Lyra has been dating her human coltfriend for a little while now and wants to start a herd with Bon Bon. The problem is, Bon Bon doesn’t want to accept her feelings for the strange creature. Can the earth pony find love with the bizarre human?
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Can you feel... the love tonight~?
No but really, when's the clop tho?
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Just hold your pony's! Geez. It's coming soon!
Can you believe this guy?
I've literally been staying you all night to read this. I hope the mental hangover tomorrow is worth it.
5979891 Yes.
When is the clop?
Well worth the wait P2!
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... Next chapter.
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I hope so to... but you should sleep!
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You were supposed to read this on your tip! Not now!
5979891 Just then, Pusspuss decided to make this a clop-free story...
Now I wanna see Bonnie in her cute glasses.
Visualizing all the pictures that they saw brought quite a few laughs out of me. Great chapter. Is Bon Bon going to give Chris' hands a chance soon? Because that's what it looks like from reading this.
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I can re-read it a few times on my trip...... I know I will.
I was told their would be human on pony bestiality.
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Aww right, I can't wait for Bon Bob's mind to be blown!
This is turning out better and better. WATCHA GONNA DO BONNY? The anticipation is killing me!
I want a pet spider like Scary! He's so cute!
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Me too. Bonny in glasses would be so cute. I was going to do a drawing, but I have other things I need to get done.
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You were told right my friend. It will be soon! Very, very, very, very soon!
I am loving the dynamic between Chris and Bonny here.
5979891 Right? No patience whatsoever.
You are ebil, ebil, ebil, pusspuss o3o! Now I want another chapter SOOOOOOOO much x3! But in all seriousness this was of course more than worth the wait :3 I can't wait to see what happens next though x3!
'Boop'
I just can't get enough of the obnoxious pony nose poking. It's so adorable!
There's a bit of a error during Bon Bon's fantasy:
No clear suggestions just bringing it to your attention.
If I notice anything else I'll post it.
I love you dude... seriously! You updated a week before my birthday and I stood up all night to read this chapter. And it's fantastic and one of my favorite chapters of the story.
Finally Bon Bon learns that Chris is never leaving Equestria and is going to stay there forever much to the former's shock and disbelief. The way the two play off of each other is perfect, showing that they're soulmates through and through. We also see a breakthrough with Bon Bon interaction with Scary and she's becoming more friendly and open to him. Still has a problem with animals eating other animals it seems... sadly it's nature.
The photo album of Lyra and her folks are awesome and I enjoyed ever bit of it. I really want Chris to meet Lyra's parents somehow, I bet they would love him! ^_^
Though I'm shocked that Chris' favorite colors are green and yellow. Personally my is red... the color of love.
*Crickets chirping*
Cough... ahem... right. Though like I said my favorite color is indeed red also I love all kinds of music, though the lyrics are a turning point if I would like the music or not.
I really like how Bon Bon is finally getting passed her past problems with getting to know Chris on a personal level when she learn he was staying forever and it's so cute and sweet to see her wanting to learn everything about him and his home and people. It seems like Lyra's plan is bearing fruition now, but we'll see what happens in the end. I can picture, literally, Chris and Bon Bon's revenge on Lyra by showing all of her musical friends her baby pictures and the stories behind them to embarrass her for weeks. Hopefully nothing too seriously that would accidentally humiliated her.
And seeing Bon Bon firmly saying she's a big pony and can make decisions herself if her parents disapprove of Chris, I'm glad. Seeing a lot of character growth with her and it warms my heart. Especially her putting a blanket over him so he won't be cold during the winter nights... won't be too long now before Bon Bon gets him in bed with her.
Though I do wonder how you'll handle the "hand" thing. Kinda funny when creatures like Diamond Dogs, Dragons, and Centaur has hands for example and possible Apes as well (there's got to be a zoo or something to show other simian animals with hands... I found that so weird that ponies seem to neglect that fact).
Anyway, I eagerly await the next chapter! Better be on my birthday, May 21!
This is VirusChris signing off! Take care!
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I guess you can take the clop out of the story, but you can't take the story out of the clop.
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this popped into my head, or at least the first 11 seconds did
PussPuss you know just how to take a night from a 6/10 and turn it into a 11/10
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You seem like your trying to sell me tickets to something....
And yet I'm okay with that...ticket please!
