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CCC: cleverpun's Critique Corner 40 stories
  • CCC: cleverpun's Critique Corner 40 stories "Here's my latest report. I think you'll find it is quite excellent. I even collated it myself." I have critiqued/reviewed all the stories in this shelf. Find the index here: http://tinyurl.com/h3ftsm3
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    - July, 2015
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Total Words: 506,063
Estimated Reading: 1 day

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  • CCC: cleverpun's Critique Corner 40 stories "Here's my latest report. I think you'll find it is quite excellent. I even collated it myself." I have critiqued/reviewed all the stories in this shelf. Find the index here: http://tinyurl.com/h3ftsm3


  • Lengthy Comments 37 stories "Omigosh, let me tell you about this story I just read!" I wrote a longer comment on this story in place of a review. Chances are I didn't finish it or didn't have enough to say, and thus it didn't qualify for CCC. Or perhaps I read it before I started doing review blogs.


  • cleverpun's Description/Title Reviews 13 stories "Are you sure that's supposed to be there?" I have reviewed the descriptions/titles of all the stories in this bookshelf. Find the index here: http://tinyurl.com/h3ftsm3


  • cleverpun's Concise Critiques 22 stories All these stories have been reviewed in two sentences or less. Find the index here: http://tinyurl.com/h3ftsm3


  • Favorites 56 stories - 1 unread chapters "Oh man, this is so awesome! It's almost as good as Daring Do and the Shattered Sarcophogus' third printing!" Stories worth recommending.


  • Stories I Have Edited/Preread For 9 stories "Honestly, I think your characterization needs work. I liked the scene with the books, though." Stories I helped preread/edit for. Several of them I only edited parts of, others I edited in their entirety. Whether my input improved the final product is another matter.


  • Stories I Wrote Which Are Bad 9 stories "Honestly, dear, I know we all have our little lapses in judgement, but... What WERE you thinking?" Stories I wrote which are not very good. They might have one or two redeeming qualities, but I strongly recommend NOT reading them. Please read one of my other, better fics instead.


  • Pending Requested Review 0 stories "OMIGOSH Rainbow Dash you are so cool please pay attention to me look I wrote a story!" Requested for review. Higher priority than standard RIL. Check this blog to make your own requests: http://www.fimfiction.net/blog/590650/taking-review-requests


  • Tracking 2 stories - 0 unread chapters "Uhm, it looks like it might be nice? I mean, not that it looks bad! I didn't mean... Sorry, please don't be mad." Intriguing, but not favoriting quite yet.


  • Read Later? 474 stories "Eh, I'll do it later, I'm right in the middle of this thing right now." Stories which may or may not get read, at some time which may or may not be late.

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For years, Twilight Sparkle and Queen Chrysalis have been at each other's throats. Both have experienced victory over the other, and both have experienced defeat. Out of all the creatures in Equestria, none despise each other the way the pony Princess and changeling Queen do. They seemed destined to remain locked in battle forever, or at least until one is finally dead at the hooves of the other. The cruel insults, the vicious loathing, and the powerful spells that have passed back and forth between them at each meeting have become the stuff of legend.

Imagine Twilight's surprise when she finds out changelings consider this dating.

And now they're married.

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Sequel: Pony Courtship Rituals

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Some beautiful fanart of the end of chapter three was done by Dmann892; you can see it here.

More awesome fanart, this time from chapter one.

Now with a TvTropes page (obligatory TvTropes warning goes here).

If you want a Russian translation, you can find it here.

There is now a reading of the story on Youtube, which starts here.

Chapters (8)
T

A brave stallion goes on a quest to save the world by finding a lost princess in an enchanted forest. Things don't work out as he planned.

WARNING: Some spoilers in the comments. Also, a few mild spoilers for the Alicorn Adventure series, though it's not necessary to read those stories to understand this one.

