Sometimes it isn't the power of an army, but the conviction of one who saw through the lies.
An old friend long thought dead by five of the mane 6 and Celestia has returned. Including some old enemies of Equestria and Celestia herself, that threaten the very existence of Equestria and ponies everwhere.
But Celestia has a deep secret that even Luna does not know.
And it includes someone they all love and know.
This my first fic...so...yeah
Added note...my grammar isn't the best
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... Wat?
A bit confusing and there are many misspellings and incorrect usages of grammar but I never let that get in the way of a good enjoyable read.
90551Yeah mate, ill try a bit harder next time...anyway, thanks for that
So eclipse is a human/pegasus hybrid? Damn, why didn't you say that sooner?
Gytrash has a point: many mispellings and grammar problems. Maybe Gytrash doesn't have a problem with it, but many other readers will. Fix that ASAP.
91215Yeah ok...who wants do do some proof readin for me...please?
I would volunteer but I can never get the length of sentences down. If you want I can go through and get rid of the spelling errors and most of the grammar errors, then you just need someone to fix up all the , and .
98680thanks bro
I can and will volunteer for you
, though it may take some time, since I am also writing/editing two other stories. 
But i'd love to help!
103757again thanks
cause im havin to do this really late at night at the moment cause im helping with a muster out on the station
First!
I'd like to say, that was pretty good (the plot of the story, not the grammar, editing, etc.) The ending caught me a little off guard, though. I see you were trying to make some sort of cliff-hanger, but the way you did it compared to the rest of the story just didn't do it for me. Sorry.
Oh, i've been editing the first chapter of your story (the return). I'm almost done with it! how do I send it to you?
119690Mabey you could copy and pastebit into a message? Thats how I've been gettin my chapters from my iPad to here
LOL
HOLY
THAT WAS AMAZING
I like this and the weak spots perfect
209121Cheers mate. Much appreciated
holy shit immeadiate watch
209176*sqee*
fucking epic fight night WAIT it was nighttime during the fight right WAIT yeah because his body is black and he disappeared easily so that means it was night...I CONFUSE MYSELF NOOO
HOLD ON!
How could luna and twilight not know this guy?
I can think that the dude existed in ponyvile before twilight's arrival as she probably never heard of him due to her being coped up in the library
and luna was on the mooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooonnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnn!
212324Ya hit the nail on the head there
Short? Yes... But hey, it's reading material
Need MOAR!
5/6 staches fer you my good sir
MOAR
262289>>262398What happened to please and thank you?
262424 どうもありがとうございました
262424 IDK and PLEASE MOAR and THANK YOU FOR THE CHAPTER!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
*sigh* many sleepless nights with a writers block
Oh well, here ya are
Cookies, muffins and cupcakes.
Oh god yes, I do like this fic,l I do indeed, you Sir, know how to keep a man up late!
I think that the main problem that you are going to have here is that you must be careful that this does not turn into a Lensman Arms Race After all, in just six chapters you have introduced a ludicrously powerful character and then given him a powerup... In order for your villains to pose even the slightest amount of a threat you must make them similarly ludicrous.... Anyway, overall a good piece of writing, do you perchance read the Whateley stories? I was catching a whiff of them here... Just a hint.
369140Strangly enough I haven't even heard of the Whateley stories.
369294
Now that I think about it in the cold hard light of morning that's not necessarily a bad thing
*sigh* works a bitch
Oh well here ya are
Hey! It's this fic again! Been a while since I read it, I had to go back and reread the last chapter to remember the story. Glad to see you're still kicking around with this.
684626Yeah, I've been working flat out like a lizard drinkin
But as you said, I'm still kickin
Eclipse taught pinkie her disappearing powers?
Teach me master!
BTW what could she do if she was already defying the laws of physics before she learned that.
P.S.S. why did you make celestia envoke the wrath of pinkie pie upon eclipse?
684926Birthday? Don't you normally have a party with one?
684938 yes but were talking about pinkie pie here
The only thing I thought when reading the last 3 lines was: Well, shit. Nice knowing ya.
I have an obsession over winged humans, how dare you exploit that weakness!
686157winged humans are mine as well.
But Eclipse isn't exactly a full human
686524
I don't care, hes close enough, and I am seriously obsessed with them.
And where is the "cover" picture from, its badass as fuck.
688963Belive it or not, I got it from google images
685003Oh common... What's the worst that can happen?
*sigh* I should be more bored more often if can get something "productive" done
Here ya go anyway
oh god this this is gonna be gooood
an i pod? what is this madness? wait... i dont care this was awsome and the stalker lyra just keeps getting better.
812218Yeah go back to chapter 2 when Celestia is telling Twilight about the war, that's how Eclipses fathers iPod got there
Reading through the chapter.
Eeh this is alright, a bit lulzworthy.
Find the line "WHEELBARROW RACE!!!"
Lose it
This chapter had a good deal of lulz, most of them for me at least in that one line.
813480Ok... No more writing while bored
(why not? All I do is drive a tractor in circles all day
)
Answer... Write on the job!
813611
I look forward to hearing tales of knocked down walls and squashed cats.