Favorited and liked because I want to watch the HECK out of this story.

Great premise with fairly believable characterizations - though working with two non-canon personalities makes it easy to suspend our disbelief in any case.

Looking forward to more of this!

Whoa,

DIS

IS

BEAUTIFUL!

Allrighty!

Will read :>

impresive......or rather interesting

would like to see were this goes.....

Holy cow. I'm pretty impressed. Make this good, Ponky, I wanna see this come to fruition.

Daring is even worse than Rainbow.....and that takes skill...nah she's just a jerk.

FINALLY!!

Someone else who thinks (or at least says) that Daring and Ditzy are both Do(o)s off the same tree!

I've thought this for a while.

You have earned a moustache.

Wow, impressive plot line!

Oh. MY. GOSH!!!

Faving....with tiger blood. I have got to see where this leads.

>>807555807555  Thanks, Resda!  Good point you have there... now I kind of feel like I'm taking advantage of all of you.  You MUST BELIEVE WHAT I WRITE!  

>>807574807574  Awww... thank you!  

>>807714807714  Gee thanks, AP.  I really appreciate the unexpected pressure.    But really, I'll do my best.  Let me know if I satisfy when it's over, yeah?

>>807861807861  I knew I couldn't be the only one!  Their color schemes (other than Daring's eyes...) are very similar, and it's an adorably funny concept!  

>>807884807884  And now... I am a happy writer.  

>>808185808185  HAHA!  Tiger blood...   Thanks, DC2!

>>808404808404

and the names...

How has no-one else put this together yet?

I demand moar

This is an entertaining start, without a doubt. Ditzy's tension around Dash is cute, both for Dash's similarity to Daring and for the obvious other reason. The sibling byplay is fairly well-presented, and the exposition is pretty smoothly crammed into the dialogue without too many "tool marks" showing. Arguments are always a great way to share information with the reader.

And of course, a nice cliffhanger at the end of a chapter is always a good way to build interest.

I am certainly curious to see where this goes.

This is really interesting, I am following this to see were it goes.

>>808707808707  Thanks, Cheeril... uh, Saddlesoap!  I'll keep incorporating your wise teachings into future stories.

>>808545808545  You shall have it.

I like this approach to the whole Daring Do idea.  

Brilliant,

waiting for more :)

Rainbow Dash: preparing fangasm in three... two... one...

Oh hell yes!

Couple of minutes with pure epicness :D

Oh, boy. Wait until she realizes who actually got the poison kiss. She'll never look at ol'Featherbrain the same way again.

Holy fuck...  That's all I can say really.  Best wishes!

>>820741820741

And so Rainbow's heart exploded that day.

Oh hey. Hey sis. Remember that time I ALMOST MURDERED YOU AND YOUR UNBORN CHILD!?

Seriously, this is a maybe a little too intense.

>>822811822811  Euugghh... when you put it that way it is!

*SORT-OF-NOT-REALLY-SPOILERS!(morelikejustinsightfromtheauthor)*  Daring was more devastated by the accident than she lets on.  She's seriously scarred by it, but uses expert flippancy and sarcasm to make it "not a big deal" and ease her mind.  And Ditzy definitely WAS NOT pregnant with Dinky when they fought over the stallion.  You'll get more detail to the backstory by the end, I promise.  

>>823595823595

Okay. Then we have:

Oh hey. Hey sis. Remember that one time I ALMOST MURDERED YOU!?

A little better, but not all that much.

Yeah, it is realistic, but it's a kind of realistic people aren't necessarily comfortable with- especially here since we're dealing with what in the show is an Adventuring Archaeologist caricature- I know when I see Daring Do I expect adventure fun times with a Chaotic Good protagonist. You've ditched the D&D alignment tables and given the ponies more human hearts, which caught me in a full on broadside.

I would like this story a lot more had the summary actually prepared me for it. You either need to throw up a dark tag or give a better description, because I don't really think the sad tag cuts it here(preferably the better description, because for all the drama I don't really see this as going too dark). They say don't judge a book by it's cover, but by golly the name, description and illustration made me expect adventure fun times with the Doo sisters, and not a family scarred by a near fratricidal incident.

