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Yes i know clop in the first chapter is stupid but i needed 1000 words to even be able to publish it so i needed a filler
"Now your probably wondering why I'm here." Nope. There's really only three ways people keep getting humans into Equestria. Spell mishaps, Just Because Universe Blankness, and the rare space travel. Almost never are any of these are implemented well, or maybe it's because it's an unavoidable cliche.
As to the rest of it, skimmed it, meh all across the board. But this looks like it's going to be a multi chapter fic, which is intriguing since those storys are usually accompanied by a horrendous author. For this one, the writing isn't completely incompetant. Hey, maybe this won't be as shallow as it appears it's going to be, and maybe even go into situations such as too close calls of the secret being revealed, leading the human (Huh, already forgot the name) to question this whole ordeal.
Well, I'll never see it, I'm gonna be too busy barging my way to the escape pods of this story.
2343730 Thank you and yeah i know how boring the way he got there was but with a human in equestria story story you don't have much go on but i will try to make it a bit more interesting to everyone as for other chapters? we will have to see how much this one is enjoyed first
2343720 You had trouble reaching 1,000 words to publish this? Really?
You could have easily filled in the required extra space by explaining some of the bigger questions here, like why the heck does Twilight desire to go into a leash pet fetish thing. Also, why would she go through with fulfilling this unexplained fetish with a presumably unknown creature she met less than, what I understand, 48 hours ago. I must say that I call BS on it being just because of their one conversation. And speaking of the conversation, you coulda gone alittle more in depth with that.
Instead of "We talked about stuff." How about "I explained the many need to know basics about where I came from, careful to tone down the darker moments. Twilight occasionally piped in with a comment regarding similarities with pony culture, but for the most part it was just me talking."
Really, there's so much to go into detail about.
Now is the escape pods in the aft or starboard side of the fic? I'm having trouble finding em.
2343771 The way i designed the fic to play out was to start at the middle i didn't have time to really think of anything instead of clop because i was going to a concert the night i finally stopped procrastinating and got down to writing but i only had so much time i might just rewrite it after i get some more time on my hands and make the first chapter more explanatory than anything and move the clop to the second of third chapters I hope you realize this is my first fic let alone anything I've ever written in my entire life without being told to do it
2343782 "Without beingbeing told to do it." Oh man, that just gave me a messed up idea on some sicko forcing others to write this kindof stuff against their will.
Well, anyways, before I smash down on the eject button, I'll give a complimentary 'good luck' in your fanfic writing adventure. Going off the ten thousand hours of practise fallicy, it's good to see you have at least started, and that's mildly admirable. Least your first fanfic didn't suck as much as MY first.
You know what? Jettison the escape pods. They won't be necessary. I don't want to escape this. Intelligence is SUCH a turn-on! For,me, at least. Anyway, MOAR TWILIGHT!
Not bad, lol. You keep switching from 3rd person to 1st every 5 seconds, But your clopfic has potential
thou landith in strange yonderlands
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aquire currency and fuckith wenches
Love it. only thing is...you're implying that that was a 2 hour blow job. Now that's impressive =P not impossible, but if it was his first time, he probably wouldn't have lasted that long. But I'm just nit picking, it was a really cute story.
wow, not bad for your first story. I look forward to reading more.
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PLEASE
This story is getting better and better keep up a good work update more soon. It is getting very interesting to read
Last logged in Jul 17th, 2013.
Well looks like this is another one for the fic graveyard.