033657 Well... Now I look like a fucking idiot :/ Lol
2033670 I actually get this a lot. It's hard to imply a certain tone when only using letters and I didn't exactly put on an emoticon. This was far from the most obvious time I've made a joke and someone doesn't get it. It's not like I'm trolling or making an obscure reference but some people really blow up until I tell them it was just a joke.
2033698 Ahh, Yeah I see that problem, I didn't try to blow up, but Once again, typing makes it hard to give out emotions, So I see were you are coming from
Wow shit is gonna go bad real fast for the feathered fools!
Wait, I thought the griffon ruler was a king, not an emperor.
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I'm so happy that Shield is dead. I'm sad that Raynor died. But the thing that hurts the most is that Gryffin will get away with it....
for now
PLease dont have him go with the griffons!!!! please!!!
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aparently i cant
2033915 I can't ... what exactly?
If Onyx goes with the grffins, you die.
Good story so far, but this chapter felt a bit rushed for me. Still looking forward to the rest of it though!
Not enough detail, and if onyx goose with the asshole gryphions a lot of people will probably stop reading soooo........ yea.....
2033095-uses adrenaline boost- GET BACK HERE!
2034038 Well... Then were is the conflict in the story? If people stop reading the story because of that then they should probably not read a story ever again. If you want to have a good story you need conflict. Otherwise its just a 2 Dimension story that sucks.
By any chance the scene in the alleyway with Strong Shield and Raynod was based off DC, specific the scene of Maxwell Lord about to kill the second Bluebettle?
Also I feel a little bad for Raynod, even do he sound a little rapie, maybe in the next chapter you will tell why he is the only pony that can be disrespected with Celestia.
Wait, if Strong Shield is death, then Onyx doesn't have a body guard anymore and they will have to find out very soon. Of course Celestia will never buy the lie of the king one bit. So lets see…a panic mother, an asshole king going after her son, and his body guard just end up death…yeah, Onyx will sleep in her mother chambers again. I hoped she don't exaggerated and…hey wait a minuted, that is exactly what Onyx want with all his heard, spend as much time with his mother as possible, and with Twilight he will even get some pony to play with,while at it. JAJAJA the plan of the king just back fire. Oh the irony.
P.S: Tomorrow in the night will you will post a new chapter?
2033633So you're Raynor? 'Cause if you were Strong Shield... No offense, but he was a dick and he really had that coming.
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YO NEVER SAY I CANNOT KILL THIS ONE
*RUN LIKE IF I HAVE CELSTA HERSELF AFTER ME*
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motherbucker*
PlEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEESSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE Dont make Onix go with the Griphion, or how ever you spell that stupid word
2034150FIRST OFF, I HADN'T READ THE NEW CHAPTER! SECOND, YOU STILL NEED TO GET BACK HERE! THIRD, I LIKE SHOUTING!
2033633 Don't feel sad, The whole time he was writing silver kept saying "Goodbye raynor, you were good character"
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<- see the scar over my oc? i'm raynor
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2034308Aw, I'm sad to see that you died. But hell, maybe the author conveniently tells Celestia through amazing 4th wall breaking/authorizing powers that Raynor is dying and she saves him. Miracles happen. Though I just pray that she takes JUST long enough so that Strong Shield is just kicking the bucket from blood loss.
2034313 Heres an actual skype message he sent me
[4:50:02 PM] Asshat Mctittyfuck: Yeah
[4:50:09 PM] Silver_fang: thx
[5:05:17 PM] Silver_fang: bye bye Raynor, you where a good character =(
Good bye Strong Shield, you will not be missed.
And yeah I can make you a cover, Although I'll need some information so PM me about it if you're interested.
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because i have say that is the gryphon EMPIRE, so Ggyffin the gryphon is an emperor not a king.....
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if all go good, yes the next chapter will be tomorow night
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........Celestia will protect me from you
hum...i will help him to kill you if you send Onyx with the gryphon
well fuck
2034599 Okay, I was just a bit confused. Thank you
BhI'm actually hoping that he does go' gets baddass training but kills the emporor/excapes and so insues baddassery
2034682 Thank you! No one else thinks so! But I do. Tank you for being insightful
2034791it would be a good story line to follow then have issues and can only relate to Luna or something of simmler effect ...also I'm tired of humans getting hurt in equestria
¡¡¡Two thumbs way way up!!!
aw, what the- why didn't you drag on strong shield's death a little longer? or at least detailed it a bit more? it was great, but i really wanted to see him get mutilated a bit, or at least get burned to death or something!
Strong Shield dead .
OH SNAP!
Lets look this over.
1.Strong Shield-Dead
2.Raynor-Dead
3.Destroyed crossbow
4.One killed by Blade.
5.Visiting gryphon emperor
My deduction is:One got shot by the other and then they got jumped, his crossbow was destroyed and he was killed with a knife or sword. Strong Shield(I hope you burn) is personal guard of Onyx and the emperor is trying to get onyx. As well as Celestia asking Raynor(R.I.P) to watch over Onyx. Onyx talked to Strong Shield(Burn! ) about the Gryphon Empire.
This is a tad suspicious...or I'm being over analytic...meh.
Anyways, nice chapter, looking forward to the next chapter and smack Celestia upside the head for me if she doesn't figure out what happened.
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Only one huh. I'm thinking Twinyx
is there a chance that raynor will live?
Celesita could just as easily render the land to the base earth, storm the gates of Tartarus and lay siege to Tirek's castle to get him back. To be honest I am more likely to believe that she would go "Flaming Goddess of Death" than to surrender. Just ask Chrysalis.
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YOU!! what are you doing there
Calm down, you dont want him to reveal your name to everypony right?
touché.......but what he is doing here
he read the story......like everypony else......Strong Shield.......maybe....and i say maybe i have create this character after reading your story........i'm not sure