Part 18: Endings, and New Beginnings...
First thing felt was surprise, that was the first thing Caesar felt when he saw one very, very pissed off Written Script standing before him. Then it was rage, he dared interfere at this critical moment? He had nerve, a lot of it if he thought he was going to get Diamond away from who she rightly belonged with, that was for sure. No, that was wrong, Script had the nerve to interfere with Caesar getting his money he'd been denied all those years ago. He had to build himself up, piece by piece just to get by and not live on the streets eating out scraps of food like some Celestia-forsaken commoner.
Then it changed to amusement, a dark amusement as Script was too late to stop him now. But it was the last feeling that really shocked Caesar's mind. It was at the back of it, a small niggling one nagging away at his brain but yes, there it was. Fear. Caesar, just from looking at Script's furious expression and his horn alight with magic felt afraid.
"You... I should have known it was you." Script snarled, Caesar was the most logical choice as he'd obviously benefit the most from the Rich Family's demise. Why Script hadn't considered it before or just outright rejected the thought he didn't know. Maybe it was the fact that it was just too obvious, perhaps he thought it wasn't his business and just let the police figure it out as that was what they were for, or maybe even his concern and worry for Diamond becoming a better pony made him keep his mind off the mystery. Whatever it was, Script didn't particularly care for a answer to that now, because he had his answer to the first question in front of him and he wanted to see Caesar not behind bars, as that was just far too good for him, but dead at his own hooves.
"Yes, I suppose you should have. Amazing, all your talk about hating lawyers and you never even ONCE thought it might have been little old moi." Caesar mocked.
"You can't get away darling, not when it's two against one." Rarity commented, but Caesar only laughed.
"A fashionista and a history teacher? You really expect to put up a fight with those kinds of backgrounds? I was a boxer before a lawyer you know, so don't blame anypony but yourselves for the broken nose that's bound to result." Caesar mocked.
"Oh, so you doubt me just because I'm a lady do you?" Rarity huffed, incredibly offended that this "Stallion" thought her trade was something to be mocked. It was not so, after all with the time and work she put in it to just make money for herself and her family made it being far from a easy trade to be in!
"Stupid, sexist and crazy. The list just keeps growing doesn't it?" She added in a completely dry and deadpan tone of voice, (She'd spent enough time around Twilight and Script to know how to make such remarks.) with a raised eyebrow at Script who could only chuckle back.
"You know, this is just another reason why I like you. You can be just as deadpan as me." Script replied with a smile before Caesar rolled his eyes in a mocking manner.
"You two lovebirds done yet, I've got some killing to do here." The insane pony said in a bored tone of voice only to get a remark from... guess who, Written Script.
"Oh shut up, I've heard just about enough out of you and your muzzle." He retorted as the two circled each other like vultures, even as Rarity worked on untying Silver and Diamond in the background.
"You, go on!" She whispered. "Get out of here, it's best we let these two handle things."
Neither filly saw any reason to argue and ran out the door with Rarity, but she should have stayed longer as Caesar suddenly pounced and had his knife to Script's neck but then again perhaps Rarity wasn't needed after all as Script headbutted Caesar making him stagger off Script in shock and pain as he rubbed his bleeding head with the history teacher getting up off the floor.
"You know, you really do sicken me. But there's one thing I just can't figure out. That arsonist, what's your connection with him? Gay lover, the "Love" in the letter would seem to imply that." Script questioned, and his opponent laughed.
"Oh, nothing like that. He's my brother, both of us got cast out from the family tree, him for being just outright nuts." Caesar chuckled darkly. "Filthy didn't want anyone to spoil his ever-so perfect family." He added, hoping to draw sympathy but none was given.
In fact, and to Caesar's surprise, Script laughed back and shook his head in a almost pitying motion. That is, if Script actually did pity him. That pitying motion, that shaking of the head wasn't pity for his family drama, but for how much of a idiot really Caesar was.
"Now, I'm not saying Filthy's no angel, but he did a smart thing in getting rid of you two. You two are both mental peas in a bleeding pea pod of insanity." Script snapped.
