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  • E To Be Different

    When a foal is sent flying with the changelings, Chrysalis takes it upon herself to care for the foal. The pony will grow up and learn of the changeling's struggle as she journeys throughout Equestria.
    20,194 words · 1,138 views  ·  83  ·  1
  • E Cutting Strings

    Marie is anything but a normal puppet. Brought to life by Flim and Flam, she gets the chance to experience something no other marionette will ever experience.
    14,662 words · 412 views  ·  29  ·  0
  • T Tale Chasing

    My life was normal until some girl drops into my life, claiming she's from Equestria. At this point, you're probably wondering which pony I met. Instead of some girl saying she's a pony, I get a girl who acts literally like a dog.
    21,207 words · 677 views  ·  36  ·  1
  • E The Soldier, the Princess, and the Unicorn

    Twilight gets a gift from Shining Armor. A toy unicorn soldier. But what happens when she goes on an adventure with said toy, who becomes alive.
    6,744 words · 730 views  ·  20  ·  0
  • T Live a Little

    A zombie walks into Ponyville. Can Fluttershy help it out when no one is willing to give it a chance?
    8,642 words · 215 views  ·  25  ·  1
  • E Cloudy with a Chance of Sunshine

    Sunny wants a pet. Luna wants a friend. Can these two find what they're looking for?
    4,553 words · 357 views  ·  28  ·  3

Blog Posts17

  • 21w, 6d
    The Current Status

    No, I'm not back to writing just yet. My hectic life has finally calmed down... a little. Now, I'm off to Asia for vacation. I have not edited anything since the last time I posted a blog. I've been busy. No, I have not written any new chapters for any of the currently published stories. Writing stories isn't coming to me as quick anymore, so I have been stuck in this slow pace of writing. I have some ideas in my head I want to get out, but as I've said before, it's been going slowly. Expect to see a new story out sooner or later (probably later). As for updating stories, I'm not sure when's the next update. Again, I've been busy. If you have any questions or just want to talk, you can just send me a message. If you're going to ask about updates, I can't really give you a date.

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  • 34w, 5d

    I finally got one chapter of one story (Cutting Strings) out. And that's as far as I got with the little time I have. Seriously, that chapter has been sitting on my desktop for months, nearly finished. I want to update the other stories, but my schedule just got busier (I didn't even know that was possible until now). So I'm going to be practically dead for the next few months. Maybe I'll get lucky and write out an entire story before my inspiration and I die. Who knows?

    1 comments · 74 views
  • 46w, 5d
    So yeah...

    Sorry to those who have been following me for story updates. I've been less active on Fimfiction as of late and even less active when it comes to writing. Things have been kind of hectic on my end. As for story updates... uh, don't expect anything soon. I have three stories that are in the progress of being written (and by that, I mean I wrote a couple hundred words then stopped).

    For Follow the Melody, I'm sorry to disappoint you followers but I'm not making much headway in that story. In the first place, I can't even fathom how I'm still getting faves for that story. Seriously, for a first story, I didn't expect it to get that many likes or views. And you know how people's tastes change over a long period of time? I looked over the first few chapters of the revision, and I went: "Wow, did I used to write like this? Come on, I edited this months ago." It's the little things that rile me up when it comes to writing, like diction or word choice. I don't mean to make it sound completely bad. There were some bits I liked about my writing that still stuck after the revision, like the characters. Though, some could use a slight adjustment. However, the one thing that irks me more than anything was the idea I based it off of a HiE, human-to-pony transformation, age-changing story? It's all over the place--the carpet, the walls, the ceiling--everywhere. I would like to start over, but then that would require a lot of time. I mean a lot. That, and if I did restart (again), I'd have to take out  most of the musical element in the story (so no lyrics because site rules and all that) and I would deviate from the show's plot more, meaning more focus on Lyle and Lyra.

    You know, with the way I talk about my story, it's like I'm reviewing someone else's story, and in a way, that's true. Your past and present self are two completely different people because your writing changes and so do you.