>>823718823718  Hmm... your argument is valid.  Very valid.  I originally had a much more lighthearted premise for this whole thing, but having Daring be the cause of Ditzy's derpedness was too golden to pass up.

You ask for a better description?  Then by Jove, YOU SHALL HAVE IT!!  I'm afraid I like the picture too much to let it go, though.  Guess some ponies will just have to be broadsided.

Super cool name/pic, bee-tee-dubs.  Thanks for the Fav + help.

(I read over your comment to make sure I covered everything, and now all I can see is me vomiting a giant "Dark" tag.  )

Ah, man. Watching Rainbow Dash's reaction to her hero breaking down in tears isn't going to be pretty.

So yeah... I love Background Pony.  Sorry, shortskirtsandexplosions, if you ever read this!  I promise, though, that it was out of love.  

A shorter chapter.  And now I'm not really sure where to go.  I have two possible directions in my head.  Anypony have suggestions?  

I have an idea: have Ditzy follow RD and Daring around to see that nopony gets hurt.

Daring Doo

Ditzy Doo

You just blew my fucking mind.

Oh Celestia. Ditzy, Daring, AND a Background Pony reference. My mind is Lunadamned blown!

*TRACKED. TRACKED TO THE MOOOOOON!*

Okay it's pretty much a given at this point that Rainbow will be Daring's new partner.

This will prove disastrous.

Since the two ponies think so similarly, they will fall into the same trap, or get caught in the same bad situation.

Then along comes Ditzy to save the day!

>>839234839234 Oh-ho-ho, look who knows so much. It just so happens that your guess here is only mostly true.

Thanks for reading. You have surprises in store.

>>839257839257

Oh, dear. It's going to be one of those fics, isn't it?

Eeyup...  

...Watching

Background Pony reference? Tracked.

So Daring Doo is the sister that all about action. While Ditzy Doo is the sister that puts all the clues together and points the way to the treasure.

Is Dinky part alicorn, i wonder... but given the clue came from a Daring Do story, he might just be a normal unicorn. But is Dinky Doo nobility?

Great story so far

Hooray! And I thought your story was perfect before! Your Background Pony!Lyra is impeccable, your Daring Do is phenomenal, and your story is making leaps and bounds. I'm so excited to see where this goes!

>>839257839257

Bring it.

No, but I'm really enjoying following this. Keep it up!

Rainbow Dash is now fully aware of the real Daring Do's existence and location...HERE WE GO!!!

News feed from bronycon: actual name is Derpy Do

Greets :)

random pony: darring, maybe you should give credit where credit is due and stop taking credit for other ponies

darring: stop taking credit for other ponies? thats a good idea! glad i thought of it.

random pony: *facehoof*

>>839137839137 I think Daring should run of with Dinky (obviously a huge fan, and daring knew a younger partner would make a more interesting story), of course Daring being Daring, she didn't consider her sisters reaction. Ditzy then set's of after them and ends up having an incredibly exciting adventure of her own. Meanwhile, rainbow dash goes searching for Daring, and eventually finds her, but then puts both Daring, Dinky and Dash (to many D's) in severe danger. Ditzy comes along and saves the day

just a suggestion

Wow... lots of love for Background Pony.    That's very good to see.  Thanks for all the feedback and encouragement, guys!

>>840158840158  Thank you!!  I'm glad I have not yet disappointed.  And I'm especially grateful for the Lyra compliment.  I tried to stay as faithful as possible to her characteristic prose, but I was admittedly worried how fans of BP would react to her inclusion.  Good to know I pleased at least one.

>>840977840977  Hmmmm... you know, I just might use some of that.    Those D names do get dangerously dizzying...

... Good luck to Daring, she shan't survive one of Pinkie's parties...

Or Rainbow's overjoyed fangasm...

>>839346839346 Which part?

The disaster part or Ditzy coming in to save the day?

Wait...

You don't mean a heroic sacrifice, face heel turn do you?