"It's all relative, if you were in my position you'd probably do the same thing." Caesar commented back towards Script, who gave him a look of both disgust and disbelief.
"No, I wouldn't. I wouldn't resort to such... drastic measures like you did." Script commented before his voice took on a hugely sarcastic and mocking tone as he told Caesar exactly what he thought of him and his plan.
"Oh boo-hoo, my brother cut me out of the family inheritance so I go ahead and contact my other cut out brother and burn their bloody house down leaving them dead and an orphan behind who I then decide to kill too just so I really will get my money!" Script mocked in that tone mentioned above before his tone went right back to that same furious one it had a few moments before.
"Oh, do me a favor and grow UP! Life's no bowl of cherries, you take the punches you get and just DEAL with them like a stallion, not like some little WHINGING BRAT who didn't get his way!" Script snarled, and at this it was revealed to have become the last straw holding back Caesar's own anger which had been rebuilding itself for the past few moments and he once again tackled Script and their bodies crashed through a window glass shards cutting into their fur and drawing blood but both was so focused on the other they didn't care as they landed on the wooden platform that was where ponies waited for the various trains that came through here.
Both ponies were panting in exhaustion, with Script wondering when help would arrive. He hadn't picked a fight with anypony in years, despite his bad temper and Caesar on the other hand, despite not being a boxer anymore still had his muscle and was using every bit of it. This was shown when Caesar once again tackled Script to the floor with a few wooden splinters snapping off and digging into Script's back.
"It's over, sooner or later I'll score the blow that'll get you and leave me free to deal with Di-"
He never got to finish as Caesar then felt a gun barrel on the side of his head. Help HAD arrived, as after Rarity had left with Diamond and Silver she'd alerted the police to Caesar's location and they'd come as soon as they heard.
"Well, lookee who we have here." Bon-Bon's mocking tone came as she grabbed Caesar and pulled him off Script as another police pony helped him up.
Caesar then felt his forelegs moved behind his back and hoof-cuffes slapped over his hooves as Bon-Bon said with a smirk. "You know, it's my great pleasure to finally say Caesar Rich, you are under arrest. You have the right to remain silent-"
"And I suggest you please do, as your voice just makes me want to punch you." Script put in, as a few police ponies chuckled and Bon-Bon gave him a dirty look, although her amused look in her eyes showed she didn't mean it really.
"No talking to the prisoner please. Now as I was saying, you have the right to remain silent as anything you say can and will be used against a court of law. But if you wish, and I highly suggest you follow this advice a LAWYER can appointed to you. If you do not want one... well, no need to say this but you're bucked." Bon-Bon commented dryly after she'd finished reading Caesar his rights, which she found funny as him being a lawyer he'd know about all of this but she was just doing it anyways as part of police procedure. (Well, that and she just wanted to make fun of him a little.)
Script smiled as he saw Caesar loaded into a carriage and he drifted off into unconsciousness. It was finally over. But just before he went under, he could have sworn he saw a ghostly figure resembling Filthy Rich smile at him before fading away in the misty night. Maybe he was just hallucinating, but it sure seemed real enough...
Ponyville General:
Later that night, as nurses looked Script over to make sure there wasn't any permanent damage from his and Caesar's (Who'd quickly earned Script's former title of That Ass.) little brawl, Diamond was watching. She felt worry, her father had saved her and now she didn't know how badly hurt he was in doing so. Then, she heard three sets of hoofsteps behind her, and turned only to see Scootaloo, Sweetie and Apple Bloom. She then felt ashamed, as she remembered her last conversation with the trio.
"NOTHING'S BOTHERING ME YOU STUPID BLANK FLANKS, SO LEAVE ME ALONE OKAY!?!"
Diamond winced, and hung her head.
"Uh, listen guys I don't think we should be speaking anymore, not after what I said to you." Diamond said sadly, but had a hoof laid on her shoulder by Apple Bloom much to her surprise.
