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I have no idea how long I've been here, this gap between the seconds. It could be minutes, days, ages, I can't tell. I can never tell.

Maybe that's for the best.

The sun never rises, but it never sets. The clock never ticks, and I never rest. I never hunger, nor thirst. I certainly never tire.

It makes it much harder to tell the time I spend here...

Yet it never feels like none at all...

First Published
31st Jul 2012
Last Modified
8th Jun 2014

Very intriguing. Tracking and upvoting this, for sure. :twilightsmile:

>>1003243

So appropriate. So very, very appropriate.

Written by someone who is certainly no stranger to poetics. Bravo. I hope the story to follow is well done.

>>1003542 thanks, correct me if i'm wrong but isnt that the ultimate weapon that vanitus used?

>>1006283

I have no idea, I need more context to give you an answer.

Vanitus from what? The only Vanitus I know of is from the Kingdom Hearts univer--------

Oh. My profile pic. You're talking about my profile pic. Yes that is the X-Blade, used by Vanitus in his final battles against Ven and Aqua. Im not really all that surprised that no-one had commented on it previously, it's sort of obscure. So thank you, and congratulations on being the second person to know what my profile pic is. (the first was me.

  )

... Not to be a jerk, but can you learn the proper use of to and too, and they're and their? You made that mistake here and there throughout the chapter, and it's annoying. 'too' means as well, or 'too' much or little of something, an amount. They're is they are, while their is possessive. (Sorry for shortness and not showing where it happened. I've got a massive headache atm...)

>>1006576

Well sir, after re-reading several times I have found one incorrect use of "they're". I have left it unedited so that the story remains un-updated prior to your comment. If you can find any other mistake that I have missed, please point it out specifically, as the to/too mistake (which I can't find) is driving me nuts!

>>1008125 Found it! Man, took me a bit to find it as well! xD

Even when I change something in the gaps, to them it's a hiccup, a jolt, a shiver. Nothing they can't shrug off and go about their day. Even those who notice choose to ignore it. It happens to fast for them to comprehend.

It happens TOO fast. :3

(And sorry again. My head was REALLY hurting when I wrote that... :twilightblush: It's down to a slight throb now, so I'm feeling a LOT better! Forgive meh?)

>>1008252

No need for forgiveness, criticism is welcome!

BWAHH...duhduhduhduhduhduhduhduhBWAHH

You're supposed to upshift before you hit the rev limiter, not three quarters of a second afterward.

I really like the concept of this story. Looking forward to seeing how this will develop. Some grammatical errors though, mostly plurals. One's instead of ones.

Dude, your story is awesome and you should feel awesome!

I really hope that ending means that this isn't a joke story, because I love the premise. What would an individual be like if he/she had all the time in the world to do literally everything? Would they be disconnected from the world because they've experienced everything that there is to experience, or would they be something else completely? I wanna see the possibilities.

>>1033339

it's definitely not the end, I just haven't had time to write recently

I can't wait to read more of this story. I don't know what it is, but there's something this story has that other's don't... Oh well, keep up the good work!:derpytongue2:

...this is awesome in a can! i want MOAR.

I almost feel inspired to write a similar story, but that'd be just plain copying, wouldn't it?

Loving the story. Keep on writing!

Hmmm. I'm surprised this hasn't gotten more attention yet. Some minor grammatical and spelling errors. But the OC is put down very well.

I'm really looking forward to future installments. Let me know if you need a proofreader or editor of some kind.

I'm... not quite sure what to say about this story. Its odd, and strange, but most of all genuinely interesting.

Keep up the great work :D!

i really like this one. and want more.

the time between seconds, i love the thought of it. where the entire world stops, where everything is peaceful, i'd like to be able to do that. but alas i am but a simple human so i must be content with this story. Keep up the good work my friend.

I demand continuation! ....if you want to, that is...:fluttershysad:

The intrigue and curiosity continues. More please. :twilightsmile:

I wish I could make another person appreciate the magic and wonder that exist within an infinite amount of ever passing moments.

2 errors here: it should be pony, not person. Also exists, not exist.

This is an AWESOME concept, I want MOAR! :flutterrage:


Sorry, I'm more voracious than twilight when it comes to reading :twilightsmile:

#33 · 79w, 5d ago · · · Solitude ·

:D Huzzah! It has updated!

And don't worry about updates, the hardest step is the first one, after all :rainbowwild:

#34 · 79w, 5d ago · · · Solitude ·

I had totally forgotten about this story

#35 · 79w, 5d ago · · · Solitude ·

Wasn't there a story already named Clockwork?:rainbowhuh:

#36 · 79w, 5d ago · · · Solitude ·

I love this. I really love this!

None were to helpful."

too

"Thanks...read all the one's in this one too?"

ones

What on earth is this?  I must say...  I'm quite curious.

~Skeeter The Lurker

"While I will always loose an infinite amount of gaps, I do preserve the one's I like. The one's I rest in."

lose not loose.

ones not ones

hope you don't mind small corrections here and there. :pinkiehappy:

Oooo.  A time travel style fic?

If you didn't already have my attention...

~Skeeter The Lurker

#41 · 79w, 5d ago · · · Solitude ·

I do hope you can continue this.  I'm quite enjoying it.

~Skeeter the Lurker

#42 · 79w, 5d ago · 1 · · Solitude ·

This, my friend, is a wonderful story so far. I cannot wait for more. Please... go on.

This actually reminds me of Doctor Who... in a way.

And myself... in others.

It actually brought the idea of "stopping time" into a new light for me. Normally I would say I would use the ability for personal gain, but drawing everything around you? Brilliant...

Reminds me of the fact that I should probably try to draw more.

Thank you for the new found inspiration.

Keep writing, my good sir. And have a few mustaches too.

:moustache::moustache::moustache:

#43 · 79w, 5d ago · · · Solitude ·

Boop.

this is not time travel but a tale of nonparallel sadness, well except maybe by background pony.

#45 · 79w, 5d ago · · · Solitude ·

>>2706089  Yes but they don't compare. After all this guy here has the potential to be a bigger gary-stu than the pony form that story. But it has been okay so far  so i couldn't say.

#46 · 79w, 5d ago · · · Solitude ·

wow this is really good! :pinkiehappy:

the naughty side of my brain tells me that this could evolve into a clopfic at anytime :rainbowlaugh: get it? cuz he stops - you know what nevermind :pinkiecrazy:

Two parallel rectangles, the seconds, the infinitesimal frames of reality. He is the one who bridges the gaps, the One who resides in them, and the One to command their power.

#48 · 79w, 5d ago · 4 · · Solitude ·

In the cracks between reality, there is no sound. Frozen in time he stands, watching, waiting, admiring the beauty of the world around him, yet in the silence and solitude, he finds no comfort.

#49 · 79w, 5d ago · · · Solitude ·

Hmmm.... Interesting concept. A pony with the power to slip through the spaces between seconds, as if he was "hiding" from the laws of space and time; I wouldn't be surprised if this is how Pinkie gets around. The writing style is definitely different than anything I've read as well, focused on his thoughts and dialogue with little to no imagery. The story, with the way it's told, has no need for much imagery though. Overall, I like it. Simple as that. 3.75 Derpy Muffins out of 5. You deserve a corn dog (fresh from the carnival, I might add) for your penmanship, or take one of Derpy's muffins if she doesn't mind.

#50 · 79w, 5d ago · · · Solitude ·

I'll read this later. If I can judge by the description, I think Stephen King did something kinda-sorta-like it before in a short story.

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