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Comment posted by demolish238 deleted Mar 29th, 2017

So happy to see this depraved and sick clopfic continued. Can't wait to see who all gets raped in this sequel. Maybe the rest of the Mane 6 get to experience everything Rainbow went through and even more?

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The elements of harmony only work when all of the mane 6 are working together. If you read the prequel to this, you'd know that one is definitely out of commission.

As for the three 'gods', well, one is a lazy bum who sends her student and her friend to do everything and was overpowered by the changeling queen, one is asleep during the day for the most part and just oversees dreams, and the other is a 'egghead'.

what about discord? Is he still free in this universe and if so would he help? I mean come on if anything goes after fluttershy he'll probably be pretty pissed.

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I try to keep my stories as canon as possible, ie I had to go back and change Twilight to an alicorn. Yes, Discord is free. Not too sure what role he may play, but he will be included somewhere.

Comment posted by demolish238 deleted Mar 29th, 2017

I can't believe I'm going through a lot of rapes, just to find out what happends at the end. :pinkiesick:

You sure know how to catch a readers attention. In a different way of course.

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And cadence doesn't do much in the ways of anything other than sitting around till the last second.

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The 3 princesses (I guess 4 if you include Cadence) can only be in one place at a time. And Equestria is a big place. Plus you never know what the griffons are going to do....

Hate being cliche, but you'll have to read it to find out. :twilightsmile:

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Not sure who should feel worse.... those who read it and like it, or me for writing and liking it.

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Well, if Shining Armor is around, he could throw her at them...

2376375 Actually, you don't need to feel bad about your story. It came out of your head, and you should be proud of it. Well, not in a case that what comes out of your head is rape and war. Just kidding. Anyway, You should be proud about all of your work, because you inserted effort in it. Not only that, because you have a talent in writing.

Hope you don't stop advancing this story. :pinkiehappy:

Yes...this is amazing! Loved the ending too to the last chapter in the last book btw. Can't wait for more dark rape to come.
Also...throwing Candice sounds like an EXCELLENT idea! When the time comes that is..

Did you get your inspiration from one of Iris Chang's nonfiction history book (the rape of nanking)?

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Actually never read it. No real inspiration... first chapter of Fire in Her Eyes was almost play-by-play of a dream I had. From there, I just wrote down whatever really came to mind. Again, I had some helpful input from some of my readers, which I always welcome.

Oh dear. I appear to have come across a small problem, it appears I can't seem to locate a "follow" button anywhere. Perhaps there's is something wrong with my connection?

Comment posted by fluttershy 1700 deleted Apr 6th, 2013

just finished reading it, so far pretty good but i was looking for some real rape in the begining, oh well im sure you will satisfy me in the next chapters

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You'll get your fill soon... :pinkiecrazy:

While I'm writing chapter 2, I just want to say this....

Northern Lights (the pegasus racing around the factory trying to catch the snowflakes in Sonic Rainboom), I am so sorry what I'm putting you through in this chapter. You just happened to be the unfortunate background pegasus that was randomly drawn for this chapter.

(yeah, if I really feel this bad about what I'm writing, you know it's going to be faptastically horrible) :pinkiesick:

camel i really dont want to see fluttershy hurt or raped because you just cant hurt her since shes so lovable but if you do i will personally murder you and rape your dead body just like the timber wolves in the fire in her eyes:flutterrage:

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Maybe you'll get lucky and she won't be touched. Maybe I'll have her become Cpt. Ray's personal toy and I'll have to answer any knock at my door with my shotgun for the rest of my life.

Nopony is safe...

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I cannot guarantee anypony is safe (just look at what I wrote about Northern Lights a few posts down). I'll just say this... all is fair in love and war. :twilightsheepish:

That rape of Northern Lights was awesome. Being raped in both her tailhole and pussy while the third was going balls deep in her throat? Too bad she was killed though.

Is it wrong that this coming out was the highlight of my day?

Gak

Loving this already

Why am I even reading this?

Why are the griffons so over powered in this?

i still dont think the griffons could win, i mean celestia raises the sun, the fucking sun. what do the griffons have talons and bigger dicks i just dont see it:ajbemused::trixieshiftright:

saw your authors note, im glad derpy will not be harmed since shes cool but once again if fluttershy is harmed you must sit at your door with a shotgun pointed at it for the rest of your life

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Physically, griffons are bigger than ponies. They have larger wings, and (at least according to my fics), live up north in the mountains, in much colder and thinner air. Thus, they would have an advantage in raw strength and stamina over ponies.

Can Celestia, Luna, Twilight, and (maybe?) Cadence defeat a griffon? Yes, they COULD. But let's look back at the show so far (as I try to keep my fics as canon as possible);

Every problem Equestria has faced isn't really solved by any of the princesses. Nightmare Moon is back? Better send the mane 6. Oh no, Discord is free. Send the mane 6. Yes, with the crystal empire Cadence and Shining went first, but they just stalled until Twilight and her friends got there. Plus the almighty Celestia WAS defeated by the Changeling Queen 1 vs 1...

