You forgot to add brackets at the end of some dialogs, and didn't finish your preview of next episode. Other then that another great chapter.

6639240 Yeah, I saw the preview thing. My laptop kinda did the whole "automatic restarts for updates" thing and couldn't save it.

If you could point out where I forgot to add the brackets so I can fix it please?

I'm glad you liked the chapter though. Jeff's POV is tough to write.

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"What she thought would have happened if the four of them kept their mouths shut and didn't heckle in the first place

Thats the only 1 so far, I could have sworn there was another?

6639351 Yeah, that one was probably better off without quotes. Fixed. Thanks.

Alduin looks down at him with shame. And flutter shy is DOVAKHIN! And Jeff's an asshole. What else is new?

She admitted her faults. Sure, I had to corner her like Phoenix Wright on a good day in court first

Did you say... 'cornered?' .... I feel a song coming on!!

he named a devastator shotgun "charlie" and a m16 assault rifle "hank"??? i would of give then cooler names like hydra fang or something

"Let go of her you plebeian!" demanded Diamond Butt.
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Okay, Jeff's PoV is really fun to read through. That length is perfect for him, not too long that it gets irritating, not too short that it leaves not enough essence.