It was worth the wait. Though I'm not sure why the griffons would not become prisoners of war. Maybe thy will assist Fluttershy later? Either way this chapter was worth the wait
ahhhh camel you have no idea. The whole time i was reading the section where they would rape Fluttershy i was planning on ways to kill you. then discord came in and saved her at which i withdrew everything i said.
2492505 Still like to see Fluttershy get some. How about a dragon, a Timber Wolf and a gryphon all going down on her in a foursome and alternating in each of her holes?
2493930 But I was thinking, skinning their griffonhood whilst raining down salt. Then after that, Thin slices of lemon would be penetrated with their, now skinned prick.
Their howls, louder than what the timberwolves in pain can produce.
After that, they will beg for us to end their existence. But we won't oblige. Instead, make their suffering much longer.
Hundreds of needles, one by one, inserted inside of their little pucker, making their hole bleed in pain.
Then, we will cut their stomach in half, exposing their insides to them.
They will beg for us to stop the torture, since they don't like seeing themselves in pain.
That's when we happily oblige.
They don't want to see themselves in pain, then we shall stab their eyes with dull forks.
Now, the once scream of pain, will now be scream of death.
We will cut their tongues out, making them mute, silencing the poor creature.
Then, we will let them rot, just like the poor empty shell their soulless body is.
Then of course, this isn't my story. So carry on Mr. Author.
Honestly dude, when I first read "The Fire in Her Eyes" I was like OMFG! Why is Celestia's name would you do this to Dash! But, as I read it more... I-I kinda liked it... the rape parts I'm still iffy on, but the story itself is very well done! This story series is no exception! I'm anxious to see what happens in future chapters and I hope Ray gets tortured harshly like what happened in "Cupcakes" or Dash getting her revenge like in "Rainbow Factory."
Anyway, I have a story development possibly for a future chapter(s) to help the ponies win the war. Why doesn't Celestia use her magic and try to find Chrysalis and the Changelings in order to help her and the ponies. When Celestia first arrives, Chrysalis will have her elite Changeling guards surrounding her and other Changelings surround Celestia, ready to kill her. Then Celestia says that she means no further harm to the Changelings, but she wants forgiveness and a possible alliance. Chrysalis would be reluctant at first, mocking what happened at the wedding, but would listen to Celestia. Celestia says she will forgive Chrysalis and the Changelings for all their destruction of Ponyville during the Royal Wedding if they will fight along side the ponies. Celestia describes that with the number of Changelings Chrysalis has, some Changelings can be disguised as griffons and possibly infiltrate the Griffon Kingdom and gather intelligence. Also with her numbers, the Changelings could overwhelm the griffons and the dragons and allow the ponies to fight back against them (This would come in handy later in the story when/if the griffons and/or dragons attack Equestria). Chrysalis will be reluctant at first and have a discussion with Celestia. Before they agree to the deal, Chrysalis demands something in return, if some of her Changelings will have sex with her and they will plant their seed in her womb and Celestia lays a Changeling egg as a "token of their newly formed alliance", if Celestia accepts. After some internal thought and mental preparations for the backlash back home, she somewhat hesitantly accepts Chrysalis's bargain and lets herself get taken advantage of by three Changelings. (Here's where you have fun describing Celestia being, not raped per say (maybe ), but taken advantage of by three Changelings with massive big thick cocks where they fuck her mercilessly until they've had their 'fun with her' where they plant their seeds inside her and Celestia feels pain laying a Changeling egg, solidifying the Pony/Changeling alliance). Chrysalis would thank Celestia for her 'token' and allow Celestia to leave. Celestia would fly back to Canterlot, to begin meetings with her royal guard and the Wonderbolts on how to handle the war. END OF CHAPTER!
Cool idea huh? So you have a good chapter to write AND rapey(ish) goodness with Celestia by the Changelings! Something new and refreshing to the story! Hope this helps in the next chapter! Keep up the great work!
I don't think I can use Celestia as the 'offering', given the stance I gave her on the whole war. However, I do think I know of an acceptable replacement for her. Chapter 4 will be focusing on a different pony (ponies?), but you, sir, have given me a solid outline for chapter 5.
