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This whole discussion with Night was a slog to write. I think I'm just gonna stick to fetish porn.
Imports from GDocs can get pretty ugly from time to time. Happened to me when I imported a one-shot.
What does fecundity mean?
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Had to be done, Shining really wasn't thinking things through. I mean, if you think about it, almost all of the time he's spent as a mare he's been A.) extremely pregnant, and B.) on countless different spells to make life easier for her. It could very well be that he doesn't enjoy being a mare nearly as much as he enjoys being pregnant, which is a totally different thing. Just because Shining thinks being pregnant is awesome doesn't mean he has to rearrange his whole life and become a mare full-time.
And Night Light made a lot of good points, things that Shining should think about before making a life-altering decision. I honestly feel like it would have hurt the story if Shining had just decided out of nowhere that he wanted to be a mare and no one challenged him on it.
Well so farim like how this is progressing! I'm pretty eager to see the next chapter done soon!
Generally, when I write my episodes, I type it all up on Word, then copy/paste and make the necessary spacing, italic, and centering edits. I don't know what Google Docs did to the story originally, but maybe that would be a good idea for you to try.
As for the subject discussed between Gleaming Shield and Night Light, I can see where Night Light's concern and objection is coming from. There's a lot going on for Gleaming Shield right now, and a lot of changes already coming, so the idea of staying a mare is probably something she should hold off on until after the foals are born.
7906914 Well, ya did sorta create that situation yourself. I think you did a good job addressing it though, and the scene flowed quite nicely on top of it. I was somewhat hoping you would tackle this in some fashion after Shining's declaration of staying a mare and all, and you didn't disappoint. Even if it left you with a massive headache and such.
Good chapter though. While this story is, admittedly, quite absurd in some aspects, its still very entertaining to read and what have you. So, here's to hoping the next chapter, fetish porn or not, is easier on you. Cheers.
great to see an other chapter again, I can't wait to see what will come next.
7906990 I think the difference here though is he's not saying don't be a mare. Nightlight is saying wait till all the craziness is over and your life is stable THEN make a decision that feels right. Right now Gleaming/Shining is an a magical, emotional, and hormonal rollercoster. As
7906987 said he might just enjoy being pregnant in which case she/he could decide to stay male except when/if they decide to have more foals.
That said though only she/he is qualified to make that call themselves and they should make it despite outside influences. Lord knows the world needs to get the stick out of it's collective asses and acept people for who they are and not how they want them to be.
During week 16:
Coincidence? I think NOT!
7906975 Let me *ing good that for you, since you're clearly too lazy-assed to do it yourself.
7906914 It was different, and sorry it was a slog, but it felt right, and certainly something that added to the story. I liked it, and it helped to flesh things out here.
welp night light is going to be sleeping on the couch iddefinatly
7906975 The ability to produce an abundance of offspring or new growth; fertility.
I'm going to keep reading this story but I really did not like that last little bit between her and her father I did not like it at all I think he should have said he supported her just like her mama and that's it you're putting too much drama in this
But awkward discussions with family are my fetish!
You could have solved that whole formatting thing with one find replace; just use a regular expression and vaporize brackets and whatever is between them.
A reminder of what happened on week 16 (I tried to cut it down to take up less space while still giving the context)
Good chapter
"Because YOU'RE amazing, and you gotta believe that."
Naw, that's too much. Maybe...
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Still too much. Hmm....
7906990 Big difference between whatever natural disphoria you went through and Shining/Gleaming here. It is known fact that pregnancy and hormones can alter your emotions.
Try to think of it this way, if someone were to dose you with testosterone while you were deciding and you suddenly started feeling more manly and comfortable as a male would it be a good idea to decide right then under the effects of the hormones to permanently make that your norm. Maybe the best thing for you at that point, feeling more comfortable being male than ever before, is for someone to stop you and question if you want to stay male because it's you or because it's the hormones.
I really like how this was handled here. I had the same thoughts as I was reading and I felt that the fact everyone else was ignoring that it might be the hormones was a bit wrong. It's fine no matter the outcome but making that decision should be saved for the closest you get to your hormonal norm. Not when you're a full on baby fever, fertility goddess.
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Failing to have anyone doubt you at all can lead to you making a horrible mistake. Night Light didn't say anything about not supporting her if that was her ultimate decision, in fact, he said he would. He merely asked her to take the care that such a decision requires.
It's interesting to note, however, that this particular case isn't such a serious dilemma as it is in the real world: Instead of years of hormonal therapy and surgery, switching just takes 10 seconds with the magic wife. She could conceivably switch back any time she wanted (once the pregnancy is over, of course), or even move back and forth as she/he pleases. It rather takes the finality out of the decision.
7907750 It's a lovely idea but for 2 things.
1 - It's a totally understandable and realistic reaction, especially the gender dysphoria bit since that's a lot like what people in real life go through.
2 - It's their story at the end of the day. Their decision how to write it, not yours.
Plus, drama keeps things interesting! Heightened tension! Suspense!
7906914 It's totally right that you wrote it. It's very realistic, especially the whole gender dysphoria point he brings up.
