A romance story with Twilight and Trixie, based in a world where Twilight and Trixie are a couple, and get together in secret to go on dates.
Very well written, and both Twilight and Trixie seemed to be in character. I'm not really that into Twixie but this is a good story, well done.
Hey There! This is really awesome. I think you have taken a good middle ground with Trixie's characterization. Some of the scene transitions are a little clunky/rushed. Also you have a typo: 'wear you cape'
Great stuff! Very well-written. You make good on emotions and on good, subtle humor. Thanks for sharing this, and I'll be looking for additions to this story, I hope you go through with that idea :D
There where some adorable moments in there, that's for sure. Good stuff, man.
Fix'd! Thanks for pointing that out ^_^
You just had to make a reference to 'that' fanfic didn't you?
Loved it from start to finish. Can't wait for the next one when they tell the others.
All in all story well told well done my friend well done
I see the concept and realize that this would be incredible.
I liked it so much, I was going to watch the author.
Then I realized that the author was Yukito. Someone I already watched.
YUKITO, WHY YOU SO GOOD?!! You make my story look like crap!
So I'm gonna stop watching you and then watch you again! How's that sound?
I'm assuming you mean the famous Pinkie based one that begins with a C.
I like to imagine that, when Pinkie gets stressed out, she writes horror/gore stories to calm herself down, as opposed to going insane and having another tea party with inanimate objects again.
Trixie and I seem to have similar karaoke skills.
What makes this work, for me, is the scene where Trixie is explaining the origin of her Cutie Mark and totally abandons her third-person references, arguably her least-appealing characteristic. ("Bob Dole," said ancient human Bob Dole, "disagrees.")
And these are two ponies I wanted to see shipped: Trixie's always tried to maintain a distance from the rest of the world, and Twilight always seems to think that nopony will ever want her because she's such a bookworm / egghead / recluse / whatever.
This was awesome, I am defidently looking forward to reading more of this story :) update soon please
Also I noticed you had some sentences that had some errors in it, if you want I read fanfics almost religiously, I could pre read and point out these errors if you wanted
Btw. Twixie = awesome
Good story, Twixie, not clop, and there'll be more written as separate, related stories?
in the descpirtion you said you be making more stories based off this one and i pray that you do this is really really good
I think we need a sequel about how the rest of the Mane 6 respond to Twilight and Trixie's relationship.
Erm... can you continue this story? With trixie coming with Twi to Ponyville?
It will be amazing!
I think I might just take you up on that offer in the future :3
A good, fun story.
I thought Trixie's backstory was a tad cliche, but that just may be due to me seeing so many similar backstories for her, that I've become desensitized. I also find it surprising Twilight didn't comment on the Sonic Rainboom.
Oh well. Either way, very good. A nice late night read for me before I go to sleep!
And I don't think you need the sex tag. Everything you have is implied for the most part.
I really enjoyed this story, but it seems unfinished. All the hype for an exciting conflict of twi bringing trixie to ponyville? I duno but the ending WORKS but that doesnt mean it feels any less sudden.
Still, live your style! Please cotinue writing =D
Yeah, I'm planning on have her bring it up later, so don't worry 'bout that.
And thanks, I'll remove the tag then if it's not necessary ^_^
Very, very nice. A bit saucy, but IMHO doesn't cross into mature. Trixie... so much untapped potential. So much ignored, too. I like how you write her.
Sooooo...*kicks dirt with hooves* 'uhhh, sequel? Please?
I loved this story. The sex tag is unnecessary. Also, this needs to be continued. This really felt like a single chapter in a larger story, and I want to know how they initially got together, and how Twilight's friends will react.
So adorable! Such a sweet little story, I can hardly wait for the sequel.
I'm going to pretend that said sequel is a definite thing, and not just a 'maybe', for the sake of my sanity.
