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  • E Griffin Over the Line

    A Lunaverse fic, where Raindrops must contend with the antics of Rainbow Dash and Gilda.
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  • E Boast Busted: the Lost Tales

    Lunaverse: Twilight lectures a group of so called "sirens".
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  • E A Final Crisis of Conscience

    Lunaverse: after the events of CO2E, Twilight is finally ready to turn her self in to the authorities, but can she really bring herself to take that final step?
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    Lunaverse: Cheerilee goes overboard when trying to prepare for the fight against Corona.
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    Trixie becomes lost in a world of wizards and witches. Also involving an odd fellow with blue box and his wall-eyed companion.
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  • E Broken Tiara

    Lunaverse: Diamond Tiara makes a stunning confession, but is her heart's desire smitten by another?
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Blog Posts18

  • 18w, 6d
    Blast From the Past

    So, over on the Lunaverse forms, a few of us were discussing alternate realties and such, during which one of the old conceits that we all use to joke about came up again.  That being the notion that the entire Lunaverse is written as though it were the actual show on some parallel earth, with the show we known in our world being the fanfiction over there.

    Anyway this reminded me of the first ever "contribution" I ever made to the Lunaverse, long before there really was a Lunaverse as we now know it.  This was regretfully though a post made on the comments thread for Boat Busted over on EQD, and somewhere along the line (presumably during a site upgrade) they seem to have purged all the older comments.  Fortunately I once reposted it to the Lunaverse forums, though unfortunately I had no idea where.  Which is a problem as the Lunaverse has one of the largest and most active forums on all of FiM fic.  With a little digging and a lot of luck, however, I finally found it and can now repost it in a more easily accessible place for posterity.

    As a preface, in this review I pretended to be a brony living on an alternate earth where Boast Busted is an episode of the show, while Boast Busters is a fanfic.  Also, please keep in mind that this was all written before LNLD, meaning it's no longer an accurate reflection of how the Lunaverse actually turned out.

    Ooh, I remember reading this back when only the first chapter was up. It was loads of fun, but I forgot to ever check back on it, so I was quite pleased to see this pop up here giving me the opportunity to finish it.

    It's kind of neat how the author manages to take background ponies like Rainbow Dash, Rarity, Applejack and even the one-shot 'villain' Twilight Sparkle then recasts them as the mane characters. It is kind of weird to only get minor references to our actual mane-6, though seeing Trixie cast in such an obnoxious role is even weirder. Sure she's always had issues with pride and ego, but this author dials them up to 11, though you can easily see how he still had to stretch to make her a convincing antagonist by resorting to using Snips and Snails to do the legwork with the ursa.

    Now I hear he's going to go back and rewrite the first episode, awesome. I've seen plenty of takes on an evil Luna; Black Umbra, Eclipse, Midnight Shadow; so I can't wait to see what he does with this Nightmare Moon. Also it will be interesting to see how such an unhinged bookish snob like Twilight could ever make friends, until then I'm not sure I'm entirely buying the author's too modest to show off her magic interpretation. I wonder how much of that has to do with that baby dragon the author gave her? I know a lot of readers will probably try to call him out on being a poorly conceived OC self insert, but I personal found him amusing enough.

    Then there are the author's choices for the elements of laughter and kindness. Pinkie Pie was an all too obvious choice, what with how her wacky background antics in the actual show are always a riot, probably why despite her being the mascot of our fandom he left her out of this story since it could have easily overshadowed any other plot. At least I hope that's why as I'd hate to think it had anything to do with the whole iTunes censorship fiasco. Fluttershy though will prove something of a wild card, as she's such an underused background pony who hardly anyone ever seems to write about.

    Anyway, I left this post wholly unedited from it's original form.  Though, looking back I really should have referred to something like Zune instead of iTunes, just to sell the idea of the world itself also being weirdly reversed.

    8 comments · 116 views
  • 41w, 5d
    Review-like Thingy: "Simple Ways" -- (SPOILERS, duh...)

    I don't normally do the whole episode reviews thing.  Well not explicitly at least.  I don't write blogs of my own, but some of my replies to other blogs or vlogs can be nearly as detailed.  One such blogger I routinely engage in such comments with is my good friend InsertAuthorHere, arguably it's how we became friends in the first place. (…oh, and while someone of his famed renown hardly needs my meager endorsements, I'll implore anyone reading this blog that doesn't already follow his work to GO AND FOLOW HIS WORK!  Seriously, he was one of the authors that helped inspire me to make my own feeble attempts at pony fanfiction)

    Anyway, IAH was apparently of the opinion that because of my status as an unabashed worshiper of the one and only BEST PONY that is the fair lady Rarity, that I'd be driven to the war path by this episode (I guess for steeling my "waifu" or something like that, as if I'd ever be worthy of her affections).  While I certainly had my reservations about it, after-all clichéd romance was supposedly one of those girly tropes that this show explicitly didn't cater too.  Still, I was committed to keeping an open mind, but now that I've actually seen it with my own eyes, what's the verdict?  Is the episode a worthy tribute to the goddess, or is it time for me to bust out a doomsday device or two and teach the world a lesson for daring to besmirch her flawless grace… let's find out.