"Naw, no need to be feeling sorry for yourself and crying over spilled milk as Granny Smith likes to say. Sure, we was a bit mad at first, but once we heard from Potion the circumstances surrounding the day..." Apple Bloom trailed off as Diamond blushed red even as her jaw dropped. She then noted to give Potion a big thank you next time she saw him. But then, to her even bigger shock, Scootaloo then held out her tiara. It was muddy, but still recognizable.
"We... Uh, kinda found this. Think you might want it back." Scootaloo said, and Diamond smiled as she took it and put it on her head as all three filles gaped at the action. The old Diamond never would have even touched anything with mud on it.
"What?" Diamond asked as she saw their expressions. "It can be washed later, right?"
She then heard her father groan as he awoke and rushed into see him.
"Diamond..." Script smiled.
"I'm so glad you're alright... Daddy." Diamond said, and at this Script broke out into another smile. Neither knew what the future may bring for them, but they did know this. They'd face it together.
Canterlot Castle, a few years later...
Four years had passed from those events, and now Diamond at 17 years of age (Potion 19.) now found herself at a wedding. But not just any wedding, oh no. The wedding of her new mom and dad, Written Script and Rarity (Soon to be Script) Belle. Beside her, sat her now marefriend Apple Bloom who smiled at her. The youngest Apple's hair had now blossomed to be as long as her sister, and she now kept it in a ponytail just like her.
"Bet ya been waiting for this day, huh Di?" Apple Bloom asked, and Diamond smiled. She had, and now it was finally here at last.
In the pews across from them, Raindrops blew her nose before handing the handkerchief off to Silver Spoon and Sweetie, who were sobbing at the beauty and romanticness of it all. She sat in front of Potion, who was smiling at the sight unfolding before him. Behind him, sat Rarity's father Magnum who grumbled under his breath "You think this time will work better then last time?" He still held a major grudge against Script for breaking his daughter's heart the first time around.
"Oh, I think it will... I hope." Potion replied nervously to the large stallion, before making a noise of embarrassment as the baby Princess Flurry Heart began sucking on his suit's tie as she and her mother sat next to him. Cadence pulled her daughter away and whispered a quick apology. Potion just looked right at his drool covered tie and sighed. Life still sucked for him sometimes it seemed.
"...I'm not going to get the deposit back on this am I?" He muttered even as Princess Celestia herself officiated the wedding, with Good Eats as Script's Best Man and the now Princess Twilight as Rarity's lady in waiting. As for the necklace bearer, that role was fulfilled by Scootaloo, who now had a longer mane and properly sized wings which she used to fly down to Script and Rarity.
Celestia cleared her throat.
"Mares and Gentlecolts, we are gathered here today to unite these two ponies in marriage for the second time. They may have had some bumps in the road, but they pulled through them and came out stronger even when it seemed like their love was a failure." Celestia said.
"...You got that right." Magnum muttered, and his wife smacked him for being rude as Potion and Diamond gave him dirty looks.
"Now, do any of you have anything you want to say to each other?" Celestia asked, and Script spoke first.
"Yeah, I do. With the benefit of hindsight, I don't know why I ever divorced you Rarity. ...Faust above, I hope that sounded good and none too cheesy." Script muttered to himself in embarrassment. Rarity smiled even as the audience chuckled before she too spoke.
"You may not have been the Prince Charming I ever expected, but you are the one for me and the only one I want." She said.
Even as the two newly weds kissed and the necklaces were put on Rainbow Dash let out a yell of "Oh yeah! Time to do my thing!" and flew up into the sky with a mighty BOOM! and broke the sound barrier washing the sky in color in a Sonic Rainboom as everyone clapped and cheered. In the middle of it all, Diamond smiled. Everything was perfect, and she wouldn't change one thing...
THE END
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Caesar Rich either was stupid (in the wisdom sense rather than the intelligence as he managed to get a law degree and had some level of success at it prior to these events) or insane. Once Written & in particular Rarity entered his hideout he'd have to have known the jig was up. If they found out no doubt the authorities would have so all he did by resisting was add additional trouble for himself. Even had he managed an escape it would be ludicrously improbable he'd get any of the money and even if he had, how well could he have enjoyed it on the run, their's no system of currency beyond the coin and real estates and their's only so much coin he could probably take on the run.
