Too underwhelming... I'd rather see Mr. Cake being all demure, with Pokey being so masculine and assertive while saying that Mr. Cake should be proud of his past and his figure.

Then, after some talking and some time spent together, there's less soft stuff and more serious sex with thick creamy loads being blown inside flanks.

I found. Lot of spelling and grammatical errors in this, but aside from that, good job.

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Glad you enjoyed it, and sorry about Mr.Cake being all loose. It's a headcannon of mine that he's much more relaxed without his wife breathing down his neck.

Well, well, well. It seems my little Brony has done a good job with the writing of the male on male yet again. I was pleased by this story. You are doing great Brony, let's see what else you are capable of

Adieu~

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How does a pony wrap their hooves around anything?

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No idea.

I was kind of hoping for more details. And a lot more buttsecks.

please add more!!!!!!!!

That awkward moment when you masturbate to a nice hot stallion in a Playcolt magazine, only to find out he is watching you. (In my head, that came out very well for I wondered, what if he was just stroking...-blushes-woops, almost went far with the comment).

Anyway, great chapter. Pleasant and beautiful! I love Pokey.

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Well, thank you very much for the nice comment!

God damn it, son. Don't put multiple characters' dialogue in the same line/paragraph.