No it did not
"Twilight, Twilight snap out of it, come on sugar cube!" she heard a faint voice calling out.
"R-Rick?" she asked confused. "Who, no it's me Applejack!"
Twilight's vision concentrated, an orsnge earth pony was standing by her side, gentrly poking her. "You ai'ght Twi?"
"Ugh... What happened?" Twilight stood up and looked at Applejack. "W-where's Rick?" she rubbed her head. "Twinya bumped yerself so hard it made ya make up names" Applejack pointed her hoof at a lamp post. "Ah found you lying here and quickly came over"
"How long have I been out?" Twilight asked. "Ah have no idea"
"Ugh... No shit of course you wouldn't" Twilight looked away.
"What does 'shit' mean, Twi Ah tink' ya'll need a rest!" she sighed and hugged Twilight. "No need to get peachy n' stuff"
"Twi ya talkin' funny, is somethin' wrong?" Applejack let go out of Twilight and tilted her head. "Nothing, I'm going back to the library, bye AJ" Twilight walked off. 'Why that no good little two-bit fillyfo- no AJ Twiligh is yer friend no matter what' she thought to herself.
Twilight opened the library door and used her hind legs to close it. "Riiiick! she shouted. "Spiike have you seen Rick?"
"Don't know him, don't care I'm sleeping" the baby dragon groaned from the rude awakening. Twilight made her way upstairs and opened her bedroom door. It was empty.
Then a thought hit her, what if the impacted made her imsgine all that stuff? What if it wasn't real only a imagination of her own. She hated when she was right. Twilight had checked every inch of Ponyville but to no avail. Rick wasn't around, he didn't exist, the o called Marines didn't exist. All hope was lost for Twilight to see Rick Anderson again...
Just wanted to end this stupid fanfic.
Hope you enjoyed it I defenetly enjoyed writing it... Not.
Thanks for being with me all the way through!
Some 'a' are 's' and that needs to be fixed, when applejack speaks the second time, you should have it in its own paragraph.
Just wanted to get 100 comments!
Yes, success upon making people lose their wits while reading this! Gottammovethatgearup! Yeeeeeehaaaw! Sentrygogodownandupanddamnit!
De engineer'sa bloody spah!
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Now finish it the right way.
Or else.
Stop trying to project yourself into a persona in a fanfic just to have an excuse to have sexual encounters with cartoon horses.
You are a faggot to the highest caliber. Kill yourself.
This was so bad it was amazing.
But really you should probably kill yourself.
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Or you are just the actual Twilight Sparkle and you are offended
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Shut the fuck up nigger.
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This fic was a complete mind fuck, next time try to explain things a little better. I give it a 5/10.
it was good up until chapter 12...the buck happened?