Someone has killed Thunderlane. Princess Celestia has the mane 7 figure out the mystery of his death. Having no leads to go on, a Prince from a kingdom known as: G3 and his dragoness assistant steps in to help them figure out who the killer is! You might not be able to figure out who until you get to the end, but can you guess the mystery of my next Spike ship?
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I know I'm new to this pony business, but I'm pretty sure it's the "Mane 6" not "Mane 7"
Is the pony's name G3 or is that the kingdom?
6111295 With Spike or Sunset Shimmer, it's Mane 7, G3 has no name for their kingdom so I named it G3 Kingdom. Also if you're referring to G3 Rainbow Dash, yeah it's just G3 since Pegasus Rainbow Dash is the current one.
I feel like this could have been done much better. I don't like pressing the dislike button, but if this story improves, maybe I can take it back!
First of all, I feel like using the words "G3" and things like that isn't very good for the story. Maybe you could create a name for the kingdom? Like, maybe Generatia would have made
peopleponies recognize the reference and it would have been funny, but saying G3 just doesn't feel right.I also feel like there were too many excla- this. "!". It feels like you're trying a little too hard to make exciting scenes more exciting, though it isn't needed.
And I think the story is complete. It says "Incomplete" there. If the story is incomplete, keep it that way. Another thing... you ended it with "The End". This isn't exactly bad, but most won't like it. There is also a place for you to put the little things like "I didn't know how to end it.", called the Author's Notes box.
These are just a few things to help improve your story here. I think it could be really nice if a few things were changed. Good luck story writing!
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i think he meaning spike with the mane six after all some episodes he was the one who saved the day so i think he included him because of this