• Member Since 3rd Feb, 2012
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The Mane 6 switch places with plastic versions of themselves - AKA the figurines we collect - causing them to be only an inch or two tall. They must rely on Greg until Celestia comes to get them - however long that might take.

My first fanfic published, enjoy!

I do not own My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic or any of its characters. If I do in the future, disregard this, as my plan to take over Hasbro (which I certainly do not have, Hasbro, forget you read this) has worked. I also do not own the cover image, all credit goes to it's author, StardustXIII. Here's a link to the original posting of it: http://stardustxiii.deviantart.com/art/Gimme-some-284469748

Chapters (15)
Comments ( 323 )

Thanks for reading my story! Sorry for low quality of first chapter, the second one should be better, I felt rushed to get them all introduced. Notice any errors? Got suggestions? I'm open to anythin'! :rainbowkiss:

THAT PICTURE, IT'S TOO CUTE!!! "explodes from dawwness."

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302067 Suggestions, really you need to space paragraphs and speech out with a line space, and you need to say whos speaking with 'Twilight said.' or 'said Twilight.' to make it clear. Its a good idea for a story though. :rainbowwild:

Like the concept, Characterization needs work though. Sometimes some of what the mane 6 say feels really out of character. And your guy is being WAY too calm and collected. I just don't think anyone would react as calmly as he does to the prospect of the mane 6 replacing his miniatures.

Still, could be interesting.

302602 IKR? I found it and I just HAD to use it. :D

wish I knew who made it tho... I have no clue :raritycry:

:302609 Yes, I wrote in Onenote instead of Word, which I usually use... turns out it doesn't space properly. as for who's speakin', I derped, didn't I? :derpytongue2: I'll go back through n fix those tonight. Thanks for the help!

Honestly i would of reacted the same way :moustache: if i was in his shoes. Universal Slip conversions... *shrugs*:coolphoto:

302647 ya, he's just kind of in shock. I'm gonna make him freak out in the morning. As I've said, this is kind of low quality.... I'm just too lazy to go and redo it... XD :twilightsheepish:

It feels a bit... rushed. But it was alright, take a breather, go slower. Still exposition out of the way, on to the hijinks ^^

302714 eeeeeeyup. :eeyup:
302691 I was aiming for the 'he's in shock/thinks he's dreaming still' kind of thing... although to be honest I think some of the freakout sessions are overdone. just me tho.

I'm not gonna beat the dead horse by saying "take it slower" like everyone else, but-
Wait. Dammit, I just did. Well, whatever. Work on your pacing a little, and we'll have something neat going on.
T-t-t-tracking.

302732 Thanks man! :pinkiehappy: DEAD HORSE??? WHERE??? WHO WOULD DO SUCH A THING?!?

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302660 Thats much better now its been edited. Glad I could help :raritywink:

I have to say this, when i saw that picture I dawwed for like 10 mintues.

The concept is very unique. However, take it slower. :twilightsmile: I dislike the fact that you told them about the show though... Oh well

302739 Dead horse? I prefer deadmau5:ajsmug:

Love the picture, like where this is going. I had a genuine lol at one point. Definitely rushed, especially around the end. I expected to see more reactions.

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second chapter better, ya'll?
303022 never would've guessed from you picture :rainbowwild:

Not bad, not bad. He's still taking this a bit well, all things considered, but maybe some high-jinx will get a rise out of him. :pinkiehappy:

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Not bad. Short chapters though. And also 'overdo' should be 'overdue'. Just trying to help. :twilightsmile:

303183...perhaps :derpytongue2: as I've said I find the freak-outs in most stories ridiculous, this is just what I think would happen.

303187 fixed :pinkiehappy:

303279 lolol okay Mr. impatient. I'll be sure to at least get SOME hi-jinks out by tomorrow. I'll do what I can do. :rainbowwild:

What did they get into a vacu cleaner

The second chapter they got into trubel. An it is hard to spel on a phone. I wondered if rhey got stuck i a vacum clener (sorry fore bad english)

Kimdan translated: What, did they get sucked into a vacum cleaner?

303378well, now, you'll just have to wait and see. :derpytongue2: that's a good idea, though... maybe I'll out that in somewhere...

303392 fine MS. Impatient better?

I only think about Tom & Jerry when i see the story pic

Dang... You beat me to that idea.... :applejackconfused:

I require more of this darling story, if you please? :raritywink: I mean... i-if that's okay with you. :fluttershysad:

303538 finders keepers losers sad appleblooms :applecry: I picked this idea out mostly because I hadn't seen any stories about it... sorry bro too slow! :rainbowwild:

303556 I'm workin on it. I'm trying to keep the chapters short so as not to keep people waiting as long... I always get annoyed at the writers who take like a month for a chapter :twilightangry2:

This is unique to say the least, and very interesting. I will be waiting for more...:pinkiehappy::twilightsmile:

Im looking forward to more of this. You're style is already getting better. But feel free to take your time onthe project i dont mind waiting a day or two inbetween if it enables you to tweak the story to your satisfaction.

302647 dude if the mane six replaced MY minutures (Which i tottaly don't have *shifty eyes*) I would be very happy............

Good... Good My plans will now work. EQUESTRIA WILL BE MINE! Wait did I type that? Anyways good story. Tracked, and thumbs up

Tracking just for the pic

I vote for describing, but you are the author so you have the final say

Write it then decide if your writing does it justice, besides sometimes it's a good way to get your creative juices flowing... Or atleast that's what I do. (has 3 Conversion Bureau stories that hopefully will never see the light of day)

would be cool if Pinkie Pie did some party with a modern day spin to it...Maybe uses an iPhone or something as the music player for the whole party, uses the TV to watch a movie, etc.
*imagines the cuteness factor of all of the Mane 6 running around on an iPad screen making art and surfing the web with their hooves*

Makin us do all the work? Uh, lazy:trixieshiftright:
but good story, even if you make us write some of it:scootangel:

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Okey dokey. I'll write it. Tomorrow. I'm too tired right now...

304577 How'd you know I was lazy? oh wait I think I already said I was. oh well. :scootangel:

Looking forward to the party:pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy:

305234 TWILIGHT GET OFF HER!!! ......... it's my turn. :pinkiehappy:

305619 my first response.

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