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Pascoite


I'm older than your average brony, but then I've always enjoyed cartoons. I'm an experienced reviewer, EqD pre-reader, and occasional author.

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"Strong" is definitely a word that describes the Apples, and their family bonds are one of their biggest strengths. But Applejack will need to show her vulnerable side to get the most out of this day.

With her friends' help and a few cracks in her armor, Applejack is going to make this Mother's Day the best one yet.

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Cover art by Conicer

Thanks to Cassius, Filler, Corejo, Uma, Dublio, and Compendium of Steve for reviews/feedback.

Reading by the incomparable obabscribbler.

Chapters (1)
Comments ( 70 )
Comment posted by Regidar deleted Nov 30th, 2014

sad story is sad :fluttercry:

1712424
Duuuuude.
Again?

1712809
Spambot. Ignore.

I'm glad to see this up.

Overall a nice touching story. Revealed a lot of Applejack's character.

I really want to know what the inscription reads. In some ways it is perfect that we don't find out.

I got caught when I reached "itailian." Took me a good 30 seconds before I realized the joke.

Nikola of Tesla
-Head of Applied Magic, Canterlot Institute of Technology

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>I really want to know what the inscription reads.
See story title, which also implies another phrase. The full quote would be, "Many women (mares) do noble things, but you surpass them all."

Awwww. :fluttercry: Stupid Applejack fanfics, making me cry . . .
It's really well-written. Nice. :twilightsmile:

And I was naive enough to think that this would be one fic in which Applejack's parents aren't dead...
Well, never mind.

1713752 Dude, high five bro hoof extravaganza

Anybody who can work Proverbs into a pony story get's props from me. I'll read it when I get home.

1712024

Oh come on, show some respect for the story, man. :ajbemused:

yep i cried and congrats on EQD

Predictable yet endearing, and deserving of its EQD feature. Well-written throughout and characterized just right. Thumbs up for you!

Fantastic work! One of the best and most well written fics I've read, and very emotional. My hat off to you :ajsleepy:

I has a sad nao... I should really do something like this to remember my mom >.<

I'm going to go be sad now and think about life ;_;

Bawling like a filly now! :fluttercry::fluttercry::fluttercry::fluttercry:

A good sweet story, with a happy.sad feeling to it. :pinkiesad2:

Good story. :raritywink:
Don't know why, but I kept thinking this was gonna end up revealing Applejack to be Apple Bloom's mother.

I clued in right before the reveal about AJ's mom and thought,
"Why didn't I see that coming sooner?"
I didn't get teary-eyed or anything, but I did enjoy the bittersweet feels at the end.

:applecry::fluttercry::pinkiesad2::raritycry:Beautiful story, I cried.

Right in the feels, man. I've had a few friends go through losing a parent. Thanks for writing this. :ajsleepy:

Dear lord the FEELS:fluttercry::raritycry::raritydespair::applecry:

Oh man that was so bittersweet I loved every minute of it though. You captured Apple Jacks character wonderfully, wonderful work dude wonderful. I'm in tears :fluttercry::fluttershysad::

I've waited far too long for this.:fluttercry:

D'awww....
This story is beautifully written, and gives a nice view of AJ's mom and dad.
I believe that Mr. Backpack said it best.

Powerful.

Also,
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Cute story, and very well written. I love bittersweet.

How to say absolutely nothing in eight thousand words. This isn't a sad story, it's better titled: "Applejack goes grocery shopping."

you amazing writers you....life must be quite the adventure with your imagination, keen observation and sensitivity.
the story is also awesome :pinkiesmile:

1721079
Such is the nature of a character study. Sorry you didn't like it.

Why am I a sucker for these stories?:raritydespair:

I knew exactly how it was going to go right from the get-go, and I still got teary-eyed at the end.
Cool story, bro. It was truly beautiful.

A word of advice, delete Regidar's comments. You have he power, use it. Any mod will agree that it is a rightful use of your power.

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While I do agree to some extent with LunaUsesCaps, you could comfortably make the argument that showing a bit of her daily routine on Mothers' Day actually hammers home the routine of preparing a memorial lunch. The casual acceptance of it almost makes it even harder to accept because it's so rote for her that she has to force herself to stop and think about the mare she's remembering.

That said, I do think you went a bit too in-depth--there were plenty of interesting characters, but after getting 5k words in and still not reaching the main event of the story things started to drag a little bit.

This was absolutely beautiful. It was very well written and it avoided stating the obvious ending. All the the characters played their roles they way they should. Nice Job and Well Done!:pinkiesad2:

You've got a good talent on the written word, there's no denying. But there's a good deal of very unnecessary scenes, dialogue, description and events that just don't need to be here. In writing, its called "deadwood". You could've reduced the grocery-shopping scene to a mere paragraph, and gone through the errands in short order as well. The focus of this story is exploring the bittersweet celebration of Mother's Day for the Apple Family. Yet, we spend about 3/4's of it following Applejack around as she prepares for the event. As readers, most won't care, to be honest. If you cut this down, it would have been Twilight learning about the odd traditions, and then the feast scene and headstone scene. There's just so much here that adds nothing to the story and the reason for the story's existence, we get bogged down and forget why we're here. Its not as sad and meaningful as it could be, because we spend half a page arguing over the price of food (i.e. What does this have to do with the price of tea in China). This had wonderful potential, but its just poorly done. :fluttershyouch:

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Well, I'm sorry you didn't like it. There was more to it than Applejack's journey, as you've indicated, but if that didn't connect to you, it's neither here nor there. Not everyone likes every story. Along those lines, I would encourage you to temper such statements in the future:
>This had wonderful potential, but its just poorly done.
That's much different than saying, "I didn't like it." One would clearly be your opinion. The other presumes to be everyone's.

1736276 Very well then.

"I didn't like it."

I sort of agree that the story should be shorter, but there is something to be said for the juxtaposition of the mundane and the tragic. So maybe...

20% shorter to make it 20% cooler :rainbowderp: ?

I still liked the story.

I'm not sure why everyone feels that the story needs to be chopped down, quite honestly I thought the story needed to have Applejack going about all her shopping. It shows exactly how much work she puts into celebrating her mother's memory on Mother's Day, and clueless Twilight was somewhat adorable/somewhat painful because I kept wondering if she'd realize somewhere along the path that it was a very personal day for Applejack.

All in all, I think this is an excellent story as it is. Thank you for uploading it! :heart:

Not much of a shocker, of course, and it treads familiar ground, but it does so very, very well. You've got a really good grasp of the canon character voices and their presentation on paper, something that I always seem to have trouble with. Nicely done.

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