My point being, even the most powerful pony (or 3 or 4) cannot save an entire nation. They can only be in one place at a time. And don't say magic can defeat anything... there are still rules and laws magic has to follow.

Also, talons.

2391481 Looking back to the show the Griffons are only slightly larger then the ponies. Not to mention I doubt they would be much stronger. Muscle is heavy and flight requires them to be light. I agree that they are stronger, but I think earth ponies would win the strength fight.

Dragon alleys though... that's just fucked up.

Still going to read obviously.

Brony on!

Comment posted by demolish238 deleted Mar 29th, 2017

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Crap... that's two people I now may have to worry about...

:ajbemused: I see that no semblance of storytelling convention is going to be put to use here. These characters are basically one-dimensional tools.

The entire set-up is ridiculous.

2388758 Seriously, arm the ponies with metal blades. There's a reason we feeble humans kicked the crap out of every other animal on this planet: SHARP TOOLS ARE MORE EFFECTIVE THAN NATURAL CLAWS AND TEETH. Sharpened steel slices through claws with ease. Claws are nothing but large, thick fingernails, after all.

Add in simple projectile weapons and it's game over.

Plus, as I see a few others have noted, the griffons depend on their larger wings for flight. This means they don't have the level of inherent magic the pegasi do (pegasi could never fly with those tiny wings. NEVER.). The griffons need to be built lighter.

And finally, their entire race just suddenly turned into sadistic rapist/murderers just because they have a bad leader now?

2392440 I expected something better then this I EXPECTED BACON all in all is good

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Fine...

The ponies all arm themselves with spears and don armor, fending off the griffon advance and kill hundreds of griffons, ending the war. The end.

Yeah, great fucking story that way.

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i guess thats logical, didnt really look at it that way:derpytongue2:

just don't hurt rain- oh wait.... yeah.... fuck ...... :fluttershbad:
anyways,what an awesomely bloody story! messed up though..... i remember when the fire in her eyes used to be just that oe chapter with 'you' raping rainbowdash.... it was so innocent then lol
anyways, keep going! but don't make everypony die ..... please :fluttershbad::fluttercry:

2393753 With a little forethought, one can conceive of battle which doesn't rely on elevating one particular side to overpowered contrivance, nor weakening and dumbing down the other to near helplessness.

Simply put, Equestria would not be a happy fairy land of magic and flowers if they had a neighboring realm with a history of savagery.

Altering the tone of nation which interacts with the other then results in changes to the international and social dynamics of the present.

This is often overlooked in dark and grimdark fanfictions.

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With a little forethought, one can conceive of battle which doesn't rely on elevating one particular side to overpowered contrivance, nor weakening and dumbing down the other to near helplessness.

Ugh, was hoping to avoid any spoilers...

So far there have been no actual battles between the two armies. If you notice, the griffons are avoiding outright confrontation, instead they are settling for guerrilla warfare. Notice that in the 1 on 1 fight in ch 2, Spitfire won. No side holds a 'overpowering' advantage over the other, just one side is fighting dirtier than the other.

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i remember when the fire in her eyes used to be just that oe chapter with 'you' raping rainbowdash.... it was so innocent then lol

They grow up so fast, don't they?

And they won't all die... there wouldn't be any pony left to rape if I did that. :pinkiesick:

2397154 Well, to put this in perspective, at least so far it's not nearly as bad as "The Secret Life of Rarity" (I suffered through 5 chapters and the end before the hatriol of its awfulness made me go berserk with frothing fury), which breaks the boundaries of utter absurdity from about the first quarter of chapter 1 and onward.

Your story looks to me a little unbalanced, what with the ponies not already experienced in warfare against the clearly violent griffons (deviation from the two canonical griffons we've seen, indicating a need to darken the ponies respectively and add details of a long antagonism and uneasy truce), but it's certainly better than a poorly plotted, unrealistic, pseudopsychological character assassination.

Uhm... ok, so that wasn't really a good comparison... The level of difference is like the difference between... sewage and top-quality compost. I dunno if that even makes sense. :trollestia:

I don't know why I'm still here. :derpyderp1: ah well, hope ray gets his face torn off

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I think 90-95% of the people following this want to see if/how Ray is beaten and/or killed.

...would suck if he lived.

And no, that's not a guarantee or spoiler. As of now, when I get to the last chapter in this, his fate will be decided by either a coin flip or vote... not sure which yet. :pinkiehappy:

79 Favorites yet only 39 likes?

:fluttershysad:

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So... working on the ch 3... couldn't help but scrap my original plans and instead throw in Fluttershy. :fluttercry:

Don't worry, she just talks with Princess Celestia about caring for animals. :yay:

Or... at least so far. I'm only 1,300 words into the chapter. :fluttershysad:

Comment posted by Error_404 deleted Apr 12th, 2013
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