The Life of a Wanted Changeling (Comment Driven Story)

by Down with Chrysalis

[FIXED/REVAMPED] Episode 43: ANGRY BUGZE VS. THE URSA MAJOR

Nightshade is gone...
The little filly was only days old, and now she's gone...
She trusted you. She put her life in your hooves, trusting that you would keep her safe. It's too much. You're a big ling! As much as you complain, you can handle what Lady Luck throws at you! Why is she the one who was crushed?!
You feel it slipping!

The Ursa Major gets closer to you, but in your grief-stricken state, you don't notice or care.

Nightshade is gone... Tears begin to form in your eyes as the whole day's experience begins to fall onto you.

First I get betrayed by Trixie who I thought I could trust, then I lose the only friend I had in this town because of my stupid mistake, and now...

Tears begin to fall down your cheek and onto the ground.

Now that sweet innocent little filly is gone. She wasn't even a year old, and she's gone...

The Ursa gets even closer to you, but you don't care. you just stand there in grief and regret.

She trusted me... I promised her I would protect her with my life. She trusted me to keep her safe and happy.

Your body starts shaking in anger and sadness and your eyes begin to glow orange once again.

This is too much. I'm a big bug. As much as I complain, I can always handle what lady luck would throw at me.

Strange, midnight covered smoke begins to cover your body.

Why... why as she the one to get crushed?! It should have been me! The midnight colored smoke is now warped around your entire body, and it starts to form a tail at the back of your body.

*snap*

I... feel.... something slipping!

While you're frozen by grief, the charging Ursa knocks you into a damaged building which collapses on you. However, the rubble then explodes away from you in an outburst of power marked by your rage-filled yell.

Before anything else can happen, the Ursa rams you into a damaged building far away which causes the structure to collapse on you. The Ursa then smiles in victory and is about to continue his rampage when...

"AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH"

The rubble explodes away from you in a burst of energy. The Ursa (and anyling in the area) look at the where the explosion came from in both shock and fear. Where the rubble once was now stands a creature covered in the midnight colored smoke with a fox-like tail swooshing behind it. You look at the Ursa with orange glowing eyes in pure hatred. The Ursa snaps out of it and begins to charge at you, but when it gets close...

The Ursa tries to charge you again, but you use that power to grab the Ursa in a painful hold, lift it into the air, and slam that overgrown furball into the ground repeatedly, using more ground-shaking force with each vicious impact until your beat-down can be mistaken for an earthquake.

"SHE WAS MY DAUGHTER! AND YOU TOOK HER FROM ME! SHE WAS MINE, MINE! SHE WAS THE ONLY THING THAT KEPT ME GOING IN THIS CRUEL, UNFAIR WORLD, AND YOU TOOK HER!

You lash out with your fox tail and grab the charging Ursa, stopping it in its tracks. You don't know how, but to be honest you're too filled with rage to care. You lift the Ursa into the air and bring it close to your face. The Ursa futility squirms against your hold, but you just tighten your grip causing the Ursa to let out a whimper of pain. You then tell it in a low, menacing voice

"I'm gonna hurt you so bad, that their gonna have to stitch ya back together in Tartarus!" (for some reason you said all of that in a Scottish accent).

The Ursa whimpers in fear and pain at being lifted in your grasp, which causes you to smile a cruel smirk. You then proceed to lift the Ursa a little higher into the air before violently slamming the overgrown furball into the ground. You lift and slam the Ursa repeatedly, lifting the Ursa higher and using more ground-shaking force with each vicious impact until your beat-down can be mistaken for an earthquake while screaming in the RCV,

"SHE WAS MY DAUGHTER! (*slam*) AND YOU TOOK HER FROM ME! (*slam*) SHE WAS MINE, (*slam*) MINE! (*slam*) SHE WAS THE ONLY THING THAT KEPT ME GOING (*slam*) IN THIS CRUEL, UNFAIR WORLD, (*slam*) AND YOU TOOK HER! (*slam*) YOU'RE GONNA PAY. (*slam*) YOU'RE GONNA PAY (*slam*) IF IT'S THE LAST THING I (*Slam*) BUCKNG (*Slam*) DO!!!" (*SLAM*)

After you think you made a nice crater with the Ursa's body, you give a rage filled yell and throw the Ursa to the other side of the town. The Ursa barely manages to get up, but as soon as it does, you decide to end it here and now. Using your fox tail, you launch yourself towards the Ursa like a rocket and you charge up your,

You leap into the air towards the monster's face, putting everything you have in one ultimate shot!
"FALCON PUNCH!"