    Oh, and just as a final reminder, there will be SPOILERS!!!

    So after a functional, but mostly expository open, the episode proper hooks me right away with Rarity's newest dress, a prefect reflection of the styles I associate with her character and something her last focus episode failed to deliver on.  Rarity's tastes aren't fashionable just because they are edgy or unconventional, but because they are a true artistic expressions of the soul that reflect her personal inspirational muse -- most often expressed by gratuitous use gemstones.  

    Now then though, we come to the episode's controversial new character, Trenderhoof.  When Rarity first drops his name my reaction was similar to the rest of her friends; it just seems so out of left field, not to mention why should a celebration of Ponyville town pride need to in any way impress this pony.  Still, to the episode's credit Rarity quickly explains how his reviews have put other towns on the map, and so for a brief instance I get my hopes up that this episode is actually going to focus on Rarity trying to impress him not for her own sake, but for her desire to enhance the reputation of Ponyville... and then she starts fawning like a school-filly.

    Now admittedly, this isn't really anything new for Rarity, but I'll be upfront about it; Trenderhoof's design out right sucks.  He's awkwardly lanky, with a bland color palette, a too cool for rules soul patch, and don't even get me started on his wardrobe.  He bears no resemblance to any of the previous ponies that Rarity has idolized, romantically or otherwise.  Hoity Toity, Fancy Pants, and even Blueblood; these were all ponies that could be readily identified as individuals of sophistication and class at a glance.  Trenderhoof though, no, just no.

    He's really seems more of a hipster by design, which is seemingly reflected in his pension for liking things before they are cool.  This is practically the antithesis of Rarity and the types of ponies she has previously admired who are all TRENDSETTERS.  Admittedly there is a superficial overlap, but the key difference if that a trendsetter thrives on promoting their passion so that others can appreciate it too (or at least to enhance their own fame), as opposed to the hipster mentality that almost abhors the notion that the things they like could be corrupted by the masses.

    Sigh… and then we get to the train station which is a scene that gives me very mixed feeling.  Rarity is nervous, to the extreme, which might work if this was an episode just about town pride and/or her career.  We've seen Rarity get nervous about living up to the expectations of her idols and likewise seen her embarrassed about the rusticness of her hometown.  Unfortunately this scene frames it all "romantically", which is something Rarity has never really been shown to falter on.  Compared to her forwardness with trying to woo the affections of Blueblood… well, technically she did still have to work up the nerve to first introduce herself, but in this episode that aspect is overplayed and it gets old fast.

    Still, expectations can be a real nerve-racker, and once she does get over them her interactions with Trenderhoof are everything I've come to expect from Rarity, even if I still don't really get what she finds attractive about him, physically or intellectually.  Of course then we get to the even bigger controversy of this episode, the love triangle… but you know what?  I actually like this part.  I mean I still don't get Rarity's half, but Trenderhoof's attraction to Applejack makes more senses.  As I mentioned before, he seems to me like a hipster archetype and so for him the appeal of AJ would be in the "exotic".  Now admittedly one might think he's met farmers before, but AJ isn't just a farmer; previous episodes have established that she is genuinely good looking and cleans up real well, so I can believe that the combination of such contrasting aspects would sucker Trenderhoof.  I even adore his initially inane attempts to woo AJ with things she could care less about.  I also like how AJ is clearly not oblivious to his advance, she's just not even remotely interested and has got better things to do.

    Oh, and along the way we get some amusing lampshades in regards to Spike's one-sided crush on Rarity.  They never really go anywhere, but they are still no less fun.

    Now then, we have Rarity's first attempts to emulate AJ and prove that she can be just as rustic, in her best jewel incrusted work-duds… and I absolutely love every minute of it.  I mean, yeah, it's painfully embarrassing and reeks of the most shallow superficial facades imaginable, but that's pretty much the entire point.  Then failing that, she takes it all even further with an insultingly over the top hick style redress of not just herself but the entire theme for the upcoming festival… and that accent, my god that forced country accent.  I. just. LOVE. It! Beyond that I think what I enjoy most about Rarity's bald-faced attempts to go "simple" is that she embraces it with ALL her normal flare for the elaborate, and in so doing completely misses the point.