Okay this part was vey well done indeed. A few questions if I may. Did you plan for this story to be in such length? I ready your first bit with Lyra and Chris and it was rather short in comparison. Also I do so hope you don't rush into the pony plot pounding TOO soon. I would love to see a build up of Bon Bon showing a bit of nervousness (and some foreplay!) when it does eventually happen.
Also... I would like to know if you will give Bon Bon any kinks she may like in the sack (perhaps tail tugging? ::hint hint, wink wink::). Perhaps a bit with her pleasuring herself and perhaps thinking about his hands and what they could possibly do. I am sure Lyra has given her mental images of such things. Or perhaps her catching Chris pleasuring himself and she watches those hands and... Well their 'handy work,.
Bonny showing she is attracted to him is cute. I like the little hip sway she was doing. Shake dat rump Bonny! Shake what ya momma gave ya! Things are looking really good so far! I like how this is going!
There's a certain paragraph that had me make a double-take. It looks like you had one idea written out, but suddenly came up with something else and wrote that instead, but forgot to remove the previous one:
Something's missing, or something doesn't belong.
Just wanted to point that out, because other than that, I absolutely love this chapter, and the story as a whole.
The biggest hurdle for anyone who wants a horse wife or husband. My freezer has 50 pounds of assorted animal, no room for veggies. Dreams dashesd.
Real talk time.
Good job Braking down those racial barriers, bon bon, you go girl!
Did you miss something here? It feels like Bon Bon said something between these two lines.
I was kinda expecting that instead of boots, Chris found a pair of Hulk Hands.
"Hulk boop puny horse's nose!" Chris yelled as he booped Bon Bon's nose, much to her confusion.
5979891 though's poor cookies gone before their time why?
So many stories rush to magical mutant babies and ignore all the sad lonely children out there.
I had honestly thought Chris would of put socks on his hands. At least those would be somewhat functional.
Context clues are nice and all, but you're missing something here I think.
Also there are two instances of you using "some how" instead of "somehow", you should probably just Ctrl+f those and fix them manually.
Other than that the chapter was great and I didn't notice anything agrees with the grammar and such. The only thing that caught my eye was this.
There's two "spaces" between "her" and "a", don't ask me how I notice that kind of stuff. It confuses me too.
On a semi-related note, you don't happen to use openoffice to type up your drafts, do you?
I like all the story. But right now I officially declare Scary as the best pet-spider ever!
I cried for the Cookies...
Enjoying your story, and even if you didn't do any more clop, I would still be reading it.
His attire made him looked quite handsome and it was easy to tell he was nervous when the picture was taken.
You need to drop the ed from looked.
All the others have been pointed out.
Awesome read as per your usual.
Hahaha, she still believes that hand gesture means... oh wow Bonny, hahaha.
Whew, seriously though, awesome chapter, now she just has one obstacle remaining. I wonder if Scary can help with that.
Big step taken ftw! I can't help but wonder if Lyra left the album there for her plan...
Clop your hooves, everypony! Clopping next chapter!!
It should be cloptacular!
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...I'll show myself out.
These two paragraphs need to be swapped bud.^^
5979891 can you blame him though? you've built up the whole Bon Bon / Chris thing well enough that we all want to see the loving between them. so there's that.
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Oddly enough, the Hulk Hands would turn on Bonny, who had fantasies of rutting a big green man. She'd then ask him to play the Hulk while she played the naughty mare who made him mad and needed to be spanked...
Chris' anaconda does want some cause Bonny's got BUNS, HUN!
I'll show myself out...
The worst fucking part of these chapters is when I run out of words to read and have to wait for the next chapter...
Some text appears to be missing...
And now I can resume my waiting game I was so enthralled with before this oh so bothersome interruption was posted...
In all seriousness that chapter was amazing, great work as always. Read most of it on the job last night, made the night shift far less annoying. I have absolutely no complaints or ethical issues to debate lol.
It's a good story even without the clop. In fact the three of them getting together would be enough I think. Of course until Discord shows up and sends all three to Earth to mess with them.
I can't help but feel something's missing here. I mean, there's extra spaces and everything. Am I wrong?
whoa bon bon, ease up on the eye molesting will ya! chris isnt a piece of meat
This was a really good chapter. It made Bonbon really think about her future with Chris.