Falcon Punch, but for some odd reason instead of it being a fiery color, it is now a midnight blue color. But, again, you're too enraged to care about the details. You finally reach the Ursa's face and you scream in the RCV,

"FALCON, PUNCH!!!"

You then slam hoof-first into the Ursa's face with so much force that it releases a small shockwave and sends the Ursa flying into the air. You fall to the ground and land on your feet as you watch the Ursa's body fly far away and smash into the side of a mountain in the forest you first woke up in. You smile in victory, before you notice that you have attracted quite the crowd. It must have been everyling in town and you notice that Twilight, Rainbow, Applejack, and Rarity are in the front of the crowd. You then remember that you have a score to settle with a certain bragger. As you begin to slowly walk towards the crowd, they start to look at you in terror, and the mares take a defensive stance. But, you ignore them and begin to scan the crowd for Trixie until...

You then turn to the terrified ponies and spot the traitorous Trixie cowering in the back. You expose her treachery using the RCV, a short 'argument' ensues (and by 'argue' I mean Trixie fearfully tries to justify her actions), and she eventually points to Snips and Snails and says that they are responsible for the Ursa. Before you can do anything physical to them, Fluttershy suddenly appears and starts calling you out for hurting the baby Ursa AND hurting her friend Applejack and almost hurting Applebloom

You see her cowering in the back of the crowd, and your anger spikes at just the site of her. So you charge up your RCV and say,

"WELL WELL WELL, IF IT ISN'T THE 'TRAITOROUS AND WEAK' TRIXIE!"

She flinches when you call her that, and you decide to get closer to her. You teleport in front of her causing the crowd around you to recoil and gasp and the showpony makes a "eep" sound. You think you heard two colts say something like,

"No matter, the Great and Powerful Trixie can stop The Monster." One of them says, and the other one response with

"Yeah, just like she did that Ursa Major!"

You snort in anger at what they say and think,

Time to show these ponies the real Trixie. You charge up your RCV and tell the crowd,

"LISTEN WELL PONIES, FOR YOUR TINY MINDS ARE ABOUT TO BECOME MUSH! THE 'FIGHT', AS YOU PONIES CALL IT, BETWEEN ME AND TRIXIE... WAS FAKE!"

The crowd around you gasp in surprise and start to mumble about if you were telling the truth or not while Trixie looks.. guilty? You scoff at that and continue to speak in the RCV,

"THAT'S RIGHT PONIES, IT WAS ALL A SCAM THOUGHT UP BY ME AND TRIXIE. SHE WAS SUPPOSE TO 'BEAT' ME IN BATTLE AND TURN ME IN. THEN SHE WOULD COLLECT THE REWARD MONEY, GET ME OUT OF JAIL, AND THEN SPLIT IT WITH ME. BUT, SHE STABBED ME IN THE BACK INSTEAD... ISN'T THAT RIGHT TRIXIE?"

The crowd looks at Trixie, hoping that what you said was not true. Trixie starts to mumble nervously, until she finally says in a dejected and defeated tone,

"It... It is true, the fight was a scam, and so was my defeat of the Ursa Major."

The crowd all gasp in shock, and you smile in victory. You are about to walk away when you hear Twilight ask Trixie,

"If I may ask, why did you betray The Hooded Offender?"

Trixie looks around nervously and says,

"I..It.. It was the glory. I was always ignored throughout my life, but when I saw how much ponies looked at me in awe, how they showered me with adoration and bits, I wanted more. I figured if I could do it again I wouldn't feel any different and I would become so famous that I would be known across Equestria. I just wanted ponies to notice me. But I was wrong, I shouldn't have betrayed him. He was the nicest pony I ever meant and I stabbed him in the back. I'm so sorry, I swear!"

You ignore her apology, instead you just focus on how her lust for glory and fame made her do it.

I swear to Luna I will never let something as petty as that control meYou think to yourself bitterly. You are about to teleport away again, when you hear something that makes your blood turn cold,

"But, we brought that Ursa to town so that you could prove that you beat one before."

"Yeah, what gives?"

Suddenly, the air around the two colts gets super cold as you turn your glowing eyes onto them,

"You what!" you growl in a low menacing tone as they cower and whimper in fear under your glare.

You ready yourself to pounce the colts and teach them a lesson they would NEVER forget, when you hear something you really didn't want to hear today...

"How DARE you!"

