I'm awake, and I don't feel like I should be. That's not going to stop me from finding out why I'm here, why I'm awake, or why these strange creatures seem to fear me so much. I'm one of them after all, why should they fear a fellow equine?
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A great chapter. Keep up the good work
The original last Pie family died in Hollow Shades? Did Pinkie know about this? It seemed to me Pinkie didn't know anything about the final fate of Onxy Pie or what was going on in Hollow Shades.
I am still trying to make sense of the timeline and story plot.
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The only Pie in Hollow Shades was Onyx and he isn't from there. This was a few years after he'd met Skal-Gazaath for the first time but before he'd had any children.
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So Nightmare Moon has his original journal while the Pie family only has mount-to-mount stories? Wonder what else he put in his journal that even disturb Nightmare.
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Luna destroyed the journal which is why the Pie Family's history was mostly oratory, though a previous chapter does mention some descendants writing their own books and Pinkie even pulled one out at one point in the story if you'll remember a couple of chapters back.
The perspective change is a refreshing break, though I’m excited to move back to the main narrative. This was creepy as fuck, and did a great job at explaining some of the backstory without ruining the mystery.
I literally mentioned that this fic hadn't updated in months and not even hours later, an update. Are you secretly an Eldritch Horror?
The whole flashback was amazing IMO. I love this sort of stuff. I had it all very vividly in my imagination and I'll probably still be thinking about parts of it for a while from now. Especially the bodies having been thrown into the swamp, the things that second lost guard rambled about ("why do they hurt?" especially - so great!), and the sounds of the ritual that Luna heard.
Jeez, how utterly boring that was. Told like old man’s tale.
Just too much forced grimness. You can’t spook someone by saying that something was spooky. You need to left reader to decide it for himself. Like in the beginning of this book. The farther you go here, the more fake and laid out atmosphere you making.
Not sure if it was intentional or not but when Luna meets Onyx and the guard, the Vessel is a pegasus and then a bit later an unicorn.
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Wasn't and fixed it.
Things have gotten a little bit interesting for Nightmare Moon
Things just went from a 6.3 to a 9.2 on my creepometer.
Have a thumbs up.
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And with that, this is my first story to reach 600 likes. Thanks for that!
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Oh nice. 600 even.
I feel like I should have won something for that.
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What are talking about? I don't see anything resembling secrecy here...
Welp... what can I say but agree how high quality this chapter was? I was endeared but the perspective shift and it brought a whole new dimension to the story. I’m inclined to say that I really like in stories when we get different styles. Makes it more fresh. Keep up the story and May you have many good days to come.
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Thanks, and I if you haven't checked it out yet, I wrote a new short story.
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I'm glad to hear it. I don't remember the exact story that did it for me, but Twilight became best pony for me through some of the fics I've read... and I make Twi centric fics because there's not enough of them. There will never be enough...
That none of the canon characters actually matter and that you're all irrelevant, futily weak set pieces to show off these otherworldly gods the author made up. That's about what it means.
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Yeesh, if you dislike Lovecraftian stuff that much, don’t read ‘em!