I gotcha. I can probably think of who this 'replacement' is, but I'd rather not say and let you surprise me with it. I can't wait for Chapter 5 to see how it turns out!
Well, I myself am a writer by trade, although I haven't written anything in a while, due to projects and stuff.. It's the least I can do for a fellow writer! I may possibly use Captain Ray in a story I have in mind. I'm not sure if it will be a short series or long one. Hell, I don't have the outline for it yet! Is it okay if I used him in a possible story I have in mind?
Anyway, keep up the great work and I hope you have a good death planned for Ray. He WILL pay for his sins against ponykind.
As long as you send me the link to the story when you're done, go right ahead. Though I have a gut feeling it will be a story about him getting the crap kicked out of him if I don't kill him in this story.
And while I too don't wish to spoil who the pony I have in mind is, I'm sure you'll 'love' my choice...
2386421 all, is, fair... how is anything ray did to rainbow in fire in her eyes fair (great piece of writing btw) also may i suggest that apple jack puts up a hell of a fight when her time comes, after all it takes the farmers of applepalooza multiple kicks to knock all the apples out of an apple tree, it takes AJ 1, when shes been awake for 3 days straight... jus' sayin' dont make the same mistake that the writer of rarity's generous plan did.
Right now I'm fairly certain that not all of the mane 6 will be appearing. I personally have a somewhat strong dislike of Pinkie Pie (insert death threats here), plus with the way her personality and 'superpowers' was developed in the show, it kind of feels like cheating to write her in (pinkie senses, party-cannon-out-of-nowhere, breaking the 4th wall, etc). So it's fairly safe to say that her role in any of my fics will be kept to minimum.
AJ on the other hand, while one of my favorite ponies, is probably also not going to make a major appearance. Mostly, I just don't think I can write in a good rape-scene for her. For those of you who read my other fic starring her (found here), the original outline for chapter 5 was to have AJ be taken advantage of completely. However, I couldn't bring my self to do that to her, and it stayed at what was published.
Now, that doesn't mean I won't include her at all, or that she's exempt from anything bad happening to her. If enough people demand it or someone sends me an idea I like enough, I will be more than happy to include it in a future chapter. But for now, there are no plans to have a chapter revolving around AJ.
I wouldn't mind some Flutterrape. I've never been a big fan of her. There is timid and shy, and then there is TOO DAMN TIMID AND SHY. Fluttershy happens to be the latter. Now, I'm not 100% sure, but has Celestia announced that they are at war with the griffons? Why would the element bearers be wearing their elements around like that? A-Angel? What the hell?
“And you, you unfortunate fool, have pissed me off.”
I clapped with joy, even though I was a bit disappointed with the lack of Flutterpenetration. But I'm happy that the bastard griffons have to deal with a psychotic god of chaos.
I had hoped Discord would turn these three into females. That would have been a fitting punishment in my opinion. Could have even let to a scene where they would have been gangbanged by their fellow griffins as punishment!.
Aww I wanted to see Fluttershy being gangraped hard.
2490128
No. NO! NO FLUTTER-RAPE!!!!
Like the story and all but Discord should have murdered those griffons. Also where is Luna during all of this?
2490837 I agree, where is little Lulu?!?
!!I DEMAND LUNA NOW!!
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2484155
why did you show me this
It was worth the wait. Though I'm not sure why the griffons would not become prisoners of war. Maybe thy will assist Fluttershy later? Either way this chapter was worth the wait
2490326 Why not? The more innocent they are, the more fun it is to do it to them.
ahhhh camel you have no idea. The whole time i was reading the section where they would rape Fluttershy i was planning on ways to kill you. then discord came in and saved her at which i withdrew everything i said.
2492059
these are my facial expressions reading your comment
2492505 Still like to see Fluttershy get some. How about a dragon, a Timber Wolf and a gryphon all going down on her in a foursome and alternating in each of her holes?
2491677
Just impersonating a Griffon,
Roar... squirt
But seriously I cook Griffons in my meal,
Don't tell the kingdom that
2492697
LOL She is right under you!!!!