    Okay, so with the Follow the Melody rant out of the way... Cuttings Strings is probably the next story to be updated. Tale Chasing will most likely undergo a re-write as well (not comfortable with pacing). CwaCoS might be updated because I still like playing around with that idea. To Be Different won't be updated for a while since I just updated it recently. I still have a bunch of ideas bouncing around in my head, and I might end up putting everything else on hold to write it. Who knows? I have a short attention span.

    On another note, I edit other people's works here and there. If you ask, I might be able to take a look at it... maybe. Short attention span, remember? It takes me a long time to finish reading something, even longer if the idea doesn't grab my attention. So when it comes to editing, one-shots are more of my thing, I guess. Also, I'm mostly busy during the day, so I'll end up writing and reading something at 2 AM in the morning.

    On a completely unrelated note, it's fun to draw things. I found out about this when I filled a notebook completely with doodles when I should have been listening to a lecture.

    So, questions, comments, or images before I disappear again for who knows how long?

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  • 57w, 20h
    One Year

    So... hi. As you can see from this blog, I'm not dead, even though my last blog post was months ago. I've been pretty busy lately (and still am), which is why there's been a severe lack of updates and whatnot. It's been a year since I first published Follow the Melody, and since then, it has gotten more favorites and upvotes than I had originally anticipated. Over the past year, I've learned a lot about writing and even got to know some cool people over this site. I can't believe a simple idea in my head led to me becoming a writer. I mean, seriously? I used to hate writing in any form--the keyword there being used to. The me back then wouldn't even pick up a book unless compelled to do so.

    Anyway, back to what I was saying before. Follow the Melody was the first story I ever wrote. A lot of things have changed since I first wrote that story, including my taste in fiction. Going back to my story and reading it now, I can clearly see that I had no idea where I was going with the story. I pretty much just filled a hat full of ideas, grabbed a handful of those ideas, and slapped them onto a document and made words without really knowing what I was doing. I don't even remember if I had a plot going on... So yeah, I can't help but cringe at what I wrote, not because I had horrible grammar (though when I went back to revise, there were numerous grammatical errors and lots of awkwardly phrased sentences) but because the idea doesn't seem as appealing as it did back then. This basically sums up why the story has been on a long hiatus; I just lost interest in the current plot is has now. Will I ever get back to it? Maybe someday, but this story is going to need more than just duct tape to fix it, so I don't know when. So, sorry about the lack of activity.

    Other stories I'm currently working on, or story I should say, is Cutting Strings, which took way too long to publish the last chapter (approximately two to three months). Here's the thing about editing your own story. After going through it once, you'd think, "Finally, it should be good now."

    But then, a thought creeps into your mind saying, "Are you sure it's good now?"

    And then, you go, "Hmm, maybe I should check it just one more time."

    All of a sudden, you start finding mistakes you never caught on the first run through. But then it gets late, so you hold off publishing the story for a few more days. When you finally come back to it, you re-read what you wrote, and all of sudden, you go: "Huh? Wait, this doesn't sound right." You read your sentences out loud, and you become aware that the dialogue sounds very unnatural. "Great, now I have to redo some of the dialogue."

    So you fix the dialogue, and while you're at it, you fix some awkward sentences along the way, maybe embellish some scenes and use some literary devices and rhetorical techniques to improve the story telling. After fiddling around with syntax, you think you're finally finished. It looks great in your eyes, but then again, your eyes aren't reliable. But wait, there's a solution for that! Find someone who's interested to look at it. Scour the internet for those brave enough to take on the challenge of reading your story and offering insightful critique. At long last, you find someone willing (by the way, thanks guys). You thank the heavens that someone was able to clean up your pile of horse words and help you make your story decent.

    "Are you done now?" asks that little part of your brain that's been begging to see the view counter go up.

