10110474 The idea is fine, I was talking about how it was presented. Him being nice with the child is explained nicely but the way you describe his gray morality felt unnatural.
Wait, who was the Minotaur ? Equestria is so weak a single nobody with a sword could defeat or intimidate an entire army and invade the castle ? Then they are simply fuck mate, doesn’t matter what equipment they get, if the castle guards couldn’t stop a single Minotaur then they are fuck.
10111337 He didnt invade, yes he is a nobody, but he wasn't there to invade equestria, simply to challenge john. And he had gathered a large group of ponies as well to march to the castle.
10112097 You misunderstood my message, I’m not saying don’t make him cry. I’m saying build up to it, describe his emotions and reactions as he slowly begins to lose hope and cry.
Oml when i saw yeet train i lost my shit that was funny as fuck and i normally dont comment on stories like this but hell that was priceless so keep it up and i look forward to following this story more
This story is really good aside from some slight grammer missteps.
10112086 I suggest downloading grammerly ether on their website or the corresponding app store depending on what you use. Will catch most of the errors your making though it isn't perfect will make your stories look much cleaner.
10506282 I will I've been dealing with one monster of a case of writer's block. I have a chapter that is 2/3s the way done. I'm sorry this is taking too long
But Yeet Train doesn’t end in Y.
more please
This was epic.
Sorry that part got screwed up by auto correct it was suppose to be different I'm gonna fix it.
10100556
Went back and changed that part. does that look better?
10102008
yah it works
ALL ABOARD THE YEET TRAIN
10102029
*flys with the Minotaur* first time on the yeet train?
10107660
Go for it!!!!!
10110474
The idea is fine, I was talking about how it was presented. Him being nice with the child is explained nicely but the way you describe his gray morality felt unnatural.
Wait, who was the Minotaur ? Equestria is so weak a single nobody with a sword could defeat or intimidate an entire army and invade the castle ? Then they are simply fuck mate, doesn’t matter what equipment they get, if the castle guards couldn’t stop a single Minotaur then they are fuck.
10111337
He didnt invade, yes he is a nobody, but he wasn't there to invade equestria, simply to challenge john. And he had gathered a large group of ponies as well to march to the castle.
10112097
You misunderstood my message, I’m not saying don’t make him cry. I’m saying build up to it, describe his emotions and reactions as he slowly begins to lose hope and cry.
yeet train👏👏👏 great use of words ...lol
Oml when i saw yeet train i lost my shit that was funny as fuck and i normally dont comment on stories like this but hell that was priceless so keep it up and i look forward to following this story more
Yeet train away
+1 to bord the yeet train!
This story is really good aside from some slight grammer missteps.
10112086
I suggest downloading grammerly ether on their website or the corresponding app store depending on what you use. Will catch most of the errors your making though it isn't perfect will make your stories look much cleaner.
This story is great. It is very fun to read. I can't wait for more. Keep up the good work.
LMAO! The Yeet Train the best way for idiots to travel long distances!
Yeet Train for the LOLZ!
Do you ever finish your stores
10506282
I will I've been dealing with one monster of a case of writer's block. I have a chapter that is 2/3s the way done. I'm sorry this is taking too long
This is pretty good so far and I hope to see more very soon! Hopefully ya kick that writers block to the next universe.
Yeet