Hm... Miss Heartstrings seems to know a lot about....

Hm. I wonder where Daring got the inspiration to find a new partner.

(Required comment for a Background Pony reference!)

Uh-oh... they're getting longer...

I'm really excited about where this is going.  I hope that anypony else shares that feeling.

That said, sorry for this chapter.  It's kind of boring and not very well-written.  I don't have pre-readers yet, so...

Plus I put in all those stupid references to random stuff that no one even knows/cares about... sigh.  Oh, well.  It was fun.

THANKS FOR READING, ANYWAY!  

you spent the second half of the chapter in italics

Daring Do ... Ditzy Do??!!! How in Equestria did I see that potential until now! You are a genius!  I look forward to reading the story, you got me hooked already.

Uh, you left the italics on at the end there.  

>>886698886698>>886887886887    Nice one, Ponky.  Thank ya kindly.  

Background Pony references, hm?

please continue soon. i really like this story ^^-  

Me rike. Me rike a rot

And the excitement grows... Need more ASAP.

Uh-OH!!! Looks like Alula's pals have put two and two together and got washing machine.

Also, Twilight is fairly consistent: a know-nothing know-it-all who's about to do whatever ponies do when humans eat crow.

hey how come in FimF that Dizty Doo is now Dizty Whooves (or something)? I don't understand that.

this is wonderful though

This is just tooo awesome XD

But Daring doo sure knows how to write a book. I can't wait when RD finds out that DD was only a sidekick and DiD was the main adventure.

Though I love how you potray DD and I love how X3 you make DD's books.

Some guy who steals babies and who looks at people through windows...

Slender Pony?

Please tell me it isn't Slender Pony! That guy creeps me out!

Candle Jack strikes again.

>>887007887007  Mmmmhmmmm.  

>>888269888269  It isn't Slender Pony.    There you go!  Rest easy.

>>889703889703

Wait, is that true, or are you just saying that because I asked you to say that?

>>889542889542

Aww, you know how to do the Candlejack meme, right? He's supposed to kidnap you mid-sent

>>890089890089

-whistles while carrying you away- Fool I am Candle Jack.

>>886585886585 Is it me or does this seem like it could head in the direction of the idea I sent to you a while back, it seems like a good setup for it. Otherwise, really good, loving it so far

>>890304890304  I fleshed out the whole story last night, and you definitely had an influence on it.  Thanks for your suggestions!  

>>890338890338 yippy!

I must say old chap, this is a tale of epic proportion.

Tally ho onward.

Whoo! Awesome chapter! I am seriously loving this.

that said, I can't wait for the next chapter, it is really grating on my impatient nerves not to know already.

I'm used to reading close to 800 words a minute and plowing through book series rapidly. All this waiting... it's tearing me up!

And if Alula is indeed an Alicorn in truth...

Then is Dinky just Royalty? Or possibly a full-blown Alicorn to-be?

>>900833900833 800 words a minute!? What are you, a robot?

Thanks for reading, but I'm afraid you'll have to be patient with me. I don't have a lot of time to write.

>>901021901021

That's alright.

I'm one fo those people who read a series with dozens of books and then look to see if there's any spin-offs just to try to read more of the universe it's set in.

And yes, a little more than 800 words per minute. I can speed read at close to 1500 words per minute if I've already read the text, as my mind starts filling in sentences without informing my senses.

I had a Post-College-Graduate reading level in third grade.

I devoured the ENTIRE first six books of the Harry Potter series in a single morning, in less than five hours.

I read average-sized paperback Sci-Fi or Fantasy novels over the course of a day, in 10-minute bursts, and can remember the entire story the moment I pick the book back up.

I can fully summarize the plot and ideas behind any book I've ever read, and from the weirdest of viewpoints, such as from Snape's perspective of the entire HP series, to give an example.

I reconstruct worlds and characters in my mind and then try to draw them, though I'm still working on drawing hands, faces, and shoulders.

I can extrapolate the origins of magics, advanced technologies, and even create original ideas for how barely-explained species work to the point of figuring out ways their entire life cycle would work and look like.