    Admittedly, I half expected Applejack to be rightfully infuriated that this is how her supposed "friend" sees her, but to AJ's credit the whole scenario is just too absurd to do anything other than laugh.  Besides, why get angry when you can get even, which brings us to the elegant Miss Applejewel.  Now the shoe is on the other hoof and I love it all just as much, and even if AJ is actually trying to help, I like to imagine her taking at least a little satisfaction in it as well.  Admittedly AJ's choice of dress does clash with her own natural colors, but that's kind of the point; Rarity sucks at being rustic and AJ is equally bad at being fancy.  Though one minor complaint, her vocal affections in this scene were disappointing; I really wish that they'd used her Manehattan accent from Cutie Mark Chronicles, but I guess AJ's just out of practice after all these years.

    So after a bit mudslinging --literally-- the conflict is resolved and all is right in the world again, plus we all get to have one last laugh at Trenderhoof's expense… and may it truly be the last as if I never see him again it would be too soon.  Seriously, I'll take more of Blueblood's pompously inflated self-important flank any day.  Now I will say that I was a little disappointed with the closing montage of the actual festival.  I don't much care for all the blatant recycling of Canterlot character models which seem too fancy for Ponyville even under the auspicious supervisions of Rarity.  It all feels more like she just went and replaced everypony in town rather than gussying them up as best she could.  Still, for just these short few scenes I guess we couldn't expect them to budget the expense of anything new.

    So then, my final evaluation? :raritycry: :raritydespair: :raritystarry: :raritywink: :duck:

    The episode has its flaws.  It really should have kept the focus of Rarity's desire to impress Trenderhoof on her career rather than heart.  The attempt at a love triangle is woefully forced and arbitrary to the point of contrivance.  That said, the sheer absurdity still made me genuinely laugh in between attempts to palm my own face off to make the embarrassment stop.  Even at their worst in this episode though, the characters remain relatable and likable.  I cringe not because the episode is "bad", but because I pity the characters self-inflicted misfortunes.  So in the end I like the episode, I really and truly do.  It can't compete with any of my top three favorites of this season, but it easily beats out most everything else, including Rarity's other episode this season.

    Granted, Rarity Takes Manehatten had a better premise (and earns bonus points for world building), but it stumbled on a forced and grossly superficial execution.  By contrast, Simple Ways has a dreadful premise, but for the most part shines in execution.  For all that I still don't see why Rarity would have a crush on Trenderhoof in the first place, for the rest of the episode she's in nigh perfect form, even as she compromises everything she believes in to impress a pony that in no way deserves the effort.

    Anyway, Sorry if my lack of fury disappoints, but for good or ill the world shan't be ending today, at least not by my hand.

    20 comments · 249 views
  • 65w, 2d
    Re: What Applejack and Rainbow Dash's Elements of Harmony Should Have Been

    This blog post is something of a response to Digibrony's latest video.  My apologies to my meager subscriber count for wasting time on this instead doing the thing you're all supposedly following me for in the first place and getting a new chapter out in one of my overdue fics.  Anyway, to make sure anyone reading this knows what I'm talking about...

    So, let's cut to the chase.  I can't really agree with this at all.  The idea that AJ and Dash are somehow the wrong way around is just a gross misconception of what their elements mean, both to themselves and in the greater context of being components upon which friendship is built.  It might make for an amusing joke or parody, but shouldn't ever be indulged as having any serious merit.


    Let's start with Applejack and the concept of Honesty — in the context of MLP this is about more than just telling the literal truth, but about being a truthful individual.  When AJ says she's the most dependable pony it's because of that honesty, because once she makes a promise she always keeps it, because failing to do so would make her retroactively a liar.  This was the main conflict in both Applebuck Season and Last Roundup.  It's also likely why she doesn't charge more in SSCS6k.  Given the length of the lines she could easily charge 3, 4, or even 5 bits per mug while still selling out every day, and a profit minded entrepreneur would do just that.  AJ, however, isn't profit minded, but rather honest minded; 2 bits a mug is all her family needs to make enough profit to see them through the winter, so that's all she's going to charge.  It's also why she refuses to "cheat" in the competition by lowering quality standards, because even if it let them make more cider it wouldn't be the genuine product.

    The idea that she is somehow exceptionally more loyal than honest is just silly because her qualities of the former are built out of the latter.  More so though, when the chips are down and shit hits the fan, she's really not very loyal at all.  The most prominent example perhaps being Swarm of the Century, where when the parasprites start devouring all the food in town, AJ abandons her friends and the rest of Ponyville as well in order to safeguard her own farm first and foremost.  Sure one could argue that she was just thinking about making sure everypony would still have food after the crisis, or just choosing loyalty to kin over friends, but that's not really how the scene plays out, and AJ doesn't even make a pretense of apologizing before leaving her friends high and dry on their own.  Likewise, she shows a distinct lack of loyalty in Last Roundup, where she up an leaves behind everypony in Ponyville (including her family) just because she's too prideful to admit she wasn't able to deliver on a promise.

