What if Cadence and Twilight arrived a couple of minutes later to stop Chrysalis?
What will the changeling queen do when she discovers that her marriage with Shining Armor is legally valid?
This story takes place short after the Crystal Empire arc and before 'Too Many Pinkie Pie'.
Inspired by http://csimadmax.deviantart.com/art/married-again-325751862 , all credit for the image goes to the autor.
Now with it's own spin-off: here.
As always, costructive critic is well accepted.
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Ok, i damn like it :D
Silly Chrysalis + silly Cadence = best damn combo
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Dunn dun dun. I foresee all the hilarity that will ensu. I will fab this now so is can keep up with it.
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Hope to meet your expectations
He pologimy comment just tickled me pink. The imications... Sorry just noticed this fic is rated teen.
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The teen rating is mainly for all the polygamy discussions tha will sooner or later come up, nothing more: I just thought youger readers might dislike that...
Well that's okay. I was just messin' with ya. Plus there is a thing called side fics.
Mwahahaha! that life sized Luna plush was funny, gotta love Celestia, and the interaction between Cadance and Chrysalis were awesome.
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One question before I read: Why is there an OC tag, but no Shining Armor Tag? did you just miss-tag the characters?
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Shinig is missing effectively... I must add it, thank you for making me notice; regading the OC, I will make a spoiler if I answer...
I really don't know why some writers put themselves on a timetable. All it does is set the stage for disappointment when they don't deliver on time. I'm in a pessimistic mood today....
Anyway good job. And the statue.... I guess Sombra wanted to ensure they'd never forget him I assume?
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Well, the timetable is just to give to you all a bit of insurance that you don't need to wait a month o more for the next chapter...
About the statue, yes, the purpose was exactly this one, kudos to you
Yay! I love Kudos, they're so tasty!
Faved, upvoted; hoping to see moar. Great start.
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Oh, thank you
like the story but one Q? Why Ashly and like Queen Vespa or web or mantiss or some other insect like name like Crisalys had?
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The motivation, as stupid as it could be, is that I couldn't choose a more fitting name: in my mind I found that the other insectile name (some of which you suggested) didn't bear the same nice ring...
I hope this statifies you somehow
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In trooth no Queen ashly sound rather bad.... i mean for a changeling queen or a queen in genral it has a vary bad sound. no offance ment but it dose. other ones i heard for chanling queens are Hunnycumbe, Sting, Pincer,Venum, beedrile (realy i saw on named that), Honet, Jirugoma (a tipe of japanese demon spider) i meany useing a human name for any mlp caricter is never good idea unles its a dragon or grifin...
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Truth to be told I shared and still share your feeling...
If you like it more as explanation, Ashley's name is due to her colors being black and gray, like cinder, and the fact that Cinder and Cinderella sounded even worse to me.
1937646If thats the base for the name how about Queen Scarub, the black egiption bettle that eat the dead and in mummmy movies the living too. Or may be a nother dark black evile insect like the Bisan a demon wasp that could in asian myth take the form of a lovely maidon, Queen Bisan sound more royal.
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Oh, I didn't knew about those godlike being... THank you for the suggestions
But I have to decline their use for a simple matter: Ashley, as Chrysalis and the changelings in general, isn't strictly evil, more along the line of willing to go to any extent for saving her children... I guess this is more of a filosophic matter...
I'll consider both names if another queen rises or if I decide her to be more evil, thenks again
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Based on your view i say Queen Spidermoth (ntsure i spelled moth right) Spidermothes pearlise spiders and lay there eggs in the so there young can feed on it from the inside alive. the are also black body with red and ornge wings.... thats more fiting only others i can think of that match how you see the queens are scropians witch carry there young on there back and the mantiss or widow that eat there mate so they have the strangth to lay egggs and lastly the masketo with the female sucks blood fore the need protines to lay eggs.
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I'll have to ponder on this...
Probably I'll use one of your suggestions for another story, if I don't find a better use in this one
Anyway, thank you for your many suggestions
1938010NP IAlway Figured the changlings had difrent hives each with there oun queen so i pundered the names for 100s of hives
Hmm that promise more awkwardness
Ok, I do not get it, so Shinning Armor to protect Cadence, himself and empire, he made possible changeling sleep with his sister, HOW DENSE IS HE ?
It is not like his sister, who he already hurt on the wedding, who saved his wife and helped to defeat changelings and then helped with wedding, who saved empire from Sombra and at the same time saved Cadence and Shinning Armor and her friends from slavery, deserve to not be send into dangers once in a while.
Shinning, you are a dumbass.
I agree. Shining is a dumbass.
But that last scene. I k ow how that is. When I was younger when a friend came oven I always had to share my bed with them.
Rofl, I hope 'Sombra the haunted closet' shows up more! that was Bucking brilliant.
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Yeah, I have a pretty low opinion of dear Shiny, did you notice?
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Probably it will appear again later
Yes you do. But I think it's well warranted. Ever since the season two finally I've felt his reasons for not telling Twilight about getting married were dumb as hell. Oh sorry I was too busy! Screw that! He could took a second and wrote a quick letter and sent it.
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Well, I do not like Shinning Armor because he start as OP Unicorn ( screw 2 Alicorn princesses and hundreds of Unicorn Guards, lets make 1 Unicorn hold shield to defend entire city again entire invasion forces for weeks ).
And the way how he act, how he yelled at his sister ( mind control or not, his words were his own ), and I agree his reason for not sending Twilight letter was bad, and what kind of brother is he to let his sister fight supreme dangers and not even send any guards to help her out.
