Rarity knows Sweetie is a sweet filly, everyone in Ponyville did. She was like a flower, a kind and gentle foal. So imagine their surprise when she returned to Ponyville from a Manehattan trip with her parents with a whole new image, an image sure to be shunned by her older sister. But will the rest of the town accept the new her, or will they cast her out for the little rebel she appears?
A story about acceptance. Consider this the after school special with a better taste in music and smokes cigarettes behind the school with your brother.
Chapters (4)
Great. This is turning into an episode of Golden Girls.....one of the ones where Blanche gets a bug up her arse about some minor thing because she's more interested in Impressing The Quality People than being a decent God-damned human being. Cue a blitz attack from the Freelance Shame Squad to make her realize what a jackass she's being and the thing writes itself.
Love it so far. Liked, faved, and looking forward to more. Also...
Was that a reference? Cause if so, I kinda missed it.
*slow clap*
Well done sir
Expecting Sweetie to be a full on metal-head: listenin' to Amon Amarth, Sabaton, Avenged Sevenfold, Alestorm, etc.
I'm eagerly awaiting the next chapter.
5318363 Pretty sure 95% of peeps here even know who the golden girls are, Blanche was always kinda a bitch anyway.
OH MY GOD. GIVE ME MORE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Reminds me of little kids, they go and stay at there snot-nosed friends/relatives house for awhile. They bring back a cold and give it to you as if it was a gift, now your infected to. It's like:
Kid: "Hey mommy! I got you a gift!"
Mom: "Oh! What is it"
Kid: "Snot, a cold, and 3 days of missed unpaid work!" and he then proceeds to sneeze in your face covering you in his infected radioactive snot.
5318827 Oh, it's the title a a recent cd i had been listening to. The band is very recent, they're called Chumped
Big Apple
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Eye liner
Also in both the cover art, and in the story when you're describing Sweetie Belle's new appearance. You might want to add that her Mane is red. Is her tail red to match? Or is it only the mane? The story isn't confusing until Sweets and Rares get to the library, and we find out she had a red mohawk.
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did you meant to say 'nothing wrong'?
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Decent start to the story. Look forward to reading chaper 2.
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Ummmm ... this is Rarity we're talking about. Since when in canon has she not been exactly as you described Blanche being? Seriously that's Rarity's thing, doing what ever to impress Canterlot Nobility and "important ponies" rather than being a decent pony 95% of the time. And that 5% only after she goes through some moral dillema or has her dreams shattered with a wrecking ball.
eventual
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quartet
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hadn't 'what' out of her day? You're missing something there.
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No obvious fix. But that's definitely the wrong word choice.
https://www.google.com/#q=ganged+definition
and 'gained after' makes no sense grammatically.
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You really need an editor, this fic isn't really bad. As much of really poor word choices / spelling here and there. Are you writing this on a smartphone ? If so, check you're auto-correct before submitting.
WHEN YOU DRESS LIKE YOU CAME FROM THE CIRCUS Don't be surprised to be approached by the local clowns.
Spikes a conservative classic type of dragon.
Sweeties rudeness over shadows her cuteness.
So called rebels don't last.
What is Equestria coming to?
Good story concept,
Kicking others is not nice
Sweetie Belle has turned into Beastie Belle.
Sweetie's crushing severely on Spike.
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5319350 Alright, I believe I grabbed all of them and added a few things. Thank you so much for pointing them out, good sir.
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You're welcome
, and I look forward to the next chapter 
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Seems that Spike finally turned his attention to the right sister
Also, Rarity should hide the razor blades – who knows what the next phase will be...
Spike seems to be hitting puberty too...
Best gag present ever.
5319156 "Video not available in your country"
Anyways...I checked out a few songs, and decided that's an album worth buying. So...thanks for that.
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Here lets go with something that isn't shit
5320443 I am sorry sir, but you cannot compare one song from one genre to one song from another genre.
And Thus
Oh no. She's become... NIGHTMARE SWEETIE
Looking forward to seeing what the next chapters bring! I like rebellious spike!
rebel love between spike and sweetie belle, it's possible so nuff said
5320443 >iron maiden
>not shit
are you like 13 years old? Metal is for children.
I mean, Green Day ain't no saviors of punk, but at least they're not edgy tryhards
5321535 *sigh* can we please not make this an argument about musical taste, its like having someone trying to shove there religion down peoples throats.
That image of Sweetie Bell
... I have to read this *puts on read later list for the evening* :D
5321839 And speaking of shoving things down people's throats...Imagine the shock I had a few weeks ago, when I, as part of a group on this site called "Jewish Ponies", had disproportionate amounts of photos of Jewish people that were taken in Nazi Germany shoved down my throat in a creepy, disturbing, and, above all else, anti-Semitic way. Click here to see how I and some other members of the "Jewish Ponies" group reacted when we saw these photos.
5321839 Eh, you're right; I'll step down. To solidify my OWN immaturity, however, let it stand for the record that he started it.
5322593 Yes, but lets not be the ones to continue it, ok?
beside, we all know Caramelldansen is the best
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that's a funny way of spelling Abba
5322608 I know right
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5322608 That's funny, I've never seen General Republic spelled that way before..
5322663 There are many ways to spell PFUDOR
Again, you got me hooked. Especially with that Nirvana reference.
Just one little thing, though:
Exchange the your and you're in those two, and we're good.
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So Sweetie's tail matches her mane? And what did she do to her tail? That was never covered in the Cover Art or description of Sweets in chapter 1. Nonetheless cute chapter.
Baby dragon's bad girl.
Tune is green and italicized, but not a link. What tune was he whistling? He seems like a classic rocker to me, so let me guess...
The acoustic version of Layla? A song about a love triangle seems rather appropriate.
Paint it black? I just seems right.
In the last 3 minutes , those are the only 2 rock songs I've been able to think of that you can whistle with any degree of ease.
Edit: I forgot to say it earlier, but this is excellently excellent.
5323179 Again, thank you. The tail is just not as curly as it usually is in the show, no real big change other than the color. I will try to be more clear about that in future chapters
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=rRGbsEhkaWc The theme for rebel sweetie X spike
Well, if you want this Sweetie/Spike ship going, he's going to need a motorcycle soon. Or some kind of cycle. As well as a leather jacket of his own and possibly the power to turn on jukeboxes by hitting them.
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Sweet, and you're welcome. It's nice to see that at least Twi, Spike, Rares, and Scoots are cool with her new look. As well as Rarity stepping up to help her out.
I'm enjoying this so far, but I really hope you don't stick Applebloom (or the other Apples) into the traditionalist role her family usually gets lumped into. I know there has to be someone who is close to Sweetie who isn't okay with it, or else there isn't any decent conflict, but in situations like these it's almost always one of the apples who has to do it.
I'm curious to see if it's just her looks that have been affected by her trip, or her personality as well. It's only been one day, and it's her first 24 hours back, so there hasn't been time to develop that too far. Eagerly awaiting the next chapter.
I really like this story thus far, and I am certainly looking forward to the next chapter!
5319072 Lol.
Is there a reason for this strange wording?
If not, "descended" (moving downwards) would seem to be what your looking for, ascended generally means moving upwards, so "ascended down" is like "going up down" the final step.