I'm older than your average brony, but then I've always enjoyed cartoons. I'm an experienced reviewer, EqD pre-reader, and occasional author.
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Lyra and Bethany hoped their friendship would last forever. But children rarely consider the full impact of their promises. Tomorrow never comes, after all.
Fourth-place finisher in the /fic/ write-off "Good Intentions."
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So I kind of thought I knew where this was going after the first part. Then I realized I was wrong about half of it. Then you hit me with the crossover (which I really should have seen coming, but didn't notice the tag). THEN I GOT SMACKED IN THE FACE WITH THAT ENDING. I had to read that last part twice before I realized what had happened (in a good way).
Really, this was phenomenal, and I wish there were more crossovers like this. Congrats on the EQD add!
A beautiful little read, with a nice and tidy crossover, resulting in a "feels" moment come the end. Bravo! I enjoyed it very much.
I would be more vocal, save the risk of spoilers.
Suffice to say, I would recommend this to my reader friends - mind, now that it's an EqD topic, they've likely read your story already! I've missed the bus, as it were.
Well done! Encore!
aaahhhhhh ;_; it still hurts
Wow, wasn't really expecting it to go that way.
What is this a crossover of?
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The brochure says it all.
Ah I remember this one. It eked me out my own fic into 5th place. It was a fun read, and a pretty fun contest too.
I remember this! Still good.
Wow. That ending......took me a while. Flawlessly Delivered :)
Okay, wow... That's a good twist. I actually didn't see that coming, but now re-reading it... Yeah.
Hmm... Why Lyra, if I may ask?
Wow.
That was definitely outside of the box.
First I thought it was gonna end with like, cancer or just forgetting an imaginary friend. Then I was like, "Oh. What a twist." Then I was like, "OH. OOOHH. WHAT A TWEEST."
3587054 It's a twist on the "human obsession" thing of hers.
3587940 That was my assumption, yes, but I wanted to be sure. It tarnished the whole thing by being guessable right from the start, so I was wondering if there was another purpose to it or if another pony might have provided a more engaging experience.
Granted, I wouldn't have guessed it if I didn't already trust Pascoite enough not to do an actual human/pony crossover.
-M
3585311 What brochure?
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Lyra and Bethany's mother gives them a brochure while talking to them. The title of the brochure is the title of the crossover.
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A couple of reasons, I guess. First (as I stated today on Chris's blog), it's another one of these stories where I wanted to see if I could pull off something myself that I always rage at authors for doing badly. So, the Lyra/human cliche. That's really the crux of it. I can't really see any other pony having a human friend in this manner without having to give a whole background as to why. Not that the fandom conceit of Lyra doing this makes much sense to me either, but this way, I don't have to delve into a long explanation. Really, the only other way I could have seen going is coming up with something other than a human as the friend, and then I could have picked nearly any pony, but go back to my first point, and I didn't have any choice. I went into this full well knowing I'd get hammered by people who don't like human or crossover stories, but I'm never above enjoying a fresh take on a tired cliche.
That was fascinating. Props to you, author.
3588627 Yeah. Aside from the 'doing the cliché right' angle—which I totally get—that's more or less what I'd assumed. I certainly don't think that it's anything other than unfortunate that I guessed close enough to neuter the effect of the end. If nothing else, it was fun to analyse how you achieved your objective on-the-fly (one of the rare times that author-centric reading offers something positive!) through word choice, PoV, and detail-focus.
Overall, I'm very impressed. It certainly nails your primary concern of not being gimmicky in the face of Lyra's fandom baggage. That's no mean feat!
-M
I thout the crossover made a lot of sense, because The Great and Mighty Lauren Faust also made the shows Foster's Home for Imaginary Friends and Powerpuff Girls, I believe. Combining two shows made by the same person... genius.
Someone beat me to the "What a Tweest comment", I see.
You have excellent prose, it's makes it really enjoyable to read your work.
Now that was excellent, especially the mild subversion of the crossover.
WOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOW
fosters... omg the plot twist at the end i thought the imaginary one was lyra.... OMG. i really enjoyed this story it was so amazing and well written. seriously one of the best stories ive read in months! definitely have to favorite. serious well done thank you so much for writing this. 
That was very... Confusing
Nevertheless, here's a favorite!
Dammit Pascoite! You're messing with me on purpose!
A very clever and very well-done crossover. Good job!
Don't worry Bethany, you can still be a kid on the inside!
¡Faustian!
I enjoyed this. And I don't get to use this picture very often, but this is one of those stories that deserves it.
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