--Soon to be under HEAVY re-write....because it sucks--
I'm serious. It's terrible. Stay away from it, just go read the sequel.
Well things couldn't be any weirder for Ian. Get knocked out a human one morning, wake up with the body of a baby changeling the next. Well, at least he still has his sparkling personality. Right? Well whatever the case, he'll be having some new experiences in this new form.
This is my first story so leave critique for improvement.
Teen for innuendo.
Edit: I got an editor, finally. He helped me with the grammatical errors in the last chapter. So a special thanks to Lan.
Chapters (8)
Well, the premise is certainly worth the time I took to read this.
I like your sense of humour, and I can see quite a lot in the way of trolling going on.
Just a few things. Grammar and such.
Type everything in MS Word or Google Docs first. They have built-in spell checkers, should prevent any minor errors from slipping through. Things like forgetting to capitalise an 'i' here or there. Also, remember to have a capital in front of names. I'm pretty sure you missed one here or there.
It's "canon" and "fanon", only one 'n' in the middle.
Remember to use apostrophes for when something belongs to someone i.e. Twilight's voice.
That's all I have for now.
omg I would love to be in that position
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Thank you, i tried to get rid of mistakes like that but i guess some made it through. Thank you for the advice. :)
at first i didnt knew what to think of this, but after reading it i thought, great story i really like it, and i hope to see more soon
yay
this is good
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Sorry, no spoilers.
Hey, ancient one, great job! This story had a great beat, and lots of humor. I seriously enjoyed it, and can't wait for the next chapter.
I got a little confused during the whole beam-angry ponies incident. I had to read that part a couple times to understand what was going on, and I still don't really get it. Is that on purpose?
Keep at it!
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Yes, i put that in on purpose. I want to tell you what exactly it was but i can't, i don't like to spoil.
ohhhh here go hell come
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I like this idea but I would loved it if it was only a Changeling baby and not a adult human in baby form. Still I will watch this and see were this is going.
what fic is that i kinda wanna read it for some lols
I know where this is going, but I think I'll let a certain robot sum it up for everyone.
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I honestly have no clue, i just assumed someone somewhere had made a fic like that. If they haven't, well they probably are now.
First i think it will be shitty some but damn i was wrong :D Nice one especially that kind of humour you just use :d
the hive mind is trying to contact him OH NOES
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There's an old saying i like to believe in.
Things aren't always what they appear
and thats how equestria was made
Oh snap! This is gonna be great!
Watch Rainbow Dash fall in love with Ian, but in a motherly way.
And everypony else hate him.
Cab't wait for more, bro!
Besides the mane 6 who knows how many other ponies might show him compassion (for no other reason then him being a baby then anything else). Wonder if Discord broke free would see the chaotic potential in him (Though thinking it, Discord would know he was different but wouldn't tell anyone straight up but make it a riddle of some sort).
Funny thing is if you have an encounter with Trixie and she becomes effectuated with him (Not in a lover way but more in a high maternal concept [Even to the point of getting into other creatures faces in protecting him {Highly protective mother}]). Derpy/Ditzy could also be another (Being treated as the outsider so much and seeing another being pushed like that could make a moment of slight snapping [Whether you add Dinky and Sparkler into it would make a heighten family concept]). Based on what I have seen Scootaloo is in a good family (most fics put her in such crappy positions it makes me rage).
Lol, it was good!
the ending was a little difficult to understand though, what was real and what wasn't?
Round two, FIGHT!
... genious
Oh YES! i like this very much!
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That will be explained in a few chapters, I want Sand Shifter to do some things before I get into that.
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Thank ya kindly
Execelent stroy there lad, can't wait for next chapter
I fully expect Pinkie Pie physics to work here, as in having Pinkie inside his ears and screaming outwards for absolutely no discernible reason at all.
cant wait for the next chapter when is it?
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I actually have it written now, but i just have to look it over and add some final changes before i upload it.
Good story so far. It would be funny if the cake twin meet Sands.
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Stop being psychic!
Damn very good stuff :D Just waiting for more
good chapter cant wait for the next
I love the idea of this story. Its hilarous! Babysitting by Rainbow Dash...that would be interesting. OR the cutie mark crusaders running off with him to do... something.
Anyway, I was hoping to offer a suggestion. I don't know if anyone else has trouble with this, but I have a difficult time seeing whether he is actually talking or talking to himself being a baby and all. So, I was think you should add italics to clear that. Plus, I believe, it would make the story lookv neater. It's just my opinion.
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Thats a good idea, thanks! :D
Don't know how I didn't think of it
But if you're thinking of the narration he's giving then I can understand what you mean.
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From one lame writer to another possibly-become-better-than-me writer.
Okay, this is just hilarious. The opportunities for shenanigans are endless... Shifting Sands' new mom must be proud.
Yay more things to read
Ha, good job, ancient one! Another great chapter! dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Luna_lolface.png
I'm excited to see the next babysitter, I vote Rainbow Dash! They should totally go flying together! dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Bonbon_OMG_LOVE.png That would be awesome!
dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Lyra_dealwithit.png Peace out!
Wohooo, the story just getting better and better, You sir are awesome!
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Sorry. I will try to stop using my gift.
Anyway, funny episode. I like that the baby's could talk to each other, almost like Rugrats.
Keep it coming.
You accidentally an italic'd first chapter.
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Not accidental.
Everything Sand Shifter says and thinks is in italic, this helps to distinguish his thought and words from his narration.
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SOMEONE MAKE A RUGRATS FIC NAO!
Base plot: Cake twins and a bunch of other foals+CMC and their adventures.
Fine glue indeed rainbow glue
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Sand Shifter makes good on his promises :
976771 why doe you call him in the story 'Shifting Sands', and in the comments 'Sand Shifter'?
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Ah That's from when i named him, I had debated between Sand Shifter and Shifting Sands.
I officially decided on Shifting Sands but Sand Shifter stuck with me as a possible nick name.
lol rainbow dash glue
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