His mother had to let him go in order to save his life. After miraculously surviving, but with no hope of finding him again, Mary made a wish: "Please, God, let him live and have a good life with someone who would love him as a son."
Little did she know, her prayers had been answered.
In the distant land of Equestria, a lonely Princess finds an interesting wooden box. Will she finally find what she's missing in life? Will both of them be allowed to have a happy life as a mother and son?
Stay here and find out.
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Wow
make season 2
I like the concept, but you story is going 300 miles and hour, its SO rushed, and don't get me started on the grammar.
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should be leader
That's so stupid it's funny.
I think you mean "he probably won't fight back"
Ponies........don't have feet.
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6239640 First of all, I really apreciate your honesty, I mean it, I know my grammar and punctuation are not the best (not to mention they are very bad) the only thing I can say in my defense is that I don't have my editor helping me with this story and I did say I'm not as half good as him, he is editing "Friendship is life"
6239936 Wow, Thanks! I really need to fix that. I hope you stay in case I decide to writte the second season.
6239693 Fair enough, you are right, I kinda felt it a little rushed but that's because I only wanted to prepare the field for the next seasons, I didn't want to make another "adopt a human" story in where all is about the human's days living in Equestria, meeting the mane 6, learning lessons about friendship and bla bla bla, Not that I don't like that concept but I really didn't want to copy it. I want to center in his journey, how he changeds his personality and how Celestia and his family will manage to bring him back. that's it. if in the end it doesn't work, I'll just leave this story and focus all my attention in "Friendship is life".
6239640 I promise I will try to improve and edit it again the best I can, I hope to change your mind in the future if you are up to give it a second chance.
6239912 . . . . Damn! good point, It really doesn't have sense isn't it?
(Ok, already edited all you what you pointed, thank you very much, you are helping me a lot)
6239693 And sorry for the grammar, I thought I had improved since my first story, I guess I didn't Improve very much, one more time. . . I'm sorry.
is the next season out yet?
6240362 I want to see if the story is accepted and will writte it. and according of how it's going now, I say. . . I will start to writte it tonight.
This story is amazing! I'm hooked can't wait for season two! Also if you need and editor I would be happy to help. Again, this story is awesome!
This this story is amazing! It's a little rushed. But if you need a editor for the grimmer misshaps I would gladly help. And again I love this story! Can't wait for the next season!
This seems like one of those fics that's trying way too hard to make me cry by the end.
Either way, if the whole of this story's premise is just Cely getting a human baby to look after all reverse MLD style, then I'm out.
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Slightly off topic, but Elric, it seems like you mostly focus on grammar based criticism. Is that just coincidence, or do you prefer focusing on grammatical stuff for any reason?
6241345 Thankyou very much, I really apreciate the help, if you can help me with some edition, that would be great. I'll let you know when the next chapters are ready, It may take some days since I still don't know if posting them one by one or the entire season like the first.
6241388 A really valid point, thanks for the comment, to be honest I didn't want to make another MLD reversed, the premise of my story is not that original, Cely has a baby, she raises him but lost him later, he returns but doesn't remember her, and go on, we have seen it lots of times but is what I choose to work with, I hope you liked the story, if not, I hope to change your mind in the future.
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It's because in this case, I wanted to concentrate on the most egregious offense; those run-on sentences hurt to read. Had I felt like sticking around for a longer comment, I definitely could have spent some time on the unoriginality of the overall concept.
6240362 In a couple of weeks, I'm still deciding if posting the entire season or one by one.
6241726 When your making the first part of a story you can take as much time as you like but since you have people waiting for the sequel it's best to post chapter by chapter at least IMO
6241751 Thanks for the advice and believe it or not, my best advisor told me the same thing, IT'S DECIDED, TONIGHT I START WRITTING THE SEQUEL, I may have the first chapter ready in a few days. Thanks again.
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Well, if I'm being perfectly honest, doesn't sound like my bag. I'm not a big fan of fics that try to tug my heart strings (mainly because most fiction from TV to novels that tries to do that fails to for me), and this just doesn't seem like something I'd be into, so I'd rather not waste both of our time reading and reviewing something so far outside my genre.
Still, you earn points in my book for being honest and humble about your fic. I wish you success, lad/lass, and anytime you need advice or conversation, come to the one and only King of Pirates.
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Makes sense, but I was talking more about in general. We've often drawn from the same sources for stories to critique, so I've run into you a lot in comments sections. You generally seem to comment more about grammar than anything else, so I was just curious if you did it consciously.
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Sometimes it's a case of "If I talk about everything that's wrong, I'll be here all day," so I grab something easy to point out quickly. Also, if their technical skills are lacking, it doesn't matter how good the content is -- it's still going to come off as terrible overall. And then there's also a factor of not understanding how and why people get these things so frequently, blatantly wrong. See the section on "Poor Technical Skills" in this blog entry for a little more insight.
6241861 Thanks Mr Pirate King.
P.S. You should be thinking about changing your name or Monkey D. Luffy will come to try to kick your butt. hahahahahaha. . . .
I know, I know, what a crappy joke.
she found Bright rolling and playing in the floor
It's on the floor also any sintacese I found that has the word (in) should be change to on food for thought
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He can try.
After all, I'd be more afraid of Edward Kenway.
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I can see your point. I've always told people when I mentor them that presentation is half of a viewers opinion. And I mean, really, it's always so much more frustrating when good concepts are wasted with bad execution than vice versa.
6242230 Thanks for pointing it, I'll change it now.
6241769 Now mind you there are still options. Option one is to make a schedule this allows you to make a buffer just in case option 2 is to post as you finish a chapter. I did have a complaint in chapter 1 however when since the Titanic have there ever been not enough lifeboats and when has there ever not been a women and children first rule?
6242287 Fair enough but remember it says that many boats were ruined with the explotions.
6242325 Skimmed over the explosions part I guess still have the women and children first only other complaint I'd have is to have "X Years later" but I guess you saying the characters age is suppose to be our "X Years later" correct?
6242361 Yes, I used the diaries POV as a time skip
Bright Sunny change his name to sunny bright instead it sounds right
6242559 You think so? Sunny Bright sounds better? but If I do that, they should call him Sunny instead of Bright. and to be honest I like Bright more.
The premise is good, but every single paragraph is a giant run-on sentence. You need to split them up. Each complete thought should have a period at the end.
6242579 when is the next season?
6244457 Agreed, sorry, I will try to edit it later as I am getting more experience. thanks for the advice.
Sorry to be harsh but more now I demand
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6245419 Hahahaha, thanks, patience my friend, more is comming, just a few days.
alright now that I've finished reading it.....I'll stick around a bit longer.
but don't fuck it up or I'll be on you faster than you can say literally
6246715 I'll do my best, I have two excellent pro readers now, one of them will be kind enough to help me with some editions. thanks for the chance.
if blueblood does what i think he is going to do *pulls out a shotgun* then he is done for
can anyone say love triangle
I think Bright is actually suffering from amnesia. He seems to be at least, given the fact that he doesn't remember Twilight's parents but they're in his dreams.
Although I've read a lot of stories similar to this, I wont deny the fact that this is one simple yet cozy story. I can't wait for the next chapter and keep up the good work :)
6247544 I can Love triangle
This story is awesome i sure hope there new chapter coming cause this strike my favorite list and i like this story alot i do hope he not a jerk now or an ass or something mean