    While yes, it could be said that AJ's episodes are more about loyalty than honesty, they are such always only in so far as AJ herself learning to be more loyal and/or less stuborn, whether it is to others or to herself.  This is precisely why she couldn't be the Element of Loyalty, at least certainly not in the first episode.  To wield the Elements of Harmony is to be an exemplar of that quality, and AJ still has a lot to learn about Loyalty.  Contrast say Rarity, who despite being inarguably vein and occasionally even a little greedy, she is never lacking in generosity, in the willingness to give of herself for the sake of others.  Yes, she occasionally misjudges what it is those around her actually need most, but she is still always giving and no episode has ever been about her learning to be more generous.  Even in Sweet and Elite she is clearly torn between her old friends in Ponyville and her new contacts in Canterlot, with the linchpin that causes her to temporarily make the wrong choice being when those Canterlot ponies first beg her that they absolutely NEED her to attend their various events, that is to say, when they impose upon her generosity.

    Now, I will admit that the way AJ demonstrated her element in the pilot was pretty poorly executed, but that seems mostly the fault having to cram six such trials into a mere 22 minute episode.  Even at that, while it seems silly for AJ not to just tell Twilight outright why it's okay to let go (because Dash and Flutters are there to catch her), the idea still works in that the reason Twilight can trust AJ is because she's honest.  Friendship is built on trust and that trust is built out of honesty.  That said, AJ did much better job of proving this quality, not in the Everfree Forest, but in the Ponville Library when she was the one that told all the others they should both give Twilight the chance to explain and believe what she had to say.  So perhaps AJ's element should have been more accurately called something like "Trust" or even "Faith", with her honesty just being the reason why others can always trust her.

    Still, what AJ really is at the core of her character though, is an archetype for the supposed concept of "good old-fashioned country values", which rightly or not are often considered more honest than modern urban values.


    Now for Rainbow Dash and the concept of Loyalty — she perhaps says it best in one of her earliest lines, "I would never leave Ponyville hanging," and yet despite this bold declaration it's sort of hard to take her at her word.  Not only is Rainbow Dash kind of lazy, but also very self-centered.  At first glance she seems very much like the sort who only cares about herself and would without hesitation abandon others to pursue her own ambitions, which is in fact how Nightmare Moon later tries to tempt her into betrayal.  Actually, I think it could be quite telling that Dash's trial comes last (discounting Twilight of course who had to discover what the sixth element was in the first place) and is the only one where NMM is actively attempting to subvert the pony's future element; it suggests she'd become aware of what was happening and was now taking active measure to prevent the last piece from falling into place.  Anyway though, were Dash the Element of Honesty, she'd likely have rejected the Shadowbolts on the grounds of not wanting a free handout, preferring to earn her victories for herself, but that not what she does and instead jumps at the opportunity completely buying into every bit of ego stroking she's fed; instead it is only when she is forced to choose between her ambition and her friends that she chooses the latter and proves herself the Element of Loyalty.

    Even more so though, this notion that she's somehow the most "authentic" of the mane-six just doesn't bear out, because if anything she's the opposite.  All of her ego, all of her grandstanding might make it seem like she's made out of confidence, but as seen in episodes like Sonic Rainboom, she is anything but confidant; it's all just a mask she wears to hide from her own insecurity and fear of failure.  This compared to Fluttershy who knows she's something of a coward who'd rather runaway and hide than stand up for herself (even while being still quite capable of standing up for others), or Rarity who has no illusions about her own vanity and so makes no false pretenses at modesty and really does feel that she deserves to be treated like royalty, or Pinkie Pie who genuinely does just want to see everypony smile.  There are no pretenses with the other mane-six and they all wear there souls bare and in plain sight; it's really only ever Rainbow Dash who hides from herself and is afraid to admit things because for fear of how others might judge her.

    As in the preceding section it could be said that Dash has more episodes about honesty than loyalty, but again that's because she already is an exemplar of loyalty and so doesn't have much more to learn on that front.  Conversely, in episodes like Read it and Weep she learns that it's okay to both like books and to admit that having a diverse range of interests doesn't have to detract from her core self-identity as an athlete.  She still gets to have episodes about Loyalty though, which is the key conflict in Wonderbolts Academy.  Dash initially goes along with Lighting Dust's recklessness because Spitfire seems to believe in her and Dash believes in Spitfire, or at least she wants to.  The conflict is finally resolved not because of honesty but because of loyalty; Dash wants to be Wonderbolt, it's all she's ever dreamed of, but her loyalty comes first to her friends and perhaps more importantly to her own morality, and if those are values which don't matter to the Wonderbolts than that's not something she can be part of.

