Nice chapter.

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Thanks, as I said I am constantly trying to improve. I thirive on constructive criticism, not bashing.

This story has potential.

cool chapter can't wait to see what is next

Nice chapter, I little insight to what Spike has been up too along with what is happening in Ponyville.

5055850 thank you

5055900 thanks

5055908 I thought that would help the readers.

Hmm...Improvements. I like the chapter. Although it is short, it was entertaining. Keep up the good work.

5056014 That is something you have to consider when it comes to writing. While some people like surprises most readers prefer at least some kind of hint or heads up. Having chapters or sections like this will help the stroy flow and won't blindside your readers and piss them off.

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Thanks. I also fixed up the first chapter so that it is MORE like it was before my Internet started glitching....which lead to the 29 dislikes because of it....sigh

5056467 Not to worry, my friend. Not everyone will like the story. Even I do not like stories. You'll do fine.

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Yeah. I've just never dealth with a 24/29 ratio, or more dislikes than likes.

After all, an orchard doesn't grow in ah day." AJ is going to be shock by his wood release .

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Lol!

It's great, some minor spelling errors but none that really damaged the story. Your descriptions are getting much more detailed which is great and the time pace that you have is pretty good for the current situation. Keep it up!

Well, i'm goin to wait n' see what's in store later before i decide on anythin but, i will say that it's interestin fic so far

I just noticed the quote
"An orchard doesn't grow in a day."
Not if spike has anything to do with that

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Thanks

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And I have a feeling about how to write out THAT scene (when AJ finds out about the "wood release")

5057066 thanks

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ur welcome n' as almost always keep up t great work

Great story so far can not wait to see more

5089461 thanks!

keep this story going dude i like where this is going and nice idea of making the snakes pronouncing their s more in the words

Too soon to say, but seems good so far.

when will write more of the chapters

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When I get a break from college....I can't look at paper without cringing.

5165604 ok

5166069 should be 2nd week of December.....3rd at the latest

is spike gonna learn sage art like Naruto or is that something he wont be able to do at all

Update this story pleaseeeeeee

Come back to life

6932245 I will....when I'm not so busy....life's rough....

I sure do hope you'll be able to complete your stories, their fantastic!

Alright first, WTF why would someone add a story to a group just so it can get downvotes, that's just wrong.
Second: Great story, like where this is going so far. UPDATE!

ribs became spikes and protruded from his chest.

Is that a reference to the Spanish ribbed newt that can use it's ribs as weapons?

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In the Naruto series, in part one, there was a man named Kimmimaro Kaguya who could manipulate his very bones as weapons.

Here's a video showing some of it https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=GGApKsEzV1k

…update?

I dont know if ya still here but i wanna say i love your story and i cant wait for the next chapter

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Ya, I am here.

Been kind chaotic here

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Wat happened?

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Storms and new dog

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Crazy for me it more of flash floods and new cat

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Huh. Odd

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Yeah its kinda weird

I want to read more, please update