Time has forgotten him, but when Luna returns from the moon, he comes back to Equestria. What zany adventures will this ancient being get into once he returns to a peace-loving land?
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Cadence and Lyra are terrible influences on each other. I look forward to their continued shenaningans in this joint venture they have embarked upon.
Also kept waiting for Aspect to zap the bush with a tiny bolt of lightning. Old as hell and still can’t tell when he’s being followed.
What a nice heartfelt chapter. Can’t wait for more.
Just one or two minor gripes about the editing, can’t remember where they were specifically though... Other than that, very good.
Great chapter, I am very excited for the interactions between Cadence and Balanced Aspect. I hope she starts to see him as an actual grandfather instead of it just being something to call him.
There aren't near enough stories with Cadence interacting with the main character in a meaningful way, they mostly portray her as a secondary character or supporting character.
This was just PERFECT........Oh Faust this chapter was great, and I do hope you get Aspect and Bon-Bon (AKA: Agent Sweetie Drops) together as a couple, of course if you do then Lyra will have to join since she and Bon-Bon make a cute mare couple too, also will Vinyl Scratch and Octavia Melody show up at any time in your story, it would be cool since I’ve always thought of Vinyl as a cousin to Twilight, she does look like Shining Armor’s twin after all.
You use a lot of dialogue tags, which make the text all bunched up and somewhat mechanical to read. You could always remove a few and simply have the characters acting rather than saying they talked.
I like it.
The shenanigans have been doubled! And so has the fun!
Cute Chapter and very well done.
I can all ready picture the meeting between Aspect and Shining Armor:
Aspect: “So... you are the colt that is dating my grand-daughter.” he said leveling the god slaying blade at the terryfied capitan of the Guard
Shining: “Y-Yes” he squeked focusing all his traning as a Capitan to not piss himself fromo the intimidating sight.
Or something like that.
an overdone clishe, but a still an enjoyable one.
i luv it! i luv it! i luv it! woohooo!
Ehhh, I’m iffy on the whole romance storyline. Seems a bit clunky/forced/uninteresting (sorry if that’s a bit harsh, but sure how to word it more gently.)
Much more interested in interactions with the Sisters, the Mane Six, and the rest of his ‘children’ than in Bon Bon.
Still, if you’ve got a plan and that’s a part of it, go nuts. I’m just not really a fan of that plotline at this moment.
Chapter Check list
Cute: check.
Funny: check.
References: check.
Two idiots in a bush: double check.
And character development: check.
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You know at first I was down that he wasn't going for Rainbow Dash but I love where this heading now.
a super good chapter love it.
Jointed shipping operation between Lyra and Cadance? Hilarious ensure!
To start off I am really enjoying this fanfic. I'm enjoying the premise of the story and I like the direction The story is going. I do hope to see a new chapter soon. Keep up the good work.
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Bon Bon studied Anthropology? That's a bit confusing. If it's supposed to be the study of human society and culture, that would make it a subset of overall history. But were humans as a species and civilization really significant enough in Equus to merit a whole field of study? In reality, it makes sense as a field of study because of the sheer impact and size of humanity on the world. If it's supposed to be ponified and be the study of pony society and culture, you'd want to change the name.
Additionally, xenobiology is the study of synthesizing and manipulating biological devices and systems. It's seriously advanced artificial genetic manipulation. Like, "rewrite genetic codes" advanced. The ponies don't even have interconnected electric grids in most of their settlements, so I'm highly skeptical that they would even know what the word "xenobiology" means, let alone study and implement it.
If you intended it to be a study of the other species on the planet, you probably just want to stick with straight biology or make up some fictional "-pology" fields for the individual species like dragons and griffons.
Lastly, I'd like to meet the person who triple-majors in three different fields, one of them being a specialized subfield of synthesized biology, and just goes to work in a bakery. It's like saying Albert Einstein decided to be an auto mechanic.
Yet, I still think I'd feel the same way if I was in that position...
well in a sense it's a blast from the past for him. being that he came from the modern era of humanity.
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A better term may have been Hippopology, if I'm thinking correctly. Hippo is derived from the Greek word for horse, so it would fit, as anthro is derived from their word for humans.
https://m.youtube.com/watch?feature=youtu.be&v=6TNF9YRTKlg fast forward to 8:45
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Just gotta' say that I love that profile pic.
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Maybe?
I mean, Twilight doesn't even seem to remember Lyra!
Looks like Lyra is channeling Cozy Glow.
oh Jesus, run for the hills...
You've lived in this world for far too long to be this naive
Their loss indeed
*Confused boner noises*