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CCC: cleverpun's Critique Corner 40 stories
  • CCC: cleverpun's Critique Corner 40 stories "Here's my latest report. I think you'll find it is quite excellent. I even collated it myself." I have critiqued/reviewed all the stories in this shelf. Find the index here: http://tinyurl.com/h3ftsm3
    Created by cleverpun
    - July, 2015
Found 40 stories in 49ms

Total Words: 506,063
Estimated Reading: 1 day

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  • CCC: cleverpun's Critique Corner 40 stories "Here's my latest report. I think you'll find it is quite excellent. I even collated it myself." I have critiqued/reviewed all the stories in this shelf. Find the index here: http://tinyurl.com/h3ftsm3


  • Lengthy Comments 37 stories "Omigosh, let me tell you about this story I just read!" I wrote a longer comment on this story in place of a review. Chances are I didn't finish it or didn't have enough to say, and thus it didn't qualify for CCC. Or perhaps I read it before I started doing review blogs.


  • cleverpun's Description/Title Reviews 13 stories "Are you sure that's supposed to be there?" I have reviewed the descriptions/titles of all the stories in this bookshelf. Find the index here: http://tinyurl.com/h3ftsm3


  • cleverpun's Concise Critiques 22 stories All these stories have been reviewed in two sentences or less. Find the index here: http://tinyurl.com/h3ftsm3


  • Favorites 56 stories - 1 unread chapters "Oh man, this is so awesome! It's almost as good as Daring Do and the Shattered Sarcophogus' third printing!" Stories worth recommending.


  • Stories I Have Edited/Preread For 9 stories "Honestly, I think your characterization needs work. I liked the scene with the books, though." Stories I helped preread/edit for. Several of them I only edited parts of, others I edited in their entirety. Whether my input improved the final product is another matter.


  • Stories I Wrote Which Are Bad 9 stories "Honestly, dear, I know we all have our little lapses in judgement, but... What WERE you thinking?" Stories I wrote which are not very good. They might have one or two redeeming qualities, but I strongly recommend NOT reading them. Please read one of my other, better fics instead.


  • Pending Requested Review 0 stories "OMIGOSH Rainbow Dash you are so cool please pay attention to me look I wrote a story!" Requested for review. Higher priority than standard RIL. Check this blog to make your own requests: http://www.fimfiction.net/blog/590650/taking-review-requests


  • Tracking 2 stories - 0 unread chapters "Uhm, it looks like it might be nice? I mean, not that it looks bad! I didn't mean... Sorry, please don't be mad." Intriguing, but not favoriting quite yet.


  • Read Later? 474 stories "Eh, I'll do it later, I'm right in the middle of this thing right now." Stories which may or may not get read, at some time which may or may not be late.

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Pinkie Pie is a very busy mare. Between her friends and her family, her party-planning job and her world-saving Element duties, she barely has any time for herself. Sometimes she wishes she had some help.

This wish is answered in the form of a small changeling, lost and alone.

Little did she or he know what series of events this would kickstart, or the marvelous new chapter it would open in the party mare's life.

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Cover Art and Proofreading by NecroHorse.

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Dragon Lord Ember took her throne when she won the Bloodstone Scepter, and its ancient magic which controls dragon minds.

In a world linked to Equestria, a very different Ember chafes under her father's leadership, hungry to take ownership of the instinct-controlling power of the Bloodstone Crown.

Their two worlds are about to meet. And only one dragon will stand between Equestria and the deadly, unforgiving call of the wild.

