Since her coronation Twilight has been experimenting with her new Alicorn powers. In another universe, Gielinor, a talented young mage named Ariane was experimenting with a new teleportation spell using all three books of magic. Both magic users had made all of the necessary preparations and were well on their way to new discoveries to better their worlds. Unfortunately fate (and sleep deprivation) had other plans as both faltered and messed up the slightest details causing an interdimensional vortex to form. Coincidentally a few other Legend's guild members were in the adjourning room. They rushed into the room to see what the noise was, only to be sucked into the unforgiving vortex. Now four heroes (Ozan the amazing, Ariane the seer, Sir Owyn the faithbound knight, and the merciless Raptor. must adjust to life in a land that has no need for violence. (needless to say, Raptor is furious) The group temporarily stuck in this world until a solution is found.
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i like it
2727202 I'm glad you do
Could use a bit more work with language and use of words, but overall good and well written story.
2732137 That's what happens before I get an editor, but I like to release the first chapter raw
But I really do appreciate the complement. I really want to continue this as it has a lot of potential, I just fear that I cannot do it justice.
Indeed. What could possibly go wrong? *evil snicker*
2785132 I am actually very glad you brought up those points
But as I said earlier, these kinds of things happen before I get an editor (yet I insist on releasing the first chapter every time
) speaking of which, would you like to assist me? 
2786109
being a pre reader? on the immortal words of an anonymous idiot just before doing something characteristic of his nature:
why not?
2786456 Sounds good
2786508 em... i don't think those links will help...
the key to reading is getting absorbed into what you're reading. you can't do that if you need to open a link every two words to see something that you don't understand...
not to be rude, but take the chapter down. if we do this right, you can put it back up in less than an hour with a lot of its problems fixed.
2786573 Alright, you've got a point
2786588
"from accidentally closing a portal while somepony was passing through resulting on said somepony being split through dimensions into to a fly or any other kind of insect being transported alongside with the caster, leading to mindswitching. you name it"
the scratched one should be deleted, the italic one should be placed instead. but not on italics.
i had fun helping you.
Only part i dont like is that it is new runescape not old.
but other than that i like it.
2787444 I'd be happy to have you continue helping me, at least until I can find a team of editors and such
2820459 I'd have loved to find something to do with old runescape, unfortunately this was easier.
oh, this will be awesome!
3413312 I assume you know what that 'creature' is...
3413661
just get pinkie pie to sing to it and it will go away. if that doesn't work, kill 'em all and let Saradomin sort it out.
3413661 i think i know what the creature is.. at least i think it is the demon i forgot the name of from that one quest known as one piercing note. idk i may be mistaken
3413824 I almost feel sorry for the thing, its weakness is singing...in a world in which ponies break into songs spontaneously.
3413885 The Ripper Demon. I always wanted to fight one of those...
YES!!!!!!!!!!!! IT'S BACK!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! For this chapter I will give you funny pictures.mlpchan.net/site/src/1347858263384.gif Gotta love this one.
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Last one!img72.imageshack.us/img72/9279/nomnomnomponyversionbyk.jpg Continue this awesome story and you get more pictures.
3414371 I'm going to try to make another update soon. Oh, and Those pictures are awesome
3415345 Yay updates soon!
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will this won't end will and am gusseing the the army of the kingdom is at lvl 5 if it can't hit juck shit
3426711 to be fair, the Ripper killed a small army and an iceyene general.
.... Raptor what happened to you bro? I though you were a master slayer
For some reason I though that Pinky would end up being chased by the Raptor while wearing his helmet
This is getting nice ~
Yay!!!
Nobody has posted a comment but meeeeeeess!
Rainbows!!!!!
3519185 That may come later, you never know.
3521816 woo!
3519165 I've been thinking about it and decided that 'the player' should probably be Max. Seeing as the Signature heroes aren't bound by the lvl 99 cap (aside from Max himself) on their main skills, Max could still be a reasonably powerful character without completely overshadowing the others. Dissy is still going to have his part though...of that you can be sure.
Not a bad read, and though the grammar needs work, I noticed you improved upon it throughout the chapters. I'd be happy to help you edit what you've got so far, but I can't promise that I'll be available to edit the story as it continues.
I'm having a bit of trouble with your characterization as well. Particularly, how easily the ponies accept the humans, and how abrupt and brash Celestia is. I don't believe the town would be celebrating the coming of the humans so quickly, especially when you think about how they reacted to the likes of Zecora, who was at least equine in form. Further, they certainly wouldn't be downplaying such a major fight that happened in the middle of Ponyville. I'd think those events would have a bit more impact on the town.
Meh.
4055440 I know it still needs plenty of work, all things in good time.
4055466
Fear not, perfection is within reach: You only need time, patience, and to reach within yourself, and find your destiny, your destiny to become the writer we need you to be!
...
...And stuff.
4055538 That was oddly inspiring.
4056794
I try.
4056928 Well, I appreciate it.
2820687 I miss old RuneScape...
Dis gon be good!
I have just recently gotten back into RuneScape and I have to say, THIS MAKES THE NEW RUNESCAPE MUCH BETTER!!!
4225460 I like old RS more in terms of gameplay, but new RS actually brings more story.
4228216 I miss the old combat system... yet at the same time I don't... I'M CONFUSED!!!
As one of my friends would say: "Oh no! He's been startled! RUN!!!"
4228216 Now where's our updates? *poke*
3510381 I just did that quest!
4235723 Well, I have about 300 words in the chapter I'm currently writing, but I haven't had much of a chance to finish it. Should be soon though.
4237100 http://www.fimfiction.net/blog/294334/harrass-me-into-updating I had just been at that blog so I was making a small joke about harassing people into updating with that *poke*
I feel tempted to make one story about runescape... I just don't know where to start. Also awesome job on the story!
4340727 To be honest, it's easier said than done. There aren't many well defined characters in RS, unless you're going to use the gods.