This story is progressing nicely, but this chapter was shorter than I prefer.

As long as this story turns out entertaining, I'm fine with it.

Unlike the other ponies he’d seen she had both wings and a pair of feathered lavender wings coming from her back.

Umm... two pairs of wings?

It's okay so far, will keep awaiting more.

8070065 i agree but meh, ya know. id rather have small updates then none

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Quality>Quantity

I'm just saying the sweet spot is between 3000-6000 words.

Anything above would bore people midway and anything below is not worth reading to some people.

lovin it!

Well we got the introductions over already(except Spike) so we can now focus on the story. So the question will be, will David hook up with his boss first or his roommate?

I like how all the ponies are so welcoming of him. Seriously, screw Manehatten and Canterlot.
Also, I thought that Rainbow's hair was only six colours. I also thought Equestrian rainbows were only six colours. Which I actually think makes sense I mean in the seven accepted colours of the rainbow, two are purple. I think it's neater to just have the primary and secondary colours.

Great story, Minor typo in chapter 2

He quickly made his way to the translation and purchased his ticket for Ponyville.

Train Station.

Chapter 3

she had both wings and a pair of feathered lavender wings coming from her back.

Horn

The Monk

Unlike the other ponies he’d seen she had both wings and a pair of feathered lavender wings coming from her back.

I believe what you meant was a horn and wings but its all good.

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Quite.

I do love this story, and shall continue to follow it while it exists. Just two things bother me, there are a few instances of repeated words and statements very close together in sentences and paragraphs throughout the story so far, and second this "fact" I have seen authors constantly seem to put in their stories: "No, that’s illegal, same goes with horses." Wrong. It is one of the most widely consumed meats in rural areas of Europe and it is only in the "developed" countries that it is considered a taboo, but it has never actually been against the law to consume horse/pony meat. To be honest it is quite tasty when its prepared properly, North America up until recently was one of the largest Horse slaughter trades on Earth, Just the majority of it was always exported. Go to Italy, Spain, Japan or some South American countries and its a staple part of the diet.

Abrupt ending there glossed over character interaction. Missed opportunities and feels lazy. Try to avoid this. Write out a conversation and then say it out loud to see if it sounds like it would be something you would hear. Flesh out characters. That is more important than any plot.

It's a good start I would like to see you go further and continue this story.

Good story so far! Can't wait to read the next chapter.

Pretty good, hope it'll continue soon.

When does the next chapter come out?

Update?

I'm shallow, but I gave a downvote for incomplete. Not a bad story, I would have loved to see where it went.