You turn around to see Fluttershy giving you 'The Stare'

"You should be ashamed of yourself! I thought you were better than this!"

Fluttershy starts to slowly walk towards you, her glare intensifying the closer she gets. Even in your enhanced state, the power of 'The Stare' is still a formidable one. However, her words cut far more deeply than the stare.

"First you fake a fight for money, then you hurt my friend Applejack in front of her little sister, then you hurt a cranky Ursa MINOR, and now you're scaring more foals?!"

You would have been shocked at the knowledge that the building-sized furball rampaging through Ponyville was just a baby, but other thoughts were going through your mind. Fluttershy was the only other pony you thought liked you and could've been your friend. Seeing her with this much anger towards you is more than you can bear.

"You think because one pony betrayed you, that gives you the right to take it out on innocent helpless babies! I thought that Twilight was wrong about you mind-controlling me, but now I have no reason to doubt her! What do you have to say for yourself?!"

She stops talking to you when she's right in front of you. Trixie stabs you in the back, Applebloom hates you, Nightshade's dead, and now even Fluttershy has turned on you. You just can't take it anymore! Tears start to stream down your face and all you can say in a whispered heartbroken tone is...

"I just wanted to be the good guy..."

The yellow pegasus's recoils a little in shock and her glare softens, but you just run off into the forest in heartbroken despair. You don't even hear a purple unicorn yell,

"HEY! GET BACK HERE!"

What do you do?

Author's Note:

Hey Hive Mind, DWC here. God these chapters have been getting long huh?

*Is see surrounded by splicers and Heartless that have been shredded to pieces* Hahaah that was fun. Anyway ForevertheDoctor tell The Doctor that DWC is calling up my favor and is asking for your passage on the TARDIS to EARTH of any time. But FRist. I'm picking up Magus's signel. It's faint but it says hes...RIGHT NEXT TO YOU! Oh and don't fangirl to munch please

Kersey475 there's a practice room to your right. Think of any weapon you want and go nuts. A gift from me to you for saving RD and the Survivors.

A cookie to anyling who guess what "that their gonna have to stitch ya back together in Tartarus! (for some reason you said all of that in a Scottish accent)." Is a reference too.

Yesterdays chapter question answer is...

This was my reaction.
https://m.youtube.com/watch?v=umDr0mPuyQc

Congrats to forevertheDoctor, cause that is the kind of over dramatic reaction I was looking for,

Today's question is...

Do you think we can make this fic last all the way to season 4?

I want to know if you guys think that we can get this Fic all the way to season 4 and maybe 5. Please answer honestly,,,BYE!

Comments

[forevertheDoctor]

You cough awkwardly.

"Um...uh...I definitely didn't beat up that innocent yet enraged baby bear, what, no."

[forevertheDoctor]

(High pitched) I'm sorry it's just...he's...the Doctor...(coughs and returns to normal tone) right, right, bring it down an octave. Well, um, Doctor...do you know DWC? Because...um, I'm here on his behalf...to tell you...that we need the TARDIS to return to Earth. Any time period, just Earth. Gah, it's so painful to talk without fangirling.

[Infamy]

Depending on what bugze does I think you could make it

Bugze's anger helps him against the stare but you suddenly hear Trixies carriage move around until you see Nightshade fall out of the trash heap and you zoom up to her with tears but when you move your hood flies off.

[firestorm83]

Bugze is saved from the wrath of Flutters when Nightshade peeks out of the rubble and says "Daddy whats going on?"

[Erised the ink-moth]

stitch ya back together in Tartarus!

Now where have I heard that before?

The second Fluttershy starts to chastise and scold you for all your wrong doings and dastardly deeds, don't face her. Just say in a calm and even tone
"Fluttershy... stop. I don't care what you think of me. And I don't care what anyone else does either. All I ever wanted was to be one of the good guys, a hero. But no matter what I do, no matter how I try... everypony still hates me." You look over to the wreckage of Trixie's cart "I tried to make a friend today... and now my daughter is dead because of it. Little Nightshade is DEAD! She didn't deserve that!" you choke out "So call me a villain, a monster, and a jerk all you want. I already know I'm all those things... But at least I tried to be more than that."

[Kersey475]

Editor Kersey475 here with an important message for the rest of the Hive Mind: Be sure to keep close tabs on this chapter cause the [FIXED] version may or may not have MAJOR revamps and additions (especially concerning the ending of this chapter and what flutershy might do). Just warning you all in advance so u can re-edit your suggestions to better fit the [FIXED] chapter.

