Looks interesting.

I'll read it later.

Night City - The Sword

>>10592261059226

This.

All of my this.

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My feelings I don't know what to do with them. On one hand they have to live on the other it's wrong abd worse Spike and Rarity. Oh god the idea of him once agian with her IDK what to say dude is so sweet nice looking out for her but she has to and the idea of selling herself. Spike might go broke just trying to keep her off the streets.

SUDGVBFDBSUNHDAJSBNHIJMHNHNMJ,L,KMJNI,OYUYNTRDVS!!!!!!!

IDK I just hope Spike can fix this at least help the mane6 out maybe a happy ending or as happy as it can get.

GOOD JOB! Dude this story really is a good one

Behold

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The mysterious other writer is here !

Anyway

Hope you guys enjoy the fic. Both of us put a good amount of effort into this, and will continue to do so.

>>10593541059354

Glad you like it

Me and Joe spent a lot of time on this, and are continuing to do so.

The idea came when I was just shooting an idea to Joe on what if the Mane 6 were ever in the criminal world. Joe asked if that was going to be a fic, and the idea grew in our heads and soon we were co-writing this. The process usually being sending stuff to each other and commenting and adjusting as we both saw fit.

Now, the story is out with its first part and I'm glad we got the good review that we did.

Keep reading!

>>10595441059544 I will. Very nice work have a cookie.

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This is an intense world you have built. I am impressed.

(I almost said "very nice world", but it is not.)

I enjoyed it more than I thought I would.

Also, I am glad that Spike has not lost his swag.

This story was amazing. The situation was well laid out, the humanization of the ponies were a nice touch, and it had an overall feeling of sadness. Really nice work, I hope you continue this, It had me very, very interested. This was one of the few Stories i've read that made me actually cry in front of my laptop. If you can continue this series, you can be sure that I will read it.

>>10596131059613

I don't get a cookie?

>>10596851059685

We are continuing the series. That was merely part 1. More is planned, you can be sure of it.

Glad you like it! Thanks for the compliments!

>>10597341059734

I honestly wasn't expecting a response so quickly. But thank you for making me feel heard.

>>10597311059731 No you get something better a cookie

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and a hug

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Both of you two writers you are off to a amazing start I am very curious to see what happens next with this story, love the world and start you have set up in this story and everyones different roles. I am very intrigued  to see how things go from this point and also maybe because of my love for Breaking Bad for shit to hit the fan which i know at some point it will in this fic.

So keep p the great work and I can not wait for the next chapter.

>>10592261059226 Great thanks to I have to go reach my Ipod an listen to all my the sword album.

Damn dude this story is awsome. Keep being the beasts of writing.

I like it. I mean, I like the crime genre and all that, and it was good, but then when I read their names it just throws me off. I get that they're supposed to be OOC, but sometimes it's a little too extreme.

I'm enjoying this very much. Never been much into the crime genre but this piqued my interest. Hope to see another chapter soon!

Story updates are going to take a bit

But I'll do a Q/A on the story while we're working on it. No spoilers will be given out, so don't ask "oh, what's going to happen next?".

I'll answer whatever questions you have on the story so far.

Private messaging is preferred.

Guess who. Anyway, I'll keep this in my watch list. Love a good Noir tale. Favorite movie genre, actually

What... Have... You... Done... To... Fluttershy!?!

TASTE MY FIDDY CAL PISTOL!!!

>>10622711062271

We aren't sure ourselves.

But whatever went through the creative process with me an Joe, it made her into a killer.

We opted to leave it unexplained, and to the reader's imagination.

>>10628451062845

Wrong answer!

*3 rounds fired*

>>10629591062959

...you missed

Anyway, like the fic?

>>10629791062979

(I knew I should've gotten a pistol scope)

Regardless of your unforgivable crime, yes I do like the fic.

...

Wait is this humanized?

>>10630011063001

Yes, indeed it is

We opted for a humanized setting for numerous reasons.

>>10630181063018

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>>10630441063044

broken link, bro

But yeah, have any questions? Be happy to answer (PM me if you would)

>>10630971063097

I will never leran to insert images.

But Okie dokie lokie then.

This is....wow. WOW WHAT A STORY

LYRA'S A GUARD NOW! : what will the mlp fanfic writers write next?

>>10838371083837

read an find out

Did you like it?

>>10896901089690 its awesome!

How is this not more popular? This is one of the best stories I've read so far. Can't wait for more.

>>11130271113027

Well, we only released it a few days ago. :P

I was a little hopefully for making the banner scroller, but I'm not sure how good a fic has to be to get on there. I guess we just weren't worthy material?

I love how Liyra asked what it would be like to be a pony. The spin of it is just perfect.

But yeah you're breaking my heart here man, the meeting between Spike and Rarity was very intense and i love how Spike and SA are working together. It would make sense that they being links to the girls happier past and their only true friends that seem to any moral stability that it would be up to them to stop the girls.