Heck he didn't even have to commit the crimes to begin with despite not having the same level of wealth as Filthy he seemed to be doing quite well for himself as a successful lawyer. He may have not had the same level of luxuries as Filthy but he should have earned enough to at least afford good quality food, room and board.
Maybe it's just because I've never lived with that level of wealth I can't see myself risking my life and liberty, and more importantly killing my own family just to go from even say upper middle class to ludicrously rich. The risk-reward analysis is so heavily skewed against it it's not even funny.
To quote Kenny Rogers "You got to know when to hold 'em, know when to fold 'em, know when to walk way, and know when to run."
7370807 Uh dude, spoilers? But yeah, insane and stupid pretty much covers it.
7372024 Sorry about that... did not think my review through... I put spoilers up now, so while I can't fix the damage I already caused it will at least prevent any further damage...
A good story and the ending was wrth waiting for.
Nothing serious, but I kind of remember, or at least I think you said he would be some sort of super dead for once, like winning and not being kocked out. Right now since it is over, I don't really mind it anymore, which one of them looks better Rarity or him.
....sure why not, I gave up the hope to read anything else like her being in the god position. Not sure if you know that feeling, but sometimes if stuff like that is kind of overused I get a bit annoyed, but I also got a little bit used to it, since I can't do much about it.
So I couldn't really read it right away since I felt like it was to soon for the story to completely end, which means I can't say much about.....Potion and his friends.
I'm kind of sure if I would have read it in one piece, I would feel some sort of lack on informations somewhere, but I don't remember every anwswer to my previous comments right now. I only remember that it was over to soon for me, and I guess becaus of the timeskip I was a bit dissapointed that it looked to be over for sure.
I never really like a story to end, but I think it was.....hhhmmm at least around 5-7 points if I could give (10)
7420731 Hey, who knows? Perhaps one day I will do a sequel.
7420986 Sorry I forgot why I gave the thumb down in the first place, but since the last chapter was not bad, despite what I maybe would have liked, I gave the upvote back.
Well if you would do a sequel, it either fills between the time from the story end and the wedding, or they are way to old, what I sometimes (for whatever reason) don't like. I probablly just feel like I would miss out a lot of things with eacch timeskip.
7421105 If I did do a sequel, I would probably take the first option as that sounds like a better choice. Still not sure if I will even do one at all.
...Why are you telling us what the villain is feeling? And taking so long to do it? It slows the action down...
...No he's not.
Stop slowing the fight scene down with asides like this. Please....
1. Why didn't the villain notice and stop her? 2. You can't say this in breezy summary; it's too important.
This plot twist is dumb and comes out of nowhere. Just leave it out.
Can brothers really cut other brothers out of 'the inheritance' like that? Isn't that something for the parents?
and at this it was revealed to have become the last straw holding back Caesar's own anger which had been rebuilding itself for the past few moments and he once again tackled Script and their bodies crashed through a window glass shards cutting into their fur and drawing blood but both was so focused on the other they didn't care as they landed on the wooden platform that was where ponies waited for the various trains that came through here.
Woah woah woah slow down, that sentence...
That was cheesy.
Uh... you mean as long as her sister's hair, right?
Wait, what!? When did that happen?
Good Eats and Written Script's fight seems like it was supposed to take up more of the story and have more of an arc, but it seems like it all happened in narration and never on screen...
And while we're talking about long-term problems, I was waiting to see if this would be fixed but it didn't look like it was...
I can't really get behind shipping Rarity and Written Script because they didn't seem to have anything in their relationship besides that they liked having sex together. I know that's an important part of a healthy relationship, but it can't be the only part, because if it is, as soon as it gets boring (or, as did actually happen, they don't have time for enough of it,) the relationship is over. Do they like each other's physical appearance? Their personality? Anything? Give me some cute...
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I like your style, Magic Step. Punchy and clear without mincing words. Reading your responses to each of these chapters has been a delight. Appreciate the effort.
Reviewed.
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