As I read it, Boast Busters never happened in this world, and Twixie has never met the rest of the mane 6? In which case, Twilight's fear of telling them who she's dating seems a little over-wrought... only it's Twilight Sparkle so over-wrought and over-thought are not surprising at all
Oh no, Boast Busters did happen. But Twilight never really had anything against Trixie in my mind, and I like to think they could easily get along if they just talked to each other for a bit (which is basically what happened. They met by chance and talked a bit, and found they had a lot in common)
Out of curiosity, what made you think Boast Busters didn't happen?
Thanks for clearing that up!
I read too much into "they met by chance at a sci-fi convention in Manehatten". I took that to mean "for the first time", particularly as you never make a direct reference to the events of Boast Busters. I now understand that they met again, after the events of that episode, hence Twi's uncertainty about [re]introducing Trixie to her friends. I was torn between the two interpretations as I read, and the wrong one won.
But Trixie, since the beginning, nopony has stood at the top, neither you nor I, not even Celestia herself!
That was actually a pretty sweet story, after it started with them mentioning gore fics I assumed it would end up being bad but you did a really good job on it. I hope to see more of this.
so finaly heeded our suggestions on making it one story?
I am loving this
Gooooooood. Goooooooooooooood. Eeeeeeexcellent. :D
Well Spike took that much better than I thought... then again he was about ready to fall asleep so meh
So if it is a Twixie story, it will be set on Mars and everypony will be wearing Snickers ?
Hold on... *checks view mature box is unchecked* Wow... it's amazing what you can slip under the teen category I thought content like this:
Trixie was busy working her tongue over Twilight’s body, and all Twilight could do was fall to her haunches as she lost herself to Trixie’s teasing.
Was WAAAAAY out of bounds for a Teen fic. You learn something new everyday it seems. I'm not going to read anymore (sorry) it's too much if you catch my drift.
This was a joy to read I'm probably gonna end up saying this every chapter, but it was very easy to edit.
You spelt patiently wrong in the authors notes
>>10615091061509...I meant to do that :applejackpokerfaec:
>>10616401061640 you spelt face wrong...
>>10616691061669 That one actually was intentional Anywhom, patiently is now spelled correctly :3
another great (and powerful) chapter
You, my dear friend. have claimed my three millionth read word on this site^^
I love your story and everything you do with it.
I'm rather enjoying this. Looking forward to more. =3
i hope this next chapter comes out quicker because i enjoy this story
This is an awesome pair!
Datin' on a prayer!
Take my hoof, and we'll make it I swear!
I wish more people shipped Twinkie, and more importantly that they're good at it
You have done this
Good to see this as one story, here. It just makes more sense that way.
Good on Spike, there. And damn, pretty powerful scene with Trixie and the old gang, there. Can't wait for more!
Also,, best present EVER!
Well this is going to be interesting can't wait for the revalation of trixie learning of twilights family
Ah, this was another great chapter cant wait for more! And my I cant wait to see what happens when Twi and Shining meet up. I feel will be super cool or super awkward.
Yay, double date!
okay this was an awesome chapter.... totally waiting on the epicness that will be the reaction of Shining Armor when he finds out Twilight is dating Trixie
Ah a beautiful bait and switch. I thought it was Shining Armor calling to Twilight. Since when does Equestria have terrorists, it's a fairly homogenous population.
Once they meet up with Shining and Cadance, it can be a TRIPLE DATE!!!!
Or Super Chaotic!!
Well the changelings were kinda like terrorists...I guess you could just think of them as being a super rare thing or something.
I can't wait until Trixie finds out about Twilights family^^
With Spike’s help (brought about by a hoofful of sapphires and rubies) - I believe it's hoof-full, I may be wrong
Also, Bon-Bon can be a hoofful - same
While I'm at it...
Now you're cooking with grease. I'm suddenly intrigued. More!
Quite nice, here! And hmm, Twilight and Shining and Cadance. Gonna be interesting for the inevitable meetup there.
I agree with Neobrony, Bravisimo
I agree with jaccan.
I agree with all of the above. Excellent job!
Great chapter, I love this take on Trixie.
