While venturing into the Everfree Forest at night to investigate a strange light, Twilight finds herself trapped in the midst of dilapidated ruins of a long-forgotten testing facility. Enlisting the help of both old and new friends along with some strange... constructs, she must escape - or die trying. Human in Equestria. Please read and review.
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Great so far, though it seems to have a few small errors.
There's a little too much explaining going on in some places, and the pacing seems a tad off.
Jaden is a little too open on his race and history, such as weapons and wars. (Some things are better left unsaid for a while)
It also seems that Twilight is a little too, shall we say... okay, with meeting a new species that seems quite dangerous.
Otherwise, as Twilight said, you have piqued my interest. I'll keep tabs on this, as well as a like and fav.
And so portal 2 is played out and it ends. Game over
8/10
Well damn he be op as shit.