    You think you're done, and just when you're about to press the "publish" button. You stop. You remember that editors and pre-readers are human too. Shocking, right? Maybe one more look can't hurt. Then, the vicious cycle of reading and editing starts all over again in an attempt to create something perfect--that unattainable perfection. Then again, nothing is ever perfect, like the moon that people once believed was perfectly round. Thanks Galileo. Way to ruin that perfect image... Yet, we still look at the moon and admire its natural beauty despite its imperfections and crater-covered face.

    Wow, I really digressed from what I was talking about. Getting back on track to my status, it's a long process for me to writing something. My weekly story update became two weeks, which slowly becomes three weeks, then a month, then three months... You get the idea. I probably shouldn't have written so many stories, but my brain can't stay on one story too long! I go nuts, especially with my process of writing a story! Not only that, but I also draw my own cover art, and some of them could really use a new one. With real life filling up most of my time, I don't have much time on my hands as I used to.

    And speaking of real life, I should end my blog here. Thanks for the follows and favorites, likes and comments.

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  • 69w, 3d
    Is that an update?

    Yes. Yes, it is... Sort of... I haven't updated Follow the Melody in months since I've been editing it, and when you read something that's 140,000 words long over and over again, you'll want to bash your head against the keyboard or something. The story doesn't really change much, I just fixed grammar, added a scene or two to make parts more entertaining, and took out the prologue, in favor of revealing the background gradually. If you know what happens in each chapter, then you don't have to read the whole thing over again, though I did spend a couple months on it on only half the story so far.

    I included a filler chapter since I won't be updating the story for a while. It takes a lot of time to edit this story, especially when my schedule conflicts with my editor's. It's not much, but it's something. This story isn't dead, though after re-reading it a couple times I kind of lost interest at one point.

    Also, while I've been editing, my mind has been filling up with new ideas for stories. Although I'm already working on more stories than I can handle, I'll still start them anyway because if I don't get these ideas onto paper, I might go nuts.

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  • ...

Magical mishaps, moral dilemmas, and multiple contusions -- normal ponies don't have to deal with these things. Too bad Lyle Hartston isn't a "normal" pony. From the normal life of a human to an exciting and hectic life of a pony, Lyle's life is flipped upside down. Things can only get stranger for this brony when he wakes up in Equestria. More surprises await for him as he comes to meet a certain pony by the name of Lyra Heartstrings.

All songs belong to their respective artists.

Special thanks to Toni_PWNeroni and ZST6262 for editing and pre-reading.

I still have old original chapters in html format on mediafire. (Warning: poorer quality)

IMPORTANT: In the process of being re-written.

First Published
25th Oct 2012
Last Modified
30th Jul 2013

ha this is pretty good:twilightsmile:

you may have all my yes

#3 · 109w, 1h ago · · · New Body ·

Thanks for the compliments everyone. :pinkiehappy:

Please give any constructive criticism so I can make this story even better.

#4 · 109w, 29m ago · · · New Body ·

Is your plan your plan to make lyle a colt throughout the story our is he just like that for the time being (spiolers)

don't have to let me know, and keep writing i really have high hopes fore this

#5 · 108w, 6d ago · · · New Body ·

i sense awkward situations ahead

#6 · 108w, 6d ago · · · New Body ·

Damnit, I'm a sucker for Lyra stories And this one has activated the alarm.

Better fave it :D

I'm surprised none of them have seen the resemblance between Lyle and Lyra :unsuresweetie:

Oh noes! Twilight's cracking wise! :pinkiegasp:

And that Lyra bit gave me a little Hnngggg :scootangel:

*shudders at the thought of having to sleep with somepony drooling on him*

Going as Slendermane eh? or an illusionary SlenderMan.

He's gonna give all the other ponies the SPOOKS!

>>1532082 I'm glad you like it. :pinkiehappy:

I am gonna love the next chapter. :pinkiecrazy:

Thank celestia his going as something that isn't etzo from assasins creed .

