Why do so many people insist on making “displaced” stories? They all come out as the same bland crap following an OP selfinsert with the powers of an actual character but none of the personality. You’ve read one shitty displaced story you might as well have read them all.
What Marvinlando said. There's nothing here. This fic is a void of originality. This fic contains thirty-five thousand unoriginal, bland, half-assed words arranged for no purpose and to satisfy no one. Are self-insert displaced fics some kind of rite of passage now? Because I swear to God I see a new one posted every other day.
I... I can't read this. where in the fuck are the commas? where the fuck are the apostrophes? where's the fucking voice? the heart? where's the capitalization, the punctuation, the character? get yourself an editor, or get this away from where people will see it. or at least get rid of that clickbaity pic, so people who come in here are less likely to be disappointed
Ok, so far (aside from grammatical errors) this is pretty good . It’s only been a few (6) months so far so this still has the opportunity to still be alive .
Don’t take it the wrong way, but it sucks when stories like this stop for a long while . It was going very well than a long stop. Hopefully you didn’t lose your mojo on this. It would really suck to not see this continue . If you do get back to it than good luck.
As for what is holding you back, take it easy and hope everything works out for you . Thanks for this story .
10100040 I'm sorry for the delay but I'm currently in the grips of writers block still, and I do have a new chapter, which will go out soon, I'm also stuck due irl issues have made me back seat my story. again sorry.
This is getting interesting but I have a couple of questions 1) what happens to the female and male clone that help him through this travels, honestly I thought they had a connection but as soon as they meet the ponies they might as well have died because they where never brought back. 2) didn’t he get some samples for new dna for clones like in the second chapter, what happens to that? 3) he is getting resources and materials but we have heard nothing about production of drones, soldiers or even clones? 4) could you explain a little more about his forces, powers, troops and ships ?
twelve chapters in five days? Wow, that's quite productive.
Why do so many people insist on making “displaced” stories? They all come out as the same bland crap following an OP selfinsert with the powers of an actual character but none of the personality. You’ve read one shitty displaced story you might as well have read them all.
What Marvinlando said. There's nothing here. This fic is a void of originality. This fic contains thirty-five thousand unoriginal, bland, half-assed words arranged for no purpose and to satisfy no one. Are self-insert displaced fics some kind of rite of passage now? Because I swear to God I see a new one posted every other day.
Is John Mercer in any way related to Alex Mercer?
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Why did your comment get a dislike?
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Most likely from someone who doesn't agree with my comment, but it's ok, it's only a harmless dislike.
I... I can't read this. where in the fuck are the commas? where the fuck are the apostrophes? where's the fucking voice? the heart? where's the capitalization, the punctuation, the character?
get yourself an editor, or get this away from where people will see it.
or at least get rid of that clickbaity pic, so people who come in here are less likely to be disappointed
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Have a like to balance out the dislike
more please
I’m working on a new chapter I’m just fighting writers block and life at the moment, I’m not about to let my first successful story on here die.
I love it please don't let it die don't let writers block win.
PLEASE BY ALL THAT IS THE FORCE DON'T LET THIS DIE!!!!!!!?🙏🙏🙏🙏😄🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏
Ok, so far (aside from grammatical errors) this is pretty good . It’s only been a few (6) months so far so this still has the opportunity to still be alive .
Don’t take it the wrong way, but it sucks when stories like this stop for a long while . It was going very well than a long stop. Hopefully you didn’t lose your mojo on this. It would really suck to not see this continue . If you do get back to it than good luck.
As for what is holding you back, take it easy and hope everything works out for you . Thanks for this story .
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I'm sorry for the delay but I'm currently in the grips of writers block still, and I do have a new chapter, which will go out soon, I'm also stuck due irl issues have made me back seat my story. again sorry.
I'm loving this story I'm happy he's showing he will not be bullyed.
This is getting interesting but I have a couple of questions
1) what happens to the female and male clone that help him through this travels, honestly I thought they had a connection but as soon as they meet the ponies they might as well have died because they where never brought back.
2) didn’t he get some samples for new dna for clones like in the second chapter, what happens to that?
3) he is getting resources and materials but we have heard nothing about production of drones, soldiers or even clones?
4) could you explain a little more about his forces, powers, troops and ships ?