In my opinion Shinning Armor power and character need a bit rebalancing, with Cadence it is more easy to make her less OP even if she is Alicorn, and giving her nice character development is not hard, even if her backstory seems to be weird, considering that she was smaller when she was taking care of Twilight, do this mean she was born 30 years ago, anyway Shinning is just to good material to screw up.
You know that rant makes him seem like a stereotypical overpowered OC. And I think Twilight forgave him way to easy. And I agree mind control is no excuse.
And I agree with that one guy..... I want more Sombra haunting closets. ALL THE CLOSETS!
Sombra enchanted all the closets in the Crystal Empire to be haunted as long as he isn't there so everypony would still fear him!
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Maybe, maybe not mwahahahah
The song was kinda random... but then again, it's Metalica, so I'm not complaining
I wonder who is that Changeling who betrayed his hive ?
Did he had some plans to take over Hive after Queen failure, or do she wanted peace above war, the story taken unexpected turn.
Not bad chapter. I can't wait til Shining finds out 'Green Cloud' is really Chrysalis and that he's married to both her and Cadence.
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There's a meaninig to the choice: Ashley wants the Changelings(the memory) not to disappear(to remain), a part for that, yeah, it's kind of random
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I'm sorry, but you'll have to wait a bit longer
Lots of grammar/spelling hiccups in there, might want to proofread this. Mixing up "rising" and "raising" a couple of times too... the sun is rising, rising out of bed... 'raising' is the act of making something else rise, like Celestia raising the sun.
When I read the premise, I thought about this cartoon:
http://csimadmax.deviantart.com/art/married-again-325751862
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Thank you, I didn't even knew they weren't sinonims
It is indeed inspired by it
You named your new changeling queen Ashley? I'm sorry but that just breaks my immersion entirely. It doesn't fit with the setting at all.
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I already said the other guy why I choose Ashley as name, and sincerely I cannot find a more fitting name (in my opinion, of course). Yet I'm sorry that this particular breaks your immersion
Let us see.
The story pace is slow, in my eyes at the least, but it does favor giving some ideas and insight about places unexplored in the castle itself, though this one chapter lacked giving some detail or of how Cadence and Chrysalis would fix the problem.
As much as I see their issue about to be resolved, I vote that they stay as sisters-in-law and both married to Shining for the sake of hilarity, drama and discomfort for the threesome.
As for the Changeling Hive aspect of the story, I find their reaction for their Queen to be missing logical. The traitor, who is sure to tell and warn the Crystal empire is sure going to recognize Chrysalis, this can lead to some awkward situations or not if the author permits it.
Overall, the story is moving slowly for me, but I find myself happy to find it getting close to when Shining Armor finds out he had two marriages and having conflict about Cadence accepting Chrysalis. Whether you keep the three together or not, I place my vote on keeping the mix-up and the awkward moments that can be produced from it.
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Thank you very much for your appreciation
About your comments: the pace is effectively very slow (even if it's not completely wanted
) , the solution to our married trio problem isn't clear since it won't be revealed till the end (even if it's clear that a solution exists), and about the changelings you're right on the mark (and yet I might surprise you 
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Well, I still vote that Chrysalis and Cadence to be in a state of sister-in-law, as Chrysalis seems a bit desperate in that one chapter regarding the stone, which can greatly help the changeling to survive and still be within observation range of a pony civilization, thus preventing another coup and may spring peaceful relations but it all depends on you.
Oh boy, I absolutely love this story. It's too bad I can barely read it, though. Your grammar sucks and the plot is rushed. Different authors have different needs for their writing. For you, writing chapters as quickly as you have been is a very bad idea. I'm sure you've heard what they say about quality over quantity. You'd be surprised just how patient readers are. We don't care much about how long it takes if it means having a better chapter when it does come out.
Before you even think about writing another word, go find yourself a prereader and editor. Maybe even more than one. Browse the groups for one. Also, fill in details. Describe emotions. Use your words to draw a picture in our minds. It makes a world of difference.
I love this story, and I'd like to enjoy it at the best of its potential.
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First of all, I'm very pleasured you like it
About the problems, well, I don't want to sound like Trixie
but to me it was good... Anyway, if you're saying I lack in grammar and plot, well, you shoul have your reasons, so I'll check them up before releasing other chapters; moreover, seeming that my english is lacking, I'll ask for help, following your suggetion.
Thank you so much for your time and your critic
I wonder when will Twilight or Shinning find out about Chrysalis, also do they will find by accident or will Cadance tell them, there is so many ways it can all go wrong that I hope it will surprise me.
However one think still not change, I still can not get over how foolish Shinning Armor was to make his sister sleep with someone he though would be changeling, not only he was very mean to his sister on the wedding and never apologise, not only his sister saved Cadance on the wedding and saved Crystal Empire from Sombra, but after all of this he dared to use his sister as bait for a changeling.
I hope it will end up with Cadance telling Twilight the true, then Shinning Armor finding out, panicking, and then Cadance and Twilight will capture him and explain the situation in harsh way when Twilight say " by the way brother, is that true you expected Green to e changeling, so you make me sleep with her to make sure ? ", then after Shinning Armor nod, Twilight would scream " I SLEPT WITH CHANGELING QUEEN BECAUSE OF YOU ".
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I have to admit I never though of this particular situation... But it's good
, maybe I'll insert it, if you don't mind of course