    Some people like to use examples where Rainbow Dash speaks her mind as an example of honesty, such as when she said that Rarity kind of was a laughing stock in Suited for Success, or how she was the first of the mane-six to openly voice an opinion on the first set of dresses.  Neither was a particularly good example of being honest though, but rather just being blunt, superficial and inconsiderately tactless.  She's not saying these things because she thinks Rarity needs to hear the truth, but because she never stops to consider how hurtful that truth might be.  Dash might always speak her mind, but it's not because of honesty, but because she just has a bad habit of speaking the first thing that comes to mind without ever stopping to consider the consequences; she's a speedster, not just in her actions but her words as well.  This superficiality, and complete lack of authenticity, is also the driving conflict behind Mysterious Mare-Do-Well, where Dash gets completely sucked into her own hype and forgets that it is her deeds that make her a hero, not her popularity.  Fame can be a fickle and fleeting thing, it's a poor way to define one's own self-worth, and Dash suffered for it when the next big thing came along and she mistakenly felt like she was no longer a hero without all the adoring fans to cheer her on.


    Bring this all back together, I think it's also telling to look at the mane-six's cutie mark stories.  Each of them not only involved discovering their talent, but their future element as well.  Rainbow Dash didn't just prove her speed, but did so while in her own words 'defending Fluttershy's honor'.  She wasn't racing for her own sake but as a way to stand up for someone else.  Whereas AJ found her talent not just in going back to her farm and family, but in finally being able to admit to herself that it was where she truly belongs, the city having been just a false dream she was never really happy with and where she had to pretend to be something else just to fit in.

    If the words LOYALTY and HONESTY seem ill-fitting or lacking when describing these two ponies, it's only because they are just singular words being used to define complex characters and concepts, but they don't have be the only words we use, and we get some good alternatives in Magical Mystery Cure, where Celestia describes them over a panning shot of the character as "charity, compassion, devotion, integrity, optimism, and of course, the leadership".  So really the important thing is to not get hung up on words, but to see past those words to the meaning underneath.

    Because really, if we get hung up on words, would not generosity just be a subset of kindness?  Are not the great lengths Pinkie Pie goes to brighten everyone's day while asking for nothing but a smile in return an expression of generosity? Was not Fluttershy's admission of her own insignificance and humility when Discord tried to first turn her against the others an expression of honesty, or what about Twilight who wouldn't just except the existence of Pinkie Sense and instead tried to find the truth behind it?  Or just as much, how Twilight is unfalteringly dedicated and loyal to the princess.  The fact is that all of the mane-six are good upstanding ponies and as such they all possess aspects of all six Elements of Harmony, just not in equal measure.  Rather than mince details over the exact words used to describe them, we should instead take it as a given that they are the exemplars they already proved themselves to be when first defeating Nightmare Moon and then later Discord.  Instead of trying to define the ponies by the elements, we should define the elements by the ponies.


    Oh, and special thanks to Empty-bee for posting a link to this this on Reddit's MLP analysis community.

    10 comments · 382 views
  • 81w, 4d
    Sometimes the Friendship Really is Magic

    So, I finally got the chance to sit down with my younger cousin, and watch the season three finale.

    She went into it completely unspoiled, not knowing what would happen, and when it came to the moment of truth with Twilight and Celestia in the astral void, well... initially she seemed more focused on cracking some jokes about the poses not looking very natural for an equine body shape.  However, the moment Twilight started rising into the air, glowing with inner light, my cousin's eyes lit up just as much and she was a flurry of, "Oh my gosh, what's happening!" and all I could do is smile as I watched her watch Twilight.

    Then Twilight lands back in Ponyville to spread her wings for the first time and as she does my cousin was practically leaping for joy, which only doubled when Celestia showed up to proclaim that Twilight had not only become an alicorn, but a princess as well.  This is something my cousin had asked about way back when we first started watching episodes together last summer.  Even as early as the end of the second episode, my cousin thought Clestia must be training Twilight to become a new princess, so I knew she was going to enjoy this, but getting to see it all play out on her face was a real treat.

    For all the drama this finale caused in the older peripherals that make up those of us that call ourselves bronies, it was good to see that at least for one young girl --just a few years over the show's target demographics-- this epic event went off flawlessly... well, almost.

    She was very concerned that this meant the show was over, that there would be no more stories left to tell, so it was also nice to be able to assure her that a fourth season was already in the works.

    7 comments · 188 views
  • 97w, 2d
    Back On Track

    3 comments · 143 views
  • ...

This story is a sequel to Boast Busted

Scholar … Prodigy … Fugitive …

After an unfortunate turn of events, Twilight Sparkle has found her self on the wrong side of the law and on the run.  It wasn't her fault though, well maybe a little, but Trixie was the real criminal.  That witch, she had tricked Twilight into all it!  If only there was some way to prove to Princess Luna who the real Element of Magic should be.

If only there was some way…


-- This story is set in RainbowDoubleDash's Lunaverse, and is a sequel to the events of Boast Busted.  If you haven't already read that fic you should consider doing so for improved context.