LOLOLOLOLOLOOLOLOLOLOOLOLOLOLOLOLOL
But seriously go rape a taco instead
Why Fluttershy? Oh... the many ways to torture a griffon.
2492500
Just the response I was looking for.
Thought you would like that ending.
2493375
Stapling their nipples to the ceiling is one of them
2492500
The manwich was more worth it than Fluttershy
Please don't take my Manwich
2493930 But I was thinking, skinning their griffonhood whilst raining down salt. Then after that, Thin slices of lemon would be penetrated with their, now skinned prick.
Their howls, louder than what the timberwolves in pain can produce.
After that, they will beg for us to end their existence. But we won't oblige. Instead, make their suffering much longer.
Hundreds of needles, one by one, inserted inside of their little pucker, making their hole bleed in pain.
Then, we will cut their stomach in half, exposing their insides to them.
They will beg for us to stop the torture, since they don't like seeing themselves in pain.
That's when we happily oblige.
They don't want to see themselves in pain, then we shall stab their eyes with dull forks.
Now, the once scream of pain, will now be scream of death.
We will cut their tongues out, making them mute, silencing the poor creature.
Then, we will let them rot, just like the poor empty shell their soulless body is.
Then of course, this isn't my story. So carry on Mr. Author.
Honestly dude, when I first read "The Fire in Her Eyes" I was like OMFG! Why is Celestia's name would you do this to Dash! But, as I read it more... I-I kinda liked it... the rape parts I'm still iffy on, but the story itself is very well done! This story series is no exception! I'm anxious to see what happens in future chapters and I hope Ray gets tortured harshly like what happened in "Cupcakes" or Dash getting her revenge like in "Rainbow Factory."
Anyway, I have a story development possibly for a future chapter(s) to help the ponies win the war. Why doesn't Celestia use her magic and try to find Chrysalis and the Changelings in order to help her and the ponies. When Celestia first arrives, Chrysalis will have her elite Changeling guards surrounding her and other Changelings surround Celestia, ready to kill her. Then Celestia says that she means no further harm to the Changelings, but she wants forgiveness and a possible alliance. Chrysalis would be reluctant at first, mocking what happened at the wedding, but would listen to Celestia. Celestia says she will forgive Chrysalis and the Changelings for all their destruction of Ponyville during the Royal Wedding if they will fight along side the ponies. Celestia describes that with the number of Changelings Chrysalis has, some Changelings can be disguised as griffons and possibly infiltrate the Griffon Kingdom and gather intelligence. Also with her numbers, the Changelings could overwhelm the griffons and the dragons and allow the ponies to fight back against them (This would come in handy later in the story when/if the griffons and/or dragons attack Equestria). Chrysalis will be reluctant at first and have a discussion with Celestia. Before they agree to the deal, Chrysalis demands something in return, if some of her Changelings will have sex with her and they will plant their seed in her womb and Celestia lays a Changeling egg as a "token of their newly formed alliance", if Celestia accepts. After some internal thought and mental preparations for the backlash back home, she somewhat hesitantly accepts Chrysalis's bargain and lets herself get taken advantage of by three Changelings. (Here's where you have fun describing Celestia being, not raped per say (maybe ), but taken advantage of by three Changelings with massive big thick cocks where they fuck her mercilessly until they've had their 'fun with her' where they plant their seeds inside her and Celestia feels pain laying a Changeling egg, solidifying the Pony/Changeling alliance). Chrysalis would thank Celestia for her 'token' and allow Celestia to leave. Celestia would fly back to Canterlot, to begin meetings with her royal guard and the Wonderbolts on how to handle the war. END OF CHAPTER!
Cool idea huh? So you have a good chapter to write AND rapey(ish) goodness with Celestia by the Changelings! Something new and refreshing to the story! Hope this helps in the next chapter! Keep up the great work!
2493404
once again great job and keep it up
Nice chapter bro! here! have a moustache!
2494612
You, sir, have a sick, twisted mind... I like it.
I don't think I can use Celestia as the 'offering', given the stance I gave her on the whole war. However, I do think I know of an acceptable replacement for her. Chapter 4 will be focusing on a different pony (ponies?), but you, sir, have given me a solid outline for chapter 5.