And I'm now an unemployed 19-year-old homeless kid.

Life can suck, but at least I have ponies!

>>901321901321  Cool story, bro.

No, seriously.  That is a cool story.  Well, "cool" in a way.

I can read at, uh... 5 words a minute.  If I try really hard.  But I'm a fast typer!    And I'm the best whistler I know!

Sorry you're homeless.    But just like you said, at least you have ponies!!  Please PM me anytime if you're bored or sad or just need a good friendly conversation.  And again, thanks for reading!

>>902879902879

You got Skype?

I'm on there right now.

Oh shit!

Why do I suspect the babies escaped on their own?

The possibility of Dashie and Daring teaming up... I don't know if Equestria is prepared for the awesome that may come out of that.

Very intriguing story.  Added to my favorites and watch list.

Good job on the EQD feature

More... I NEED MOAR!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Also, congrats on getting on EQD, that's how I found this story.

Daring is such a........b-*yay*!!!!!!!  I'm sorry but a 'older' sister that ends up causing permanent damage to her sister, runs away to write about their adventures (while leaving her out of the stories that wouldnt even exist without her) and hords all thr money she makes to herself!!! That is not cool. I hope rainbow realizes what a complete jerk Daring is. I enjoy the tension and the unfairness, but only if its later resolved. Anyways great job, yada yada... Just make Daring Doooooooo pay for not only the pain she's caused, but also the selfish use of their stories to build herself up and completly cut Ditzy out of her life. That. Is. Not. Cool.

As long as daring pays, ill enjoy this story.

Love it love it love it! I'm really looking forward to seeing more!

Holy sweet mother of... That was awesome! Well done, sir. I look forward to catching up!

Also, why did this idea never occur to me before? The possible relation between Daring Do and Ditzy Doo, that is. It seems so obvious now

Warning: Incoming fangasm...

>>839137839137

Ok, good. I'm glad I wasn't going insane and tricking myself into thinking that you put a reference to Background Pony in this. It actually was a reference, and perhaps I'm not insane

Wait, what were you referring to again?

This was fantastic. Thank you for making EqD and bringing this story to my attention (oh, and congrats on making it there too ). I eagerly anticipate the next update. Happy writing!

That was lyra from Backround Pony....... This story just got A LOT more awsome. Great chapter BTW!

Wow, this story is just plain AWESOME!

I can't wait to read moooooore!!!

Oh crap! Five bucks on the sultan. Just a hunch...

>>955923955923  Don't be sorry.  This Daring is supposed to be annoying and... er... "Dashy".  Great comment, thanks so much.  You will enjoy this story.  

>>956301956301  Thank you for all the comments and love!  Always good to see fellow SS&E fans (>>956378956378) appreciating the reference.  I'll try to have the next chapter up by the middle of the week!  I hope it continues to entertain!

>>everyponyelse  THANK YOU for the praise, hope, guesses, and thumbs!  You guys (and girls) are what I do this for.  So glad you're enjoying it!  PM or comment at me anytime with questions, comments, suggestions, and friendship.  :ponkybeam:

Faved and Headcanon'd.  So much goodness here, how did I never notice?

Needs more lizards.

What a cliff hanger!

I loved the shout out to Bronys trying to defend the show with Pinkie's poems

Dude...

I want to read the Daring Do book! Can you write that, as well?

BACKGROUND PONY REFERENCE.

AWW YEAH.

Anyways, this story is gold. Pure gold.

Things are getting interesting.

*Sniffle* poor ditzy i knew something was up with that "Daring Do" great story and awesome details

p.s. i hope you can read my story "A Rose, A Daisy, And A Lily"

I really like this approach. I admit I had some idle musings of the similarities of Ditzy and Daring's names, but this sir takes the cake. I am loving this so far, and I'm curious as to why anyone would want to foalnap to innocent spawn of a baker's family.

Definitely got a watch and a thumbs up. Can't wait to see how this shapes up.

Alula i am sooo confused this wasnt t he best chapter but still going to read on