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Only a few weeks have passed since the failed Changeling invasion and their following banishment from Equestria. Celestia, wishing nothing but peace across the entire continent, seeks out Chrysalis in her hive in an effort to sway her, to show her that there are other ways. She knows that convincing Queen Chrysalis that there are other ways than her own will be a difficult ordeal, but she has vowed to try regardless.
An idea that popped up yesterday night... Hope you like it! 
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Hm. Not bad at all.
Nicely executed for an idea that seemingly came from nowhere.
Probably, if given a chance, could be expanded on a bit more.
~Skeeter The Lurker
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How bloody fast are you?!
And perhaps it could... Who knows?
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You should know me by now, mate.
~Skeeter The Lurker
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...Baka >.>
Interesting. This is exactly how I picture Chrysalis in a story I am working on alongside a friend of mine And the headcanon seems to match as well. Good job.
Pretty sweet thing you go there ^^
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Good idea, thought it could be easily expanded. Nice execution as well. Good job!
~OreoKookie
You wrote this since yesterday!
how fast are you!
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Actually I wrote it today... I got the idea yesterday, but started writing a couple hours ago. It took me roughly 3 hours to finish, then one hour before it got approved.
Not bad
Adorable. I'd love to see how it ends up.
I was kind of expecting this to be a story about one of them being the other's mom.
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Haha, not quite
hmmm... hope you do a larger story... just saying
LONGER!!!!!!!!!!!! And Sombralis. I need mah Sombralis. . . .
This is pretty good stuff here man. Like and fave.
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Could be a good idea... Might even use it, though not quite as you suggest.
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As I said, not quite in the way you suggest
I have another story planned, and I'm thinking of pulling some of the plotpoints from my other stories into that one, essentially tying quite a few of my stories together into the same universe. I was thinking of making Zenith a somewhat prominent character in that story, even if it doesn't have to do with Changelings.
This was real nice...
Also Wow, your readers are nuts.
Wait a minute... I'm a reader! That means I'm nuts!
WAAAARRAAGHH
Chrysalis is best character, so I really liked this. Hope to see more of best changeling from you
not bad not bad at all
OMG I LOVE IT, although...
Many kinds of live? I think that should be love.
i think, as i tell many of the authors of this site, that you should think about becoming an author. i think you did an excelent job on this story, but i think you could extend the story for probably a couple more chapters at most five.
4458839 I'm thinking he meant "life".
4458139 Nuts? Everybody love nuts.
Some of the prose is a bit clunky, but I always like a good changeling story so I'll bump up that vote counter for you.
Also I agree with the majority, some more of this would be very welcome.
Only mild errors, like grammar, but, it was a nice story, I loved it.
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Well... I wrote it directly into the Fimfic chapter, so there was literally no editing done
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It was actually "love". My bad, I'll fix that. Thanks for catching it!
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I just realised that it should be "don't" and not "doesn't" because there are two ponies = plural.
*claps slowly* That was very, very nice. Heart-touching and it made you think. Awesome job, dude. Take a mustache.
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You're becoming the new Skeeter, or something. I see you everywhere, especially around my stories
4460453 I'll be the one to watch, the girl in the flow~
I'm the type of pony everypony should know~
Becoming popular as popular can be~
Making my mark, making my mark in high society~
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4460482 What?
Solid work here.
A tad rushed at the end, but other then that, a solid story
Hmm. Its well written enough, but I just can't accept that a single talk would change the perspective of a queen who has never known anything but drones, workers and soldiers. Its in her genes, its what she is, if that is how she looks at things. At least in this story.
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I will give you a hint as to why she changes view so quickly: Name.
4460939 That's actually a very poor reason. People don't actually work that way.
When one is used to a particulat pattern of behavior, it becomes very habitual and difficult to simply dismiss at a whim.
Even the ponies have taken quite a while to learn their various lessons. In fact, most of them have relapsed rather frequently.
If you were going for a transformative speech, it needed to be much stronger and more convincing. And even then, Chrysalis would still be very hesitant and haughty in her ways.
Old habits die hard, as has been said for generations because it proves correct time and again.
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But what about habits older than those?
As much as I see a point in what you write, you have to remember that this isn't Chrysalis first encounter with love as something other than a food source, nor was her first encounter with it when she was blown away by that love-shield.
Quite a few things are only implied, but what there is, is enough for her to think about what Celestia said, and give it a try. She's not necessarily redeemed, and is still quite selfish. I would imagine her line of thought being "If two mortal ponies could be so strong with love like that, then how strong could we become with the same love?"
There's no switch flipped that suddenly made Chrysalis good, but what she was showed, coupled with what she witnessed a few weeks prior, has made her think, and convinced her just enough to try it out.
This is rather good. Are you going to write a sequel?
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The thought has crossed my mind... I won't make any promises, though.
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If you do, I'll gladly read it.
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While I am a bit proud of this story, when it comes to conversations between Celestia and Chrysalis then Triptych is much better. I suggest you go read that (and its prequels) if you want a good conversations between those two, even if the convo only happens in Triptych.
Well, that was a happy, and welcome, change of reading for me. Its been far too long since I've read something of this nature and I'm glad I've ready this piece right here. In truth, I didn't expect Chrysalis to understand what Celestia was getting at so quickly, but I'm happy that she did. Hopefully this will lead to great changes; as a true mother's love brings only good.
4460390 np!
Nice, short story. I would really like to see something like this done in canon, although I doubt it ever will.
loved the story
-infact it just gave me an idea 
Sweet...nice and a small beggininng of redemption.
This is the type of fic I want more of in FiMFics.
Very nice little story.
Don't think it necessarily needs to be expanded upon, as the story gives hope for the future, without outlining a perfect happy ending for everypony/ling.
A star and a fave for you!
I really like ideas like this, but I feel like it was a bit...sloppily done? I guess?
Not that your writing isn't good, you write very well, but I feel like it was rushed a bit. Chrysalis didn't really seem very opposed to this change beyond a cursory method to instigate this conversation, and I get that impression due to her inability to argue the point at all as I see it. I feel like this story would have been a bit more believable if Chrysalis were thinking about what went wrong, and was looking for advice, because in that situation she'd be open for ideas on how to improve; in this story, however, I'm fairly certain she isn't looking for help, so her quick adaption of Celestia's advice seems weird to me.