I kinda liked the idea, of a barb fanfiction harem.. but seriously, with that description i dont even want to read it...

Edit: Yeah i couldnt pass from the first chapter... STOP USING EXCLAMATION MARKS! D:

Barb is r63 of Spike right?

2992023 Yes, why? DO YOU THINK IT'S WIERD!? BECAUSE I'LL GRAB BY THE TAIL, THEN SLAM YOU ON THE WALL, THE FLOOR, MY SISTER'S FACE, MY PARENT'S SMART CA....Oh, sorry, that was a rude outburst. Ignore what I had just said about slamming you against stuff!

No matter what gender ge is spike gets all the bitches

2992066 xDimages.wikia.com/mlp/images/7/75/Spike_and_Rainbow_Dash_laughing_together_S1E01.png Ya am cool with it

2992198 Yes, perfect, Spike still has swag even if it's a genderbent story. I originally wrote this story so people could do more Barb shipping with other R63 characters!

the permits is good as always but the grammar and writing is http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=9a8r7xQvS1g

2992530 Okay, after seeing that video, your comment kind of hurt a little!

Jesus fuck, those first two chapters were goddamn terrible. I like the premise, but the execution is sloppy and lacking in both detail and sexiness.

2992538 sorry but the truth stings you have great ideas but you don't pull it off well it like asking Albert Einstein to play football he has a great mind for strategy but cant play well and preform the play with skill

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To be fair to Trahzo, your grammar and spelling are pretty abysmal, too.

2992698 You sound like one of my friends who say that I'm not that good at Yugioh!

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I'm terrible at Yu-Gi-Oh.

2992998 Okay! Berry Pinch, attack!

Ok I have yet to read the story yet but you should listen to the people who are trying to help you. If your grammar is bad, fix it. If you want I can read through it later and point out all the mistakes but not this moment, I just got home from a long car ride and I'm tired.

Exactyl>>2992526

2992526 Thats actually an excelent reason to write the fan fiction, but you should seriously improve or get a proofreader and editor, this could be a really good work if you want it.

2998466 Ah, I've been wondering when I'd finally one day run into you! Yes, I guess they do since Dragons usually 2!

3005743 No, it's Bubble Berry & also, I'm doing Apple Juice, because It's very confusing when I use Applejack!

So... She married a dictionary, a chicken, 2 cowboys, a speed-racer, a crazy psychic, a fashion designer, a coward, and an egghead... And this was all narrated by Epic Fail? ... I see nothing wrong with this. XD

3026582 Yeah, Epic Fail, you know, the R63 Derpy, at least that's what I think the name should be.

So fucking badly written that I couldn't finished the first chapter. Which sucks because you dont see many Spines stories (I hate the name Barb makes me think of someone much older)

Dusk Shine awoke to a moaning sound. He looked to the bed next to him & saw Barb, who was still asleep, but was looking really hot & bothered.
"(Guess it's that time again! Poor Barb, it's mating season & she doesn't have anypony to do it with! She's already at the legal age for sex. Wait a minute, what did Zecore say to me on Barb's 18th b-day again?)"
*Flashback!*
"Dusk Shine..."
"Yeah Zecore?"
"I must give you a disturbing story.
For when a female dragon gets horny."
"W-when she gets H-horny?" Dusk asked.
"When a dragoness goes into heat & needs it.
One partner alone wont help them beat it!"

I can't even finishe pointing everything out. I will say one thing:

*Flashback!*

Really? This is not a chat room.

2992066 Dude... JUST WTF IS THIS?
You are better then this dude...

Im gonna be butthurt for about 14 hours now.
FUCKING R63 Don't like the idea of spike being banged by 9 guys.

What the fuck...no seriously, what the fuck?!....
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UPVOTE!

I just read this and I have one thing to say......
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Ok. The concept of this story is rather interesting, but there is SOOOO much that you need to fix.
Your grammar, your spelling, the story and chapters are rushed way too much, your misuse of certain words needs to be fixed. But other than that, it would've been good. Concept is good, but you need to not rush it

terrible but I like it

So Prince Artemis was the one who'd be the Justice of the peace for this one since Solaris was being so emotional.
"Hello friends & family, we are here to celebrate the union of these 9 stallions & my niece, Barbara the dragoness. Do you men, take Barb to be your wife?"
"We do!"
"Do you Barb, take these 9 to be your husband harem?"
"I do!"
"If there is anypony, other than me who sees a reason if any as to why these ten shall not be married, let them speak now if you feel that being banished to the moon afterwards was worth it!"
The crowd didn't say anything, the ones who wanted to say why, which was 97% of them, just clamed-up since they don't think being banished to the moon was worth it.
"Then, by the power invested in me & the Grim Reaper, I now pronounce you, Dragoness & Colt!"

yep...the most fucked up wedding ever...i would have bannished crown and fork to the moon anyways.

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Girls don't have prostates because the prostate is the part that makes the fluid in semen.

https://youtu.be/74hA6Q7vPI4
What the f did I just read