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Scarheart


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A special thank you to ShadowBlades for his input during the writing of this story. He's also credited with the pre-read. Cover art by ladynoob. Please check out her work!

Princess Celestia has it all. She is the diarch of a young nation with a sister who loves and respects her as an equal. Her ponies worship her sun and adore her presence. The nobility works for the growing nation. The nation works towards a brighter future for the generations to come.

With a distant eye upon a distant world, her consort is away to watch over a planet as much like Equus as it is different. They are sister worlds and Starswirl the Bearded has gone to study its lone intelligent species while his Sun Princess groans under the burden of bearing her first child.

As nervous as she is excited, Celestia counts the days, hours, minutes, and even seconds until the time she can hold her foal in her hooves. Oh, how she awaits the day! What could possibly go wrong?

Rated Teen for a disturbing scene.

MLP:FiM is owned by Hasbro.
MLP:FiM was created by Lauren Faust.

This will be the first story I've attempted without an OC! Please! Stay in your seats! There's no need to be alarmed! I was not harmed in the writing of this one-shot!

All comments and suggestions welcome.

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Comments ( 19 )

Sad and tragic...and yet so beautiful.:raritydespair:

I take it that they'll adopt Blueblood the pagecolt in the future ?

So... Beautiful *cries from the beauty of the story*

Don't stop, keep going.

good storie would reed:twistnerd:

3821974 Well, it takes place fifteen hundred years ago. He's already got a family and was working as a royal page.:rainbowkiss:


3822511 Glad you liked it.:twilightsmile:


3822545 I might continue the story at a later date.

3822616 :pinkiecrazy:

This is really good. There are a few problems (Mostly with the old English. On a whole, it's good.)

"Where for art thou, sister?"

Doesn't 'wherefore' mean 'why'? As in 'wherefore art thou, Romeo?'

This is a super good story.

3822953 It was actually a bit of a homage to R&J....:twilightblush:

It was the first time I've used the old form of English and I think I got it right, for the most part. I'll fix it as go along. Thanks for your comment! :yay:

3822960 You did get a lot right. :twilightsmile:

They used 'th' far too much. They even had a letter for 'th' back then. :rainbowhuh:

3822971 Oh...I know...I know...I would have confused readers even more if I had used it, methinks.:scootangel:

3823011 Yeah. Ithinks too.

You made the old English work. That's pretty hard to do and not sound like you're joking.

Great story. Please continue this story!

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3823011

That's not Old English. Old English looks like this:
(These are the opening lines of Beowulf.)
Hwæt! wē Gār-Dena in ġeār-dagum, þēod-cyninga, þrym ġefrūnon, hū ðā æþelingas ellen fremedon. Oft Scyld Scēfing sceaþena þrēatum, monegum mǣġþum, meodosetla oftēah, egsode eorlas. Syððan ǣrest wearð fēasceaft funden, hē þæs frōfre ġebād, wēox under wolcnum, weorðmyndum þāh, oðþæt him ǣġhwylc þāra ymbsittendra ofer hronrāde hȳran scolde, gomban gyldan. Þæt wæs gōd cyning!

What you're thinking of is Early Modern English (also known as Shakespearean English.)
Something good to remember with EMEnglish, whether you've totally got it down or can't remember it worth crap:
Thou, I, we, and ye are all nominative, aka the SUBJECT of the sentence, (I kicked the ball, thou hath fallen from thine horse).
Thee, me, us, and you are all oblique, aka the OBJECT of the sentence (the ball hit me, thine horse has dropped thee on thy rear).

3824545 Okay!

That's cool.

Copy-pasting.

3824563
Considering that a 2008 Windows Vista is completely incapable of typing Old English text, are you really surprised?

And actually, only the Old English was copypasted. I'm not that lazy.

3824659 No, I copy-pasted to save the linguistics lesson! I love that stuff! :twilightsmile:

3824545 I honestly thought Shakespherean English and Old English were the same...my mistake. There is no way I'd bombard my audience with that archaic language! :rainbowlaugh:

Comment posted by Scarheart deleted Jan 22nd, 2014

How, in the name of all that is good and just, did I miss this? :derpyderp2: *Throws his drawing to the side and starts reading* :coolphoto: Don't bug me... I gots me some fimfiction to read.

3828391 I'm glad you liked it!:scootangel:

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