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Americanwastelander


Welcome sit down and I'll tell you a story...

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twelve chapters in five days? Wow, that's quite productive.

Why do so many people insist on making “displaced” stories? They all come out as the same bland crap following an OP selfinsert with the powers of an actual character but none of the personality. You’ve read one shitty displaced story you might as well have read them all.

What Marvinlando said. There's nothing here. This fic is a void of originality. This fic contains thirty-five thousand unoriginal, bland, half-assed words arranged for no purpose and to satisfy no one. Are self-insert displaced fics some kind of rite of passage now? Because I swear to God I see a new one posted every other day.

Is John Mercer in any way related to Alex Mercer?
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Why did your comment get a dislike?

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Most likely from someone who doesn't agree with my comment, but it's ok, it's only a harmless dislike.

I... I can't read this. where in the fuck are the commas? where the fuck are the apostrophes? where's the fucking voice? the heart? where's the capitalization, the punctuation, the character?
get yourself an editor, or get this away from where people will see it.
or at least get rid of that clickbaity pic, so people who come in here are less likely to be disappointed

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Have a like to balance out the dislike

Don't give up on me partner you will continue this story or Pike God I will go to hell and back to get you

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I’m working on a new chapter I’m just fighting writers block and life at the moment, I’m not about to let my first successful story on here die.

I love it please don't let it die don't let writers block win.

In loving this so far, it's not over the top informative but it's almost perfect on that regard.
I like the emotional aspect towards the end.
I can look over the spelling errors because even with the few this is still a really good read.

The dialogue feels fitting for these kinds of situation. Loving it.

“Sex slave.” He stated simply. Which caused the others to look at him incredulously. “What I’ve been in space for a week and haven’t had my dick wet in three years, don’t look at me like that.” He said pointing at the others.

Im late as fuck to this story but that was fucking hilarious :rainbowlaugh: hats off to you good sir for your sense of humor:moustache:

PLEASE BY ALL THAT IS THE FORCE DON'T LET THIS DIE!!!!!!!?🙏🙏🙏🙏😄🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏

“Yes one hundred mares. Specifically for sex.”John said smiling.

lol

Ok, so far (aside from grammatical errors) this is pretty good :twilightsmile:. It’s only been a few (6) months so far so this still has the opportunity to still be alive :pinkiecrazy:.

Don’t take it the wrong way, but it sucks when stories like this stop for a long while :fluttershysad:. It was going very well than a long stop. Hopefully you didn’t lose your mojo on this. It would really suck to not see this continue :raritycry:. If you do get back to it than good luck.

As for what is holding you back, take it easy and hope everything works out for you :twilightsheepish:. Thanks for this story :raritystarry:.

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I'm sorry for the delay but I'm currently in the grips of writers block still, and I do have a new chapter, which will go out soon, I'm also stuck due irl issues have made me back seat my story. again sorry.

But Yeet Train doesn’t end in Y. :rainbowhuh:

This was a interesting start.

This was awesome beginning I can't wait tell every pony meets him.

This was a wildly chill chapter I hope they are going to be ok.

I hope the princesses fall for him.

This chapter was epic I'm so happy became his student. I hope the princesses can be students to.

This was a awesome and hilarious chapter, this is getting more and more interesting.

I hope the other three and the princesses awaken to the force and he gets a herd.

This was a epic and hype inducing chapter. I'm happy Pinkie,AJ and Fluttershy are doing so while.

This was a awesome and chill chapter.

I'm happy he stopped the FF brothers.

This was a epically awesome chapter I hope he changes his mind about Rarity, and that Rarity let's Spike down gently because she is way to old for him.

I'm loving this story I'm happy he's showing he will not be bullyed.

Sorry for the wait everyone writers block is a pain to deal with, that and irl issues.

Sorry that part got screwed up by auto correct it was suppose to be different I'm gonna fix it.

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Went back and changed that part. does that look better?

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yah it works
ALL ABOARD THE YEET TRAIN

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*flys with the Minotaur* first time on the yeet train?

.....I'd have asked for the SUPREMACY....

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