-- Twilight Sparkle vector by Klarnetist

First Published
22nd Jun 2012
Last Modified
17th Jul 2014

I was wondering what had become of this song! It certainly looks like you've got the making of quite a tale, here.

So, um... yeah, this is a thing now; Don't ask me how or why. :facehoof:

Anyway, this might have only been a one time deal, although chapter 2 is already well underway, and I do have further ideas on how this might proceed after that.  Oh, and just to cut off dead-end speculation, no, she is not going to recruit the other M6.  That said, don't count on me getting back to this regularly or soon, but next part should be up before the weekend is over.  Updates to this story will still likely be infrequent and/or inconsistent at best.  Then again, I never thought even this much would go up, or that I'd write a good chunk of Ch2 before Ch1 even went live, so who knows? :twilightoops:

Also big thanks go out to the folks at Friendship is Witchcraft for writing the music that inspired all of this. :pinkiecrazy:


Oh and sorry, Fizzy Orange.  Looks like I lied about my next fic having no L!M6.  I didn't mean for this to happen instead, honest. :ajsleepy:

Hmm. So far Silverstar is reminding me a bit of Rooster Cogburn from True Grit. The 2010 one, not the 1969 one, but only because it's been forever since I've seen the 1969 one. If you play up that aspect (heck, go for the 1969 one and just make him Pony Wayne), you'll probably be able to get the comedy back.

Oh god......Is it sad that I actually sung the lyrics out loud as I was reading?

Whoops, you forgot to close your bold and color tags.


What?  Where?  Story looks completely fine on my end


It pleases me that my lyrics were good enough to sing.


Ah yes. John Wayne. Patron Saint of Westerns and War movies alike.

:rainbowlaugh: least my father seems to think so, anyway. He has a bible and a cross by his bed, and a picture of John Wayne bigger than the fireplace over the mantle, and a replica of the man's rifle over THAT.

Speaking of which, where do you want this to take place, chronologically?

>>788187 I see problem with the colour tags too myself. Everything turned lavender until the end.

anyway this is something interesting. I wonder how it'll end up :twilightsmile:

I'd almost want to see a version of this...

This is going to be epic. Epically hilarious...


Still not seeing it on my end, and the tags all seem to check out.  Fimfic or some specific browser/configuration would seem to be the one :derpytongue2:ing, not me.


Oh my, I have absolutely no clue.  Wasn't even sure this would make the cut in a way that mattered.  As of right now, since none of the action yet crosses over with the L6, I'd leave it's placement as ambiguous.


Well, that was a decidedly contributing factor responsible for inspiring the last two words of the chapter.

     Oy, that was intense. :rainbowhuh:

     WRITE MOAAAR. :twilightangry2:

     ...Please. :scootangel:

Poor Twilight. I like that you managed to evoke feelings of sympathy for her, despite her being so clearly in the wrong and having almost razed a village. I don't want her to succeed, but I don't want her to be totally humiliated and embarassed either. :-)

"My name is Twilight Sparkle, and I think we can both be a great help to each other, sheriff Silverstar."

I think Sheriff is supposed to be capitalized, but otherwise, this is brilliant! :pinkiehappy:


As per my comment up top, "MOAAAR", is already in the works.  Things will be a bit different with each chapter though, as each of the next 5 will be told mostly from the perspective of whatever hapless pony Twilight is trying to recruit.  So word of warning, there may be unexpected tonal shifts ahead, but I hop that everyone can enjoy the ride.


Mixed feelings you say?  Then I have been successful.

oh, this is gonna be nuts. And maybe not a good way, either. Twilight... don't make me side against you. It's Trixie you're taking on, after all. She's my number one pony. :trixieshiftleft:

Given the poor foal's over-reliance on dictionary meanings and vital statistics, she's going to make a big mistake....especially since she totally ignores the one advantage Trixie has over her in both timelines: the ability to read other ponies. What she'll probably do is fill the elemental slots thusly:

1) Generosity: Locate some jerk who donates loads of bits to charities to get his/her name in the papers; said creep would be like L!Rarity who's only generous so she can help herself.

2) Kindness: The local analogue to a TV preacher. Said icon would be all benevolence in public and thus fool somepony as blind to nuances as L!Twilight but actually be a pious fraud.

3) Honesty: A stroke victim deprived of the ability to filter out what s/he says.

4) Loyalty: Some poor drone like Octavia who's the pawn of an ambitious noble and knows it.

5) Laughter: A crazy pony who makes L!Pinkie Pie look as timid as L!Fluttershy.

Since she wants very much to not get the point because doing so would mean that she should have taken the time to have a life, Twilight is opening herself up for not just another humiliation she'll learn the wrong thing from but becoming another Octavia: the cat's-paw of somepony like Blueblood.


Well, you got one of those mostly right, and another is pretty close depending on how broad a stroke you'd like to take.

