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Two months after Twilight Sparkle's Princess Coronation, she now has to take on her first duty as a princess. Be mentor to another pony. But not just any pony. A pony named Ruby, who refuses to use or learn magic, is to be Twilight's pupil, but she is more resilient than Twilight could have ever imagined. But when Twilight learns Ruby's past, that just makes her more determined to put Ruby on the right track. And things don't get easier when Ruby's brothers and sister come to Ponyville as well.

A lot of things are going to be happening in Ponyville. What happened to Ruby that made her hate magic so much? What are the Gemstones of Magic? And why is Queen Chrysalis so eager to get them?

The only way you'll find out is if you dive into this story of adventure, action, comedy, and even a little romance!

Chapters (8)
Comments ( 2 )

Pretty good storyline development so far. Definetely looking forward to more. :twilightsmile:

Just a small critique:

It seems like you're rapidly switching between present and past tense. (Example: "Twilight is flinging books all over the library" changes to "Twilight dropped all of the books...") Try not to do that, it makes reading the story kind of confusing.

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Yeah, I have a tendency to do stuff like that. I'll make sure to check the tenses before I release them lol
Thanks for the critique and IO'm glad you like my story so far :twilightsmile:

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