Equestria Daily Page
Goodreads Page
Zabaware/AT&T Natural Voices "reading" by Modoc

Chapters (1)
T

Sunset Shimmer's life has been on the up and up. She turned from her past, made new friends, and is now passing the magic of friendship to others, including this world's Twilight Sparkle.

Which is why, of course, this is all just a mistake. Things got a little out of hand, but it's over now. So now they can just move past this. Why, it'll be a funny story to tell in a few months.

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Special thanks to the following:

SoloBrony, for being who he is.

CarcinoGeneticist, for his charitable contribution cleaning up the grammar.

Nadnerb who along with Solobrony convinced me to work toward publishing this stuff, even when I didn't want to.

And Skeeter the Lurker, Tourquillian, Nyerguds, and Prane for arguing in the Gdoc about what worked and what didn't.

The catalyst for, but not part of, The Shelf Cleaning Intiative

Now has a spiritual sister story in So You've Just Seduced Your Best Friend. For more details on that, check here.

Chapters (1)
T
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Nopony knows the changes that time will bring, and neither Twilight nor Sweetie Belle could have guessed that their trials would have brought them so tightly together. Now, as Twilight draws closer to the end, Princess Celestia pays her a final, private visit, but the ramifications are huge and could change the course of Sweetie Belle's life without her ever knowing.

"While the story of Twilight's final hours is touching, the real power of this story is in its portrayal and exploration of Celestia. If a gripping new take on Equestria's princesses in an easily digestible one-shot sounds appealing to you, don't pass this up."
—Prak, The Royal Guard

Cover vector by Quanno3, based on the original art A Song For Rarity by Palestorm (DA account deactivated)

Chapters (1)
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She noticed the pony for the first time when she was young, not long after she'd received her cutie mark. He became her oldest friend.

Note: comments contain spoilers; please don't read them first!

Cover art by DaisyAzurasFeatured in the Royal Canterlot Library

Reading by Neighrator PonySpanish translation by Spaniard Kiwi

Chapters (3)
E
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After months spent on the road for the Equestrian Games, Mrs. Harshwhinny finally comes home to the one pony who makes her feel like herself.

Cover image by FicFicPonyFic!

"...a nicely observed portrait of a moment in domestic life..."- Loganberry

Chapters (1)
E

A disaster at sea strands Caramel on an island with one other survivor: a human immigrant. They agree to work together, but Caramel's new friend may not be as benevolent as he seems.

Parody by Super Trampoline: The Cabbage Way.
Audiobook by Illya Leonov and Neighrator Pony.
Archived in the Pony Fiction Vault.
Reviews:
Louder Yay
The Royal Guard

Chapters (1)
T
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Daring Do cannot believe her luck when she is asked to help explore the most ancient tomb known to ponykind. But terrible danger awaits her, for beneath the earth rests something beyond equine understanding.

Warning: comments contain ending spoilers.

TVTropes page.
Alternate ending by Duplex Fields.
Archived in the Pony Fiction Vault.
Reviews:
One Man's Pony Ramblings
Louder Yay
PresentPerfect
The Royal Guard
Cleverpun's Critique Corner
The Goodfic Bin

Chapters (1)
T
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Finally, after years of begging, Celestia gives Twilight permission to access the Forbidden Wing of the Royal Library, a wing so secret even the other princesses can't access it. Twilight rushes to Canterlot, excited for the research potential.

Then she finds those books…

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Chapters (1)
E
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Lyra Heartstrings is a up-and-coming musician living in the quiet town of Ponyville. Her marefriend Bon Bon owns and operates Canter Candies, the town's specialty sweets shop. They've been together for years, and everypony around knows what a happy couple they are. But any relationship has its ups and downs, and it's hard to ignore every awkward moment.

Like when Lyra's ex arrives in town.
Because she thinks Lyra still has a thing for her.
Because someone's been impersonating her for the past few years.

...Bon Bon might be in trouble here.

Thanks to Einhander for pre-reading and Exuno for editing!

Now with a reading by Goombasa!

Chapters (5)