And yeah, Twilight is relying on fairly text book like definitions, but given that she is such a giant nerd, it's a pretty advanced text book.  So, while her interpretation will be very literal, she does possess a conceptual grasp that goes beyond the smallest most basic understanding.  In some cases she might actually miss the mark by interpreting.


True. Still, though, this will not end well for her. I'd say by the time the crossover gets here, she'd be in a really bad way. I have no idea what RainbowDoubleDash has planned for her but I really, really, really do not like L!Twilight's chances of avoiding a lengthy stretch in the custody of the Shadowbolts when the dust settles. Getting a shut-up-Hannibal speech from M!Twilight might be what finally gets her to look in the mirror for the source of her woes.


Only problem there is that she might mistake M!Twilight for the mirror.


Mirrors don't shake you and tell you "Get a grip, lady!!" They also don't weep openly in sympathy for intellect gone rancid and potential squandered in the pursuit of vengeance. Even though the cross-over will be the first time she actually lays eyes on Corona, L!Twilight is marching down the same path to being somepony who could have been a hero but let negativity destroy her. As they say, there is no fire like passion, no shark like hatred, no snare like folly and no torrent like greed.


Mirrors don't shake you and tell you "Get a grip, lady!!" They also don't weep openly in sympathy for intellect gone rancid and potential squandered in the pursuit of vengeance.

Are you so sure about that?  This is Twilight —off her rocker— Sparkle we are talking about here after all.


Point taken. She's THE example of RainbowDoubleDash's premise: her less desirable traits (obsessiveness, intellectual arrogance, refusal to admit that she might be wrong) have been amplified while her Harmonic traits (humility, the ability to find worth in others, her ability to laugh at herself) have been all but eliminated.


I'm not sure M!Twilight is all that humble.  The only real example of that is Boast  Busters and there it was more out of fear of driving away her new found friends, who seemed so put off by Trixie's bragging.  I also wouldn't say she's all that good at laughing at herself, more so she's good at working her self into such a stressful frenzy that when it finally all cracks laughter is all she's left with.

The real core of her harmonic qualities, as I see it, is her ability to put faith and trust in others, and to make them do the same for her; the ability to some how inspire disparate individuals to cooperate and achieve a greater goal.  She is the magic at the center of the M6s collective friendship; the glue that binds them all together, making each a better pony than they would be alone.


Here, she lacks that ability to put trust in others and be trusted. Sure, she tells herself that she's doing this for the greater good but she really just wants a pat on the head and a cookie for being smarter than the ciphers who only exist to tell her that she's special.


Yeup, though I do at least intend to try showing that while her harmonic quality is lessened in the the Lunaverse, it is still there, no matter how much her more unsavory traits seem to overshadow it.


Too bad that she didn't have a focus for it here. One of the things that happens in both worlds is that her very positive trait of being able to focus on details no one else sees has a revenge effect: it blinds her to the bigger picture. In the Celestiaverse, we see her being too wrapped up in herself to realize ponies do care and enchanting dolls. Here, without someone actively showing her the kindness she craves, she thinks that friendship is a waste of time (all the while blaming the ponies she shoved away for her own failure to act) and gets goaded into smashing up villages by abrasive show-offs.

I wonder down the line, if Draconequii(sp?) are canon and beings of lesser power, would Twilight try and seek one of them out, or does the no-rules aspect of that sort of magic useless to her, despite it's power? /plotbunny

I'm actually a little disappointed.  I'd hoped Twilight would be the cause of the the Crisis crossover.  It seems more interesting to me than just Corona, though of course she could take advantage


Don't take anything here as any indication how the crisis crossover will go down.  RDD is writing that, not me.  This is mostly just a work of passion that I wrote while in a bit of a weird mental place.  I have no idea how, or even if, it relates to the wider Lunaverse canon yet.  I'm trying to keep consistent, but that's about all I can say.

Right now my focus is purely on telling what I hope is something of an introspective set of character pieces, largely inspired by Twilight's inability to come to terms with her own faults.  Though most of that will be indirect for the next few chapters, as I intend to introduce each of her selected alternate elements through their own perspective so that I can focus on the faults that make them poor choices.

Whether I succeed at any of that will be up to the audience to decide.  Witch should all start soon when I post the next chapter in a hour or so.

Can't believe I forgot to do this last time, but a huge thanks goes out to LDLUYAB for proofing both chapters, and I mustn't forget Mally either, he's been helping out too.  Without them my writing might still have all the same content you people all seem to like or whatever, but it would read like cheep trash.

Anyway, here we meet the first of Twilight's "team".  Sorry if I dialed up the wangst too much for any of your, and if so, well, I hope you'll stick around a little bit longer.  They won't all be so down and dreary, in fact, I think this should be the most depressing it gets, though possibly not the darkest.