[Erised the ink-moth]

4599677 You've got it.
Praise the Editor! May the words of revision forever enhance what was already great!

[Dream Seeker]

Uh... Season 4 is already over. But can we make it to Season 5? YES WE CAN!!!

[Dream Seeker]

[for edit]
Twilight teleports you back. "You're not getting away this time!" she smirks. A moment later, the Ursa crushes another house. "I'll deal with you later." Twilight frowns. "I have an Ursa Minor to stop." The last thing you think before falling unconscious is "Wait- that was an Ursa minor?!

[New Dawn]

*Stares at DWC in horror* Oh.... my.... luna... well, this has been an eventful chapter... *Eye twitches* poor little nightshade... *Starts laughing like a madpony* Ahem, sorry these attacks have been getting to me. Anyways for this chapter my idea is: Nightshade comes crawling out of the wreckage, coughing and crying. bugze flies over and comforts her but in doing so his hood flies off, revealing him to the ponies of ponyville. Oh great.... there's the 3:30 attack right at my door... better get the bombs again.... I'll see you if I survive...

[moonlightbestship]

im sure of it.
on a side note... definitely has the nightmare sealed into him. excuse me while i go crazily happy over this

[Blade Dancer]

why not ? keep it going. All the way to season five and beyond !

[Fireheart 1945]

4599843 All the way to season 20 and beyond!

4599662

Please do this.

[Minds Eye]

Do you think we can make this fic last all the way to season 4?

Considering Bugze just Falcon Punched an Ursa back to the Everfree Forest, yes. If he can control this power, he could curbstomp everything that comes his way in ten seconds flat.

So let's not do that.

Fluttershy fixes her stare on you, and she begins to lecture. You can't hear it. All you know is the disapproving glare in her eyes.

It changes you. While her stare froze Bugze in place, you're different now. The feelings of shame and disappointment feed into your rage, building the blue aura of power around you. By the time her friends warn Fluttershy about what's happening, it's too late.

Your increased power boosts your force field spell, and with a low, guttural roar of hate you blow back everything around you. The blast knocks off your hood, but you don't care. You rise into the air, glaring at the ponies knocked to the ground, and scream your defiance down on them. Your rage builds with every word. Your power grows with every look of fear and anger sent up at you. You charge up another spell, not knowing what it is, and Luna forgive you, you don't want to stop it.

Deep inside, you know only one thing can stop what is about to come: Nightshade.

[MagusBlack]

"Uh, in my defense the Ursa attacked my daughter... Wait! Nightshade!"
Proceed the desperately try to find Nightshade

[MagusBlack]

4599508
*foreverDoc hears a Loud Thud as a portal opens up behind him*
*turning around he sees an Ogre Titan curled up in the Fetal position, rocking back and forth*
"The Horror, The Horror"

[MagusBlack]

A cookie to anyling who guess what "that their gonna have to stitch ya back together in Tartarus! (for some reason you said all of that in a Scottish accent)." Is a reference too.

Demoman

[forevertheDoctor]

4600420 Oh my god! Magus!

Doctor: "WHAT is THAT?!"

'That' is my friend! Magus, what happened!?

[forevertheDoctor]

4600420 and it's 'she' to you! :p

[MagusBlack]

4600557
Ah, sorry

[MagusBlack]

4600555
"Gen 3 ponies..."

[forevertheDoctor]

4600711 (gasp!) oh my god, are you ok?!

[Down with Chrysalis]

4599664 Heres ya cookie *gives you a cookie*

[Down with Chrysalis]

4600434 Heres your cookie too *gives you a cookie*

[Erised the ink-moth]

4601008 Thank you sir.
*Nibbles on cookie* Wow, this tastes great! But, I'm staring to feel kind of funny. *Gasps* DWC... What did you put in these?! I can't- Control-
*starts singing Livin' on a prayer by Bon jovi*

[Down with Chrysalis]

4601211 Opps..That must have been the 'make a person sing at random' cookie...MAGUS DON'T EAT THAT COOKIE!

[MagusBlack]

4600794
*Titan cockpit opens*
*Magus' dead, soulless eyes stare back at you*
*Flat monotone* "No. Nothing will ever be ok again"
*Titan cockpit closes, Ogre continues rocking back and forth*

[MagusBlack]

4601219
*Flat monotone* "Cookies hold no joy for me"

[Down with Chrysalis]

4601851 That's....really sad to be honest. I just can't come up with a witty joke or repay to that at all

[ramseymac]

You walk into the forest with nobuggy trying to stop you. It's too much. You're breaking. You think of all the things you could see in your little Nightshades beautiful starry mane, and say,
"Space, common stars, galaxies, black holes, Orion, the Big Dipper... THE BIG DIPPER!" And curl up into a fetal position, mumbling "Wanna go to space, wanna go to space, wanna go to space" to yourself over and over again until either Fluttershy or Twilight interrupts.
Reactions may vary.

