Trigger_Finger
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Hah Ill read this Later dude
My buddy trigger finger making more awesomeness.
I'm okay with this and, if you please, another chapter as well.
Ahahaha, that last bit
"Mask up, clowns. Get your Payday"
Dat ending, you've been playing too much payday haven't you?
As shameless porn goes, I've read worse.
Though this is the first one featuring bank robbery.
and then they lived happily ever after with 10 foals! the end!
Cool dude.
Can we get some backstory to this? Like, what happened with the heist, how he got to Equestria in the first place, first encounters, etc.
Dat ending. Nice work I enjoyed all of that.
Man. I get to use TWO of these!
Pretty good except for when she said she cantr get pregnant because she isn't in heat, she shouldn't be able to get pregnant because they are different species. Other than that really nice! The clitoral winking saved it in my eyes.
5428328 Nothing says that they can't. Don't try and inject science and biology into a world of talking ponies that are able to cast magic. And besides I am sure you have heard the term satyr right?
Good story, was really not expecting the ending but, it was great none the less.
so he was a bank robber?
so criminals go to Equestria when they die? curious where good people go then. ahh.... too much risk. better choose the safe choice and rob banks till I die
Hm... Yeah, alright. Lyra doesn't get enough love, as far as I'm concerned.
it's very interesting that he robed banks on earth and goes to equestria somehow. I love it
Well the ending sure explains this part
What a tweest!
My biggest problem with this story, which I for the most part liked, is the ending. Without quotes or anything to give it away for those that haven't read: it seems tacked on. With a "Complete" tag and only this one "chapter" (of sorts) it makes it read like the teaser for a continuation or a second chapter. But there is no second chapter and if the tag is to be believed, there won't be.
And what I say next may sound harsh, but its how I feel.
The story didn't seem to gain much from it, and I don't feel it would have lost much of anything at all in the way of quality and content if that final segment hadn't been there.
Overall though, I did like the story. It was an interesting enough read and outside of that I've always liked how a lot of authors write Lyra to be. In the end I liked the story, gave it a thumbs up, and have added it to the favorites list. My issue with that ending segment wasn't so great as to detract from my enjoyment of the rest of the story.
5426643 No such thing
Woah... That's some Payday shit right there...
Perfect balance of sexiness and cuteness
I'm gonna kill my friend for making me read this....
5434103 Merry Hoxmas,Heisters!
5436357 I need to play that game sometime.
5435805 Why?
5438432 My friend told me it was a FAMILY FRIENDLY story and I didn't even need to read the description...
The robbery thing at the end seemed kind of sudden. Did I miss something?
5429552
Seemed like she got plenty of "love" in this story.
5443517 Uhm... not really but if you read it over and think about how he always talks about how he had no friends, and his life was about his 'work and business' you kind of realize at the end "Oh snap... I get it" or maybe I just made it too hard to realize. Dunno, I like the 'protagonist secretly used to be a bad guy but is now reformed'
This is without a doubt the best Lyra clopfic I've ever read, plus the holiday theme was a nice touch. The ending though really caught my attention.
Let's hope in that memory he didn't have an itchy...trigger finger.
5453852 Ah-HA! ha-ha... ahhh... I get it, cause... cheeky cheeky
Sorry, I couldn't resist. That's the scene that made me rather... curious and impressionable to the SPAS 12, though I can't imagine the metal collapsible stocks were pleasant to a shooter
Have fun.
5479610 I approve.
5431406
...why is that? The ending you feel is "tacked on" just gives a little insight to the origins of the character-- "You"-- which had been foreshadowed and hinted at all throughout the story. It doesn't tease a second chapter, it's a expository flashback. It's fucking expertly placed, too, driving home the contrast between the bliss of the afterglow and cozy whisperings of "I love you," and a scene from the old world, undeniably that of "You" robbing a bank. Put anywhere else in the story would have sucked.
Imagine it in the narration?
Think about it in dialogue?
The italicized bank-robber ending added flavour to the protagonist and made the whole thing better. Odd, for a story in second-person narrative, where the protagonist is "You," this protagonist wasn't really trying to identify with or be the reader. He was still himself.
5430515 What a twist!
Hahah, great read!
And that ending! What a twiiist! :D
This is a nice little clop story with a surprising background for the protagonist, I adore that.
Hopefully you will write more, dear author. This story is left open, I want to know more about the human.
-Zeph
5479610 WHAT! AHHH MY GOD! THAT'S SOOOOO EPIC! I got someone who made a video on Youtube about my story! Oh my god that's unreal... man, I'm totally mind blown.... WHAT?! No wya... man, I gots to be like dreaming or something... man I'm gonna be mind blown at work now too... oh man this is cool. Thank you
wow this was awesome! LOVE lyra fics and some trigger fics :^)
pls trigger don't bait me into thinking you actually are making a sequel ;_;
Lyra Grimes, everypony.
What to say, what to say. First of the human charecter seems written well but the lack of him interacting in Equestria is a bit of a downer. Lyra kinda shows up out of nowhere. The clop isn't cringe worthy but i found the teasing and Lyra's use of the miscletoe and their banter to be the best parts of that scene.
The "twist" with the protagonist as a fromer bank robber, was a nice touch. Really threw me for a loop
It's PAYDAY fellas!
5428391 Satyr is half human half goat dumbass.
In this world satyr is a half human half pony. So no need for your ignorance.
6154629 you know there's a blog post about this right?
I couldn't tell you how many times I've read/listened to this fic. I don't know why I like it so much, and sorry for not believing this was your story, Trigger_Finger.
6607759 No problem dude, live easy and relax in life. Don't stress out, it causes grey hair... ahahaha, that and heart attacks. But seriously, thanks, it's nice to have people give me a nod.