Anyway, next up should be Laughter who's shaping up to be just about this guy's polar opposite.  I might even get to add back in the COMEDY tag I originally wanted to put on this story.  Unfortunately though, It may be a while.  The mania that drove me to write all this in the first place has mostly passed, plus I've got a backlog of 17 or so chapters form various fics that I'd like to be reading.

And there's the "Lunaverse Burn" that gets me when we've got Twilight involved anywhere. Actions so terribly in character... and she's got the "Universe's Buttmonkey" flag ticked.

Poor girl can't make a friend without it being a crisis...

D'you think that any of her "elements of failmony" will ever actually be her friends? OR show up at her inevitable trial as witnesses for the defense?

This certainly paints a rather dark picture of Apploosa in the Lunaverse.

This is pretty great. I cracked a smile at the magnificent seven joke and even the mention of 'destiny' that 'manifest' itself hehehe.

Poor Twilight though :( the way she is clearly out of her depth in this whole situation, being a fugitive and all that jazz.


Can't really say much for certain without spoilers.  At a guess 2 maybe, 2 hard to say, 1 definitely not.


Glad the Magnificent Seven reference made it though.  Wish I could claim credit for manifest destiny, but that one is just a happy accident that I never noticed until just now.

>>812378 Hurrah for happy coincidence then!

So she gets her "friends" together, then... challenge Luna's Crewna to a... something or other? Lwi!light is not great with this lateral thinking stuff, but is that a holdover from the Maneverse? Figured organization implies preparation, but I guess it could just as easily be part of Celestia's influence to prioritize, and without that Twilight has been hitting the workahol non stop.


She's on the run from the law.  Her whole life has been turned upside down.  She's probably operating at some degree of a Lesson Zero mode.  From her own warped vantage point I'd wager this "plan" of hers probably seems very well thought out and organized; her brain's just not firing with all cylinders, such as it were.

An excellent portrayal of a shattered life, there. I... don't know if it's gonna end well for him or not. I like to hope it will.


- So she picked a Failure Knight as her element of Loyalty. This can only end well. (Also, I expect to see her dismissive commentary about the rest of the Luna Six owing her to failure to find value in ordinary ponies.)

- Well, that puts paid to Over a Barrel, doesn't it? The Apple Trust had the bisons exterminated for the money. This makes Applejack the most sympathetic of them.

- Judging from what I saw in Boast Busted, she's been running on fumes for years.


Thank you.  It was a bit rough to write in that mind set, kinda dropped myself into a bit of funk in the process, but it seems the effort paid off.  Anyway, I too hope things work out for Silverstar, he's pretty down on himself right now but he seems to have an honest soul underneath it all (which is really the bulk of his troubles as were he truly the wicked pony he thinks himself to be he wouldn't be having these regrets).  Too bad I have little clue where this is all going yet and so can't make any guarantees.

>>812324 >>816349

Minor Technical Note: According to RDD, L!Equestria has different borders than M!Equestria.  I'm playing that some similar scenario accrued, but the name and location of the settlement has been left intentionally vague, as has the identity of the natives.

Also, Silverstar's statement that he no longer has a town to be sheriff of would suggest that it was the natives who won the conflict, though clearly not without losses, while the Apple Trust was forced to withdraw.


Which would feed into Applejack's paranoia. The Night Court would see it as a minor skirmish brought on by ponies who overreached. AJ would see it as a sign of the end times.


Well that might be a bit of an exaggeration.  I'm not sure I believe AJ is quite that paranoid.  She'd certainly be unhappy about what happened, but I'd like to think it's the loss of life that would trouble her more than the loss of profit/production.


True enough. The problem is that she tends to see herself as the only thing standing between Ponyville and famine; this might color how she sees things just a little bit.

Well, I guess this Twilight has the same compulsion to FIX EVERYTHING, just way less to lose.

Looking forward to the next "Meet the Team" chapter.  

Thumb-bump and cheers!

>>811913 17? That's nothing, try 50+ appearing at the same time. Also, sorry it took me this long to read; it was a good chapter, and I definitely want to see the rest. I wonder who the other 'elements' are going to be...


I could probably match that 50 if I actually started reading the 60+ stories in my get-to-it-latter bin.

Anyway, glad you're enjoying and curious to meet the rest.  I'd love to just tell you, but SPOILERS and all that such.

>>829926 heh, those updates all came from one story, actually. For over six weeks FiMFiction seemed to forget I was tracking it, and the author somehow manages to update everyday. So yeah...

And please, as much as my annoyingly powerful curiosity is driving me to find out everything, I think you should keep the no-reveal strategy going, thanks.

I really liked this one. I think Clover's personality comes through really well (and now I'm quite curious about how she got her cutie mark). She definitely seems more... sane... than the other 3 members of the fake elements so far, which makes her a useful addition to the team. And I have to admit that I'm kind of rooting for her, even though the fake elements are pretty obviously doomed. She just seems so happy that, despite all her misfortunes, she can bring joy to others.

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