I feel like Celestia kinda caused this all to happen. She left her prodigy of a student alone and broken at such a time because of an act she did because she had never known how to go about it. She tried to partner with Luna who she would see as a teacher and a loving friend but couldn't control her urges because of her inexperience with dealing with them (dose that make sense?)

I highly enjoyed this and hope for more.

Woo! Finally found some cover art for this!

Also, as a small update, we're close to finishing the next chapter, but I wouldn't hold my breath if I were you. The more and more we add, the more we realize the chapter still needs. I don't see many more things being added as it stands, just simple refineries and such, maybe another scene or three.

Looks like an interesting story, but I'm too lazy to read it. I'll do it later....

DANG, this is a good story.

I mean Derpy caught with "the Special powder". Fluttershy a assisan, Applejack and Twilight more tougher than ever, the death of Lyra, who's crazier in this story, and Bon-bon, and Pinkie's higher than usual.

Man, for a dark story, this is as Dark as it gets and it makes me wonder what will "Sparkle" do when she confronts her former family ?

Please do keep up the good work upon such a great storyline as I cannot wait to see what happens next in this tale of yours.... I mena just WOW.

You know i usually despise humanized fics.............but this is sheer perfection.

Bravo sirs, you have earned a fan.

New Chapter's almost done, folks

This is taking over two months to update...

Sorry people, but I promise you the chapter will be lengthy and well worth it.

Earliest the newest chapter will be out is Monday.

you sir have made my day this happens to have everything,

spike: check

gang 6: check

guns&murder: DOUBLE CHECK

hmph hmph yes this pleases the masses therefore <drum roll>

APPROVAL

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First off with this update, I must say...

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There is a little something something I've written before but never published, and I'm a little nervous/interested to see you guises' reactions.

I again apologize for how long this took. Both me and We'll Never Know were swarmed with school and other matters. Hopefully the next chapter will not take nearly as long, since we do not anticipate it being very lengthy.

Anyway...

Enjoy this chapter!

Shit just got incredibly REAL

It was REALLY well done, you do a really good job showing us how the crime world works. I also loved the way you showed rarity's thoughts. Keep up the good work.

...Oh...FUCK.

Shit's about to go down.

>>15043581504358

You have no idea.

Twilight is screwed

dude the wait it.......it was long but you sir have preceded yourself i liked it, your other fans liked it. so by the the power invested in me and by bronies everywhere i present you with this......

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Godspeed and please update a little sooner this time.

Woah, just Woah, talk about your intense tales.

I must say You have got yourself a grand dark storyline here, with so much character focus in this. Nice update and great focus on Fluttershy and her actions, I can almost tell that she's be the first to go down within the next chapter.

Honestly, I never thought I see such a tale with so much emotional attachment to the past and so many questions raised....

1. How will Twilight take it when she learns that her own brother and her former "assistance" are after her ?

2. If Fluttershy does go down within the next chapter, then who's next ?

3. While the past maybe the past, something tells me that may cause some problems when the final fight is upon them all...especially given Twilight intellect.

Please do keep up the good work upon such a great storyline like this one.

The wait was worth it! And such an intense chapter, especially the end!

I hope the next one is just as good if not better!  

Aw, Dammit Joe, we need to fix something

Don't worry, just a single line

You lost me on this chapter; it was unfortunately trite compared to the previous one. A bit bland too; when you went for 'X' it was just another item on a checklist being marked off, and when you went for 'Y' it was spelled out with glitter and followed by a slideshow.

Nothing wrong with that in measured amounts, but the scene where Pinkie exposed Rarity was simply too much.

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It's certainly a good length and a decent read, but whoever proofreads this needs some practice. You don't really seem at ease working with darker material; not enough to make it appropriately brutal or flowery anyway. There aren't many sources for that in this fandom though, so not much can be done there.

Also, dat last sentence. You went full google translate on me there; the words are close and the idea is sound, but something went wrong.

Someday...someday, I will finish reading this. I'm such a shitty reader.

But I'm halfway through though and DAMN. This hurts. In a good way.

Could use some editing here and there of course.

I think the biggest criticism I'd give is that there isn't much of a sense of voice; I wouldn't really be able to tell who's saying what if it weren't for the "___ said." Also--and this is sort of a PSA to all fanfic writers--more and bigger words don't make better sentences. Look up George Orwell's essay "Politics and the English Language," it's kind of a must-read for writers, and I don't recall it being long.

Of course--as I always say--I'm only so harsh because this deserves to be perfected.

FUCK! C'mon Spike!

Lost me. There are such things as alternate universes and such but the characters are nearly unrecognizable. Their dialogue feels like plug-and-play. Try swapping out names and places and you might just find yourself with another crime/police procedural/mystery novel at Barnes & Noble.