Oh and "secret society" *puts on a sarcastic tone* whatever you say girls

This is really good so far, I hope you update again soon

>>1535256 Working on it right now, good sir. :ajsmug:

Darn you Twilight and your pesky investigation >:(

And I hope you feel better soon :)

can't wait for the next part its gunna be epic i can tell

Hope your feeling better soon mate.:unsuresweetie:

Epic trolling will soon occur with Slendermane, I predict this...

That was awesome.  Can't wait to see what's next. :rainbowwild::rainbowkiss:

I wish we had something like halloween in australia it sounds like oodles of fun.:fluttershysad:

>>1544076 you should start a Nightmare Night in australia:rainbowkiss:

>>1544096 your right *gets out of computer chair, strikes a heroic pose complete with wind swept look* I haven't a moment to spare its only 364 more days untill oct. 31 I must prepare the people.*whips out his replica gasgun with grapple hook, then pretends to fire it out the third story window before jumping through it*

nice pony with a kind hard....What.

I hope you meant heart otherwise...ew.

On the plus side, if Luna waits about, oh, 20 years or and Lyle is still there, dating can commence.

>>1544423 Ha ha. Whoops. When you write for 6 hours straight, it's kinda hard to notice grammatical/spelling errors.:twilightblush:

#29 · 107w, 6d ago · · · The Bees ·

oh god this is amasing

#30 · 107w, 6d ago · · · The Bees ·

The part with the bees reminded me of left 4 dead. In the first part of the no mercy campaign my friend and I would always run away from the other 2 survivors, set of the car alarm and sit and listen to their panicked yells as they were eaten by a massive horde of zombies....good times.

Oh on a reread of this i noticed.

got chased my timberwolves

[got chased by timberwolves] still good though.:twilightsheepish:

#32 · 107w, 6d ago · · · The Bees ·

>>1553912 which chapter?

The room got really quiet. So quiet that I'm pretty sure I heard a mouse fart two miles away

Oh man best line I have heard in a long time.

Oh my.:fluttercry: I worry what Twilight came up with ther.:twilightoops:


#36 · 107w, 6d ago · · · The Bees ·


Chapter 2 :twilightsmile:

This is a good read can't wait for the next chapter!:pinkiehappy:

#37 · 107w, 6d ago · · · The Bees ·

"Ranks Ron Ron ," I said with the bag in my mouth.

What? is he Scooby Doo now or something? :trollestia:

#39 · 107w, 6d ago · · · The Bees ·

>>1554544 Ha ha. I kinda thought of that too while reading it over. I didn't really know what kind of sound to make so I went with Scooby Doo.:derpytongue2:

>>1554141 I'm glad you love it. I've got a whole lot of ideas planned for the next few chapters.:raritywink:

I have a bad feeling about his costume:applejackunsure:

Really good, keep going ;)


Oh man I loved this, can't weight to see what is next!!


#43 · 104w, 4d ago · · · New Body ·

Vell I must say that the reaction that he got outta the whole experience would be awesome but I woulda been like OMG HOLY SHIT ITS LYRA HEARTSRTINGS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!


Lyra can drool all over me is she wants to.:raritywink::facehoof::facehoof::twilightblush:

it is now 2:16 A.M. haven't slept in 24 hours:ajsleepy:

Zach u read my mind!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Great fic so far. Just noticed one thing, you (I'm assuming accidentally) switched to second person in the chapter "First Encounter"

"I'm from America, "you answered back, even though you knew she most likely didn't know where America was or where your entire world was.

Not a big deal. Just a little something that gave me pause. Thought i'd inform ya. Now to continue reading this great story! You deserve an internet cookie and a up rating for this story. Looking forward to reading the rest.

Ok, one problem:

How can he be so good at magic if he's been a pony only for a few days:ajbemused:

Either this burglar didn't know I was sleeping in this room or he is probably the world's most retarded burglar to have ever existed.

What about the burglar who was caught masterbating in the house of the person he was robbing to the person he was robbing's computer.

Gotta go. Gotta go. Gotta go fast like Sanic.

What is this 'Sanic' you speak off.

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