7908674 I never said it wasn't good I never said he had to change it I just said I didn't like it everybody has their own opinion
Well done, but I can't help but get over how foul-mouthed Night Light is. I mean, I'm not of the morally offended "won't someone think of the children" mentality, but this is easily profanity-laden chapter in the 'fic. Even the career soldier that thought Gleaming was a bad idea wasn't this bad. I mean, I acknowledge that, as a background pony, we don't really know Night Light very well, and each author has to fill in the blanks. That said, while "astronomer" makes sense, "foul-mouthed astronomer" not so much. It's not bad, but it's VERY noticeable.
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Take a closer look at things. Night does most of his swearing when he's fuming about the problems with his job. Considering that he's tired, frustrated, and nearing the end of his rope on that front, I'd say his language was understandable.
There have now been two hints dropped for a curious trait of Night Light's. I think it's clear which side the Alicorn genes came from.
I knew this pun would make it into this fic, I bloody well knew it.
One thing about the whole argument with Night Light... why does Gleaming have to be dysphoric? In a world where physical sex fluidity is a real viable thing, why can't she just enjoy being a mare more than she enjoys being a stallion without it reaching a level of self-hatred/dysphoria?
As an example, I'm bisexual. I have had sex with, and thoroughly enjoyed intercourse with both sexes. But I prefer sex with women. If I lived in a world where orientation was truly binary, BUT you could switch it at some cost, I'd usually leave it on "attracted to women," purely based on personal preference. But if the opportunity presented itself I'd totally eat the cost to switch over to "attracted to men."
Cadance is a perfect example of this with actual physical sex. She likes hanging out as Bolero pretty frequently, and not even just for sexy times. She still prefers her birth sex, but it's not like she has any issues while she's Bolero. Maybe Gleaming would find over time she really doesn't prefer being a mare? So what? Shining Armor's back bitches!
I guess I just can't see the issue in the world they reside in. In our world? Sure. If we had technology to allow this kind of thing but it was a serious nigh-permanent decision, I'd totally concur with Night Light's "wait and see" approach. But it's not our world. Alicorns are changing physical sex for funsies. I don't think there's any case to be made about anybody being dysphoric. I think it's purely preference.
Anywho, great chapter! Interesting to get a little more thinky. The action scene with Steelwing was pretty dang great too!
I think the best idea is for Gleaming to go through an honest pregnancy, no feel good spells. THAT will give him some shit to think about.
Then again, I can't claim to be unbiased here. Shining Armor is one of the few well-developed regular male characters, and I want to see him remain as such. I like seeing my gender represented, and when you add to that how much I like Shining as the older brother archetype, I like him as a dude.
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That I can't recommend. My own mother's body was permanently damaged by her multiple pregnancies, and complications arising from said damage have nearly killed her multiple times. It's a sad fact of life that one day it likely will kill her, assuming something else doesn't get her first.
Pregnancy isn't a joke. If you have something, anything that can make it easier then by all that's holy you do that thing.
Nice chapter, Night Light logical counterpoints were a nice balance to Spike and Cadance emotional support.
Good work.
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Well, that's kind of my point. Shining doesn't want to be a mare, he wants to be on all those feel good spells. If he had to go through a more typical pregnancy it probably wouldn't be as much fun and thus would lose some of its appeal. All the other stat d reasons he gave for wanting to stay a mare are things he could easily do as a stallion. The only thing new is that he's on all these spells to make hill comfortable and happy. Hence my apprehension about this plot point. But then again, pregnancy fetish fic, so I accept whatever.
7910502 Again, I'm not saying that it's bad or out of character, just that it's really, really noticeable.
Is someone referencing Fallout: Equestria
Hey Night Light has the same idea I had, nice.
I've had slog chapters before, and I know I'd have a hell of a time getting this out. The fact that you finished it and made it good is a feat. Also glad to see not everyone's simply going with his decision. Debate's always good.
Also...
You... I...
I'm done.
7910502 hey just wondering will bigger mackintosh be making an appearance in this?
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Eventually, yes.
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I've never actually read Fallout: Equestria. Is that something a character says in there?
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Creative swears are just something that the main character is known for.
Click here.
8007276 sweet
8007276 related question is there an internal chronological order to the inter-connected stories (beside the direct sequel)
That chapter had my heart pumping left and right,It had me hooked from beginning to end.a true epic read.
personal opinion....night's arguments are psyco semantic bullshit, hormons can cause TEMPORARY judgement issues, but they are just that TEMPORARY and they dont last long, like mood swings, if a desire, a want, persists thru all of those swings it has nothing to do with hormones or anything else.
also gender and body disphoria have multiple diffrent variations all with wildly diffrent symptoms its what makes PROVEING you have it so damn hard the only known fact is that analizing the brains of those who suffered it after death indicates a distinct diffrence...however that can only be analaized post mortum, doesnt help someone who is still alive
and thats not even geting into the fact that cadance can tell the diffrence between a choice made rationaly and a choice made based on emotion because of her empathy so yeah, nights arguments are thinly veiled bigeoted bullshit in my eyes
but i see why his view was put in there, the author wanted to make sure it wasnt an echo chamber...thing is thats not nessiary...you might have THOUGHT it was...but its not...fact of the mater is sometimes there isnt a disagreeing voice, sometimes all of the are...whats more the pitty party at the start of the chapter very quickly becomes an obvious ploy to emotionly pad night light for his views at the end...it failed, badly at least from my persectinve
also yeas i know my spelling sucks im tired and i dont spell well to begin with
There
Extra word here.
Led TO this decision.