[ramseymac]

4601919 looks like she's not such a tough cookie after all.
...
...
Yeah that was horrible.

[forevertheDoctor]

4601847 doctor: "um...is he...ok?"

"Does he look ok?!"

[Kersey475]

After a long time of running, you trip in a desolate spot in the forest. Memories of Nightshade along with betrayal and lost friends torment you. In your despair, you consider how no matter what you do, you'll always be alone, everypony will always hate you, and think you're a monster and you hear a tiny dark voice making these dark thoughts worse and tempting you to just give in and take your revenge on the world. You are in a very fragile and unstable emotional state right now and Celestia have mercy on anypony who dares attack while you're in this state...

Season 4, maybe... maybe...

Any weapon I want, hmmmm... *gasp* I know! The AC-130 killstreak from "Call of Duty"! The ability to call down a rain of fiery death from above like the wrath of a cakeless Celestia will be VERY fun... And if I'm not limited to just one weapon, I'll also get the Winchester Model 1901 10 gauge lever-action shotgun from Terminator 2: Judgement Day for close-quarter flip-cocking boomstick fun...

[blackjack5]

4600392
unicorn in crowd watching this:

oh sweet fuast! He's charging up a nova spell! He'll take out the whole town with it!! Run for your lives everypony!!

[Kersey475]

Editor Kersey475 here with an IMPORTANT MESSAGE FOR THE HIVE MIND!!!

DWC just made a blog post that you all MUST read as Episode 43 (especially the ending) has been extended and revamped. Reedit your suggestions to better fit these new developments

[ramseymac]

4603114 FOR THE SWARM!

[Erised the ink-moth]

4603114
Wow... I can't really explain what's going on with me right now. When I read the new ending of this chapter a bunch a water started leaking from my eye-holes.

That being said, my previous answer is pretty nil right now, so...

Exhausted by the events of the day, Bugzy stumbles into a cave and collapses on the floor, crying himself to sleep.
He's tormented by nightmares of the events of the last couple of weeks and how everything went so wrong.
That's when he recalls all the good he's done as well (Fighting a dragon, protecting Applejack from a tree, etc.) when out of the darkness of dream-space a voice calls out to him. "Daddy?" Nightshade then moonwalks over to him in mid-air "Look daddy, I'm dream-walking!"

Also: Season 4? You bet we can!

[Minds Eye]

4603114
In the future, you may want to hit the reply button on our comments to send us a notification. Let us know an announcement has been made.

Also, DWC, would it be best to hold off our suggestions until the chapter is edited?

[Down with Chrysalis]

4603613 Sometimes I think it would, but honestly I don't do that because it takes time to edit the chapters and I want you guys to read it as soon as it's done. I might start doing that if, and only if, you guys (and the one girl I know how) can handle having a chapter every second day. Like no chap one day, then a chap the next day kind of deal.

[forevertheDoctor]

(For remade chapter) tears sting your eyes. Why won't anyling realize you're trying to help? And now Nightshade, the only little pony that relied on you and supported you is gone.

You are truly alone.

You run into the forest, and slam into every tree you see, trying to harm yourself violently.

"WHY WHY WHY WHY WHY?! WHY IS THIS HAPPENING?! I ONLY WANTED FRIENDS! I ONLY WANTED TO BE GOOD! I ONLY WANTED TO BE ACCEPTED!"

You finally collapse. The bruises; emotional and physical prove to be too much.

"I only wanted to be the hero."

[Dream Seeker]

4603730 I can deal with that. You should start a thread about that, and we can hold a vote.

[ramseymac]

Here's a song with a name close to bugze.

I think it would fit better in the beginning part of this story though.

[RedvsBlue327]

The road to hell is paved with good intentions.

[Oakeave]

4625235

Words of wisdom, my friend. Words of wisdom.

[Nox Knock Jokes]

Shut up Twilight.

[tsaukpaetra]

You know Inventory isn't destroyed, right?

[JazzyWaffles]

"I just wanted to be the good guy..."

I feel like mentioning your apparently dead daughter would be more poignant but sure.