May I join in on the bravos as well? This is such a fantastic story. I luvs it! Keep up the amazing work!
And so, this just got interesting.
No, wait, wrong. It was always interesting because YOU are always interesting!
WOw. this is good, but there is so much going on its hard to keep track, but damn its good!!!
But god help you if Twilight and Shining don't meat up!!!
But I am loving this story!! please keep it up!
Lets see, Twilight has nightmares and a servant of Nightmare Moon is on board......JK I don't see the relation what so ever. But, I don't think Cadence would react this calmly to seeing her coltfriend with some other pony.
Keep going, sir
The original plan was for her to be kinda like Twilight in Lesson Zero, where he sanity slowly slips away and she completely overreacts to the situation. But then I thought that the Princess of Love probably wouldn't jump to conclusions like that, and would be able to tell by being close to Shining Armour who he truly loved. So I'm still kinda thinking about what direction Cadance should take for now.
What do you guys think? Would it be OOC of Cadance to be suspicious and over protective of Shining Armour, or do you see her as a more trusting pony?
Oh come on! You have have have to have all four of them, Cadence, Shining, Twilight, and Trixie in the same room together or something on this cruise! The suspense of seeing that moment of recognition and realisation is killing me here!
If you can't tell from that, I like your work so far
>>13179591317959 Well, we have all seen how trusting and calm Cadence was during her wedding. So I guess she can stay calm during this, but this was before Cadence was married to Shining. Cadence might not seem like the jealous type, but she can be overprotective. That overprotective side would eventually cause her to overreact to the smallest of misunderstanding.
I demand moar!!
I see her as more of a trusting pony. Since love does denote some trust and you cannot spread love without trusting someone.
This is hilariously entertaining.
Good stuff so far, looking forward to more shenanigans. XD
Oh, this is delicious. Trixie being a hero... but can't tell Twilight. And Shining and Cadance and it's gonna be so good when it all comes crashing down, which I think it's gonna. Can-not wait for more!
are you going to show us how twilight and trixie became a couple in the first place
Yeah, at some point, there'll be some flashback chapters.
just found this story, and i have to admit that it is one of the best twixie fics ive seen thus far.
Very good story. Any idea when the next chapter will come out?
Sadly, no idea. But definitley some point before Christmas...Not very specific, but hey, it's something at least.
>>13738641373864 No rush. You take all the time you need
Now im definitely looking forward to christmas!
Oh, updated? Commence read.
Comment: Well there goes extremely blunt Lyra. Blueblood being stupid. Sea-ponies make an entrance? Interesting, thought maybe some crazy out of control magical incident from Twilight. Glad they are alright.
what happened to night one? was my first reaction. then my brain actually worked. And love the chapter
BLUEBLOOD! Why do you suck so bad?!
TwilghtXTrixie! .....Why are you so cute?!
Author! Why you rock so much?!
Trixie smirked and leaned closer to Trixie.
Ah yes, i knew Trixie loves herself
Awww. I was hoping Shining Armor would find out about Twilight and Trixie.
When is shining armor going to found out that his sister is a fillyfooler and please makes sure it doesn't take you more than a month next time you update
Really love this story; it shows the actual relationship as opposed to most that only show up to the point that they confess and get together. I look forward to alot from this fic; Twilight's friends reactions, more of Trixie's history, the reveal to Shining and Cadence about Twilight and Trixie. Just so much awesome that I wish I could favorite this story more than once. : )
...Blueblood better get his ass kicked over this or court which ever comes first... or at least get trixy a cool eye patch...id want a settlement
I used to think that Twixie was just Trixie but in baby voice, and then I realised that it's Twilight + Trixie
Great (and powerful) story so far... :applejackpokerface:
YOU FOOLED ME! THERE'S NO SUCH THING AS :applejackpokerface: !
I love this story SO MUCH! Trixie and Twilight are so cute together, and the name Twixie is just pure...amazing-ton! I can't wait to read more :3
>>14982181498218 lol, i was about to say that lol