Chapter 4: The Truth
"Five seconds"
The sarge looked at his watch, it was still showing 00:01, he looked over to the battlefield and then to the dead soldier, but he wasn't dead at all.
The young marine coughed, spitting blood, the sarge's eyes gaped in excitement that his friend wasn't dead at all.
The bullet had penetrated the first layer of Kevlar on the helmet, but it did not the second.
"Fucking rubber bullets." The sarge thought to himself as helping the young marine up.
He took his hand, rising him up. "Well, looks like those bullets are actually made out of rubber."
They laughed, but their humor was short to be lived, flying fighter jets flew over them, dropping napalm bombs.
The bombs dropped, splattering napalm allover the sand, as they covered behind the rocks.
The fire didn't reach them though, but hot air can be felt.
They looked at each other then out from the rocks into the battlefield.
Hundred have burned to death, some still alive but not for long, the smell of burning flesh and screams.
They were all dead, the battle was over, no one had one, lost their lives, the families of the dead ones will mourn them...
As they were walking across the dead land, they saw something shiver, it was another marine, hiding behind cover, still young not even 17.
The 2 marines walked up to him, he looked in shock and fear, his left arm slightly burned from the fire.
They patted him, no reaction. "Leave him... he's froze." the sarge spoke as walking away.
The radio came alive.
"Confirmed that area grid 6 has been neutralized?"
Another voice came.
"Grid gone, wait, I see 3 marines, getting satellite footage now, yes, It's our marines!"
A few helicopters flew over them, now floating in front and landing on the sand.
Marines came out of the helicopter, they carefully picked up the wounded marine and placed him unto the helicopter.
Both marines were inside, safe and sound.
"Your safe now, there is nothing to worry about we WILL get you back home."
The pilot spoke to them.
The helicopters flew off in the distance.
Silence remained in the desert as usually.
The short ending, turns out I can't continue this story...
Sorry...
It turned out to be more of a military fic rather than a pony one....
Damn..
why can't you continue this fic? It was pretty good to me.
Yea I don't understand why
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As I said I can't continue it, I made it more like a military story rather than a pony one, my mind drifted left and right, and could make it up.
And I lost sense of inspiration for it, so to speak.
That's why I can't continue it, maybe I'll make another, in a few days...
You should add something into the story which re-introduces the pony characters.
The Soldiers get knocked out and then they are rescued by [insert name of pony character here] and then they talk to [another characters name here] and find a way to get out again without the Humvee, and then a couple of [insert bad taliban/american soldiers] that have stumbled across this world and then they threaten to destroy the town, so it's up to the soldiers and [insert ponies here] to save the town before they can go home.
It's a good story, I'd like to see you keep up the good work if you choose to continue it, maybe you should watch some TV or read a Comic to get a couple of ideas for the story.
yeah make MOAR
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Sorry but my work comes from inspiration, it cannot be forced, sorry...
21862 I don't seem anything from with it.
21865 Yeah, I knew that, being a CoD player for over 4 years, but meh, just wanted to add something that's all.
*Correction Damn it*
I don't see anything wrong with it.
See guys, it looks like I'm continuing this.
Probably because of Battlefield 3...
im not gonna hide my thoughts, this turned to shit, it just stopped being interesting, you were trying a little too hard to reach a conclusion and you skipped some pretty important stuff, for example, why the hell were they back in the desert? make that sorta thing more apparent, and why did celestia just show up? for no reason? they'd have to be there for a little while before the princess would randomly appear with NO contextual background whatsoever. good try but it was an epic failure in my eyes