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Winner of the Imposing Sovereigns II contest!
"Equal parts character piece and action movie, and it is amazing. I can’t recommend it enough." –FanOfMostEverything
"For anyone who thinks that ‘mere’ fanfiction cannot be art, I can safely add this to the list of counterarguments." –cleverpun
"This is a good story, an important story, because it is so very relevant. Behind the fire, scales and teeth, is a very simple but incredibly real story about finding one’s true place in the world." –Venerable Ro

Highly Recommended by Present Perfect! "Treat yourself to the most unique story on Fimfiction ... a pulse-pounding thriller that explores Dragon Lord Ember in ways no one else has."
Featured by Seattle's Angels! "[Horizon] goes the extra mile ... if you’re looking for a great character-driven story about characters confronting their EqG counterparts, but especially if you are a fan of Ember or just dragons in general, then go check this out."
Recommended by brokenimage321! "Drop what you're doing and go read [it] ... A moving story about inadequacy and adaptation. And it has some of the best combat scenes I've ever read, in any genre, period."
Recommended by HapHazred! "Distinctively written ... Exciting, interesting, and gets more intense and cerebral as time goes on."
Reviewed by cleverpun! "[W]ell worth your time."

A huge thank you to Skywriter for prereading assistance!

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After Pony Magazine declares Twilight Sparkle to be the most eligible bachelorette in all of Equestria, Twilight finds herself buried under a veritable mountain of bouquets and love letters from all corners of the country. Enlisting her friends to separate the chaff from the wheat, each of them try to find a letter from an admirer who might be worthy of Twilight.

But the others are skeptical of Rainbow Dash's choice - a hastily written poem that came with a messy bouquet that somepony hoof-picked and threw together at the last minute. There's no way something like that could have come from a pony worthy of Twilight's love, right?


There is now a Spanish translation of this story, courtesy of Spaniard Kiwi

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Life in Canterlot Castle is about more than just the Princesses. Many ponies spend their days working in the palace, toiling with their virtues unsung to keep life humming alone.

Meet Spot Shine, Aegis, Raven, and more. Take a glimpse through their eyes, even as Princess Celestia finds herself a bit under the weather.

Some knowledge must be earned, but remember : Some doors cannot be closed once opened.

First written for the June 2015 Writeoff 'A Matter of Perspective', and winner of Most Controversial.

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Before Sunset Shimmer tried to take over a high school, long before she fled through the mirror portal, in the days before she was even the personal student of Princess Celestia, the young filly met Canterlot's most elusive stranger. He gave her a secret. And then a gift. And finally, a revelation.

In the end, he really only brought Sunset a curse.


In which expectations do not guarantee anything.

Spanish Translation from Spaniard Kiwi!

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Odd how some things stick in one's memory—certain places, personalities, sounds, even smells. Touching on one of these elements can cause a lifetime of experiences to come flooding back.

And just as quickly, they're gone.

First-place winner in The Write-Off Association's contest "Lonely Happiness."

Reading by The Living Library Player Society.
Another reading by DRWolf.

Featured on Equestria Daily!

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It was an accident, but in a heartbeat, she was gone forever. Or at least, it seemed that way before Gearshift met Test Tube. Now Gearshift’s workshop is filled with the necromancer’s bizarre experimental equipment, pages of impenetrable magical theorems, and a tank filled with murky, green fluid.

And within the fluid, a chance.

Cover art by 2135D

Click here for an excellent reading of this tale!

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Celestia discovers a lingering trace of Nightmare Moon's soul still lodged in Twilight's mind—a survivor of the lingering effects of the Element's magic.

Faced with the threat of gradually losing her friend to Nightmare Moon's evil influence, Celestia realizes the only way to save Twilight is to let the storm of dark magic take its course all at once.

And yet, as Nightmare Moon's corrupting magic tears away at Twilight's forgiveness and understanding, and Twilight begins dredging up unexpressed doubts once kept controlled, Celestia must face a lifetime of confrontation her student has kept covered.

It is going to be a long night for both alicorns.


This story was written for the Tenth Bimonthly Twilestia Contest. It placed somewhere.

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Equestria has just entered the first era of movie-making. Ponies now have a brand-new medium to express themselves in any way they wish, with no limits whatsoever, showing anything and everything they might dare to dream of.

Well, clearly nopony of morals would ever allow that!






Now with author Patreon and Ko-Fi pages.

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Transitioning was the best thing Caramel ever did for herself and her boyfriend was completely supportive... But since she transitioned, something feels off.

Gender roles are rough.

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