Lets see if this is as good as it sounds. I'll read this later.

I'm not entirely sure what to say about this...

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Give me your honest opinion.

quite the story
expecting moar please

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to be honest I found it kind of entertaining, although I guess that happens when you read such a variety of stories that clop like this is as legit as some other stories out there.

on another note, you have a repeat paragraph in there for some reason O.o

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Oh man, how did I not see that? Thanks a bunch.

dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/OhCelestiaWhy.png

You already misspelled Pierce and called Mr. Cake a "man", and I haven't even opened the story.

Oh, you did go with Mr. Cake. Meh. Sorry for what I do, but... I'm too committed to the Cakes. And Ace.

Well, well, well....
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Your welcome, I'm going to watch this and see if it goes anywhere from here

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Don't worry, I plan on using Ace in something next.

You copy pasted too much, the same paragraph talking about how he got home was repeated a paragraph or two later. D:
Here:
" He had to sit on his bed, this display being too much for him. Carefully enjoying every moment, he flipped the pagePokey was rushing home, he got to the front steps of his home, and nearly took the door off of it's hinges as he entered. He checked over the house for his parents and found that he was again, alone. Pokey rushed up the stairs, went into his room, and locked the door. He didn't want anypony to intrude on him. Pokey let his saddlebags drop to the floor, and began to look for his newly acquired prize. He felt his hooves brush the spine of the magazine, as he lifted it out, and up to his eye level. Staring him right in the face, was a yellow skinned earth pony, with a short orange mane. His more sensual parts just covered by an apron"

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How do I keep missing these. Thanks.

I think my little Brony is quite the writer ;) Keep up the good work. I'll give my full review when the next chapter is out.

Adieu~

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Well thanks

Much love Brony