2494074
... I'm getting the feeling you're not a big fan of Ray. Is it something he did?
2498121
I know I do! I like it too!
I gotcha. I can probably think of who this 'replacement' is, but I'd rather not say and let you surprise me with it. I can't wait for Chapter 5 to see how it turns out!
Well, I myself am a writer by trade, although I haven't written anything in a while, due to projects and stuff.. It's the least I can do for a fellow writer! I may possibly use Captain Ray in a story I have in mind. I'm not sure if it will be a short series or long one. Hell, I don't have the outline for it yet! Is it okay if I used him in a possible story I have in mind?
Anyway, keep up the great work and I hope you have a good death planned for Ray. He WILL pay for his sins against ponykind.
2498481
As long as you send me the link to the story when you're done, go right ahead. Though I have a gut feeling it will be a story about him getting the crap kicked out of him if I don't kill him in this story.
And while I too don't wish to spoil who the pony I have in mind is, I'm sure you'll 'love' my choice...
2498124 It just get the emotion flowin'.
I want them to try and rape pinkie only for them to be raped by multiple pinkies themselves, i want male rape plz
2498588
I gotcha. Will do. To me, as long as justice is served righteously to him and he cannot do anymore harm to ponykind, I'm cool with it.
I think I know who it is you're offering for Chrysalis... I think I got the hint... I am SO excited for chapter 5!!!
I was hoping for no rape but I started this journey I'm finishing it
2494074
Nice Dish!
But anyway's Captain Ray sent me this complex dish and said Fluttershy should be used in this
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ZIesCd4I4hU
2501567
I feel bad for you Mario.
2499666
Fuck the queen, I can stomp on that shit!
Get Batman!!!
Have any Griffon meat I can use to make Pico Pie's dish
2386421
all, is, fair... how is anything ray did to rainbow in fire in her eyes fair (great piece of writing btw)
also may i suggest that apple jack puts up a hell of a fight when her time comes, after all it takes the farmers of applepalooza multiple kicks to knock all the apples out of an apple tree, it takes AJ 1, when shes been awake for 3 days straight... jus' sayin' dont make the same mistake that the writer of rarity's generous plan did.
2504456
Right now I'm fairly certain that not all of the mane 6 will be appearing. I personally have a somewhat strong dislike of Pinkie Pie (insert death threats here), plus with the way her personality and 'superpowers' was developed in the show, it kind of feels like cheating to write her in (pinkie senses, party-cannon-out-of-nowhere, breaking the 4th wall, etc). So it's fairly safe to say that her role in any of my fics will be kept to minimum.
AJ on the other hand, while one of my favorite ponies, is probably also not going to make a major appearance. Mostly, I just don't think I can write in a good rape-scene for her. For those of you who read my other fic starring her (found here), the original outline for chapter 5 was to have AJ be taken advantage of completely. However, I couldn't bring my self to do that to her, and it stayed at what was published.
Now, that doesn't mean I won't include her at all, or that she's exempt from anything bad happening to her. If enough people demand it or someone sends me an idea I like enough, I will be more than happy to include it in a future chapter. But for now, there are no plans to have a chapter revolving around AJ.
"What do you want? I'll give you anything."
"Sex, duh."
griffon army meet
2494074 Dayum... U okay nigu?
I wouldn't mind some Flutterrape. I've never been a big fan of her. There is timid and shy, and then there is TOO DAMN TIMID AND SHY. Fluttershy happens to be the latter. Now, I'm not 100% sure, but has Celestia announced that they are at war with the griffons? Why would the element bearers be wearing their elements around like that? A-Angel? What the hell?
I clapped with joy, even though I was a bit disappointed with the lack of Flutterpenetration. But I'm happy that the bastard griffons have to deal with a psychotic god of chaos.
~SolidFire
"Your worst nightmare"
I imagined John de Lancie saying that and man.... *Shivers* I saw some shit.
I had hoped Discord would turn these three into females. That would have been a fitting punishment in my opinion. Could have even let to a scene where they would have been gangbanged by their fellow griffins as punishment!.