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After a miserably failed spell and failed attempts to fix it, Twilight gets a visit from a less than pleased Princess. Having failed her test, she gives the Princess no choice but to not only deny her the chance to become a princess, she also takes something away from Twilight and gives her destiny to somepony more deserving.
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Written as a counter to all the Alicorn Twilight fics! Don't get me wrong, I'm completely fine with Alicorn Twilight!
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You know, when the grammar in the title is incorrect, I tend not to read the story. It should be "Become An Alicorn". You say "an" if the next word begins with a vowel, or what sounds like a vowel, and you don't put "become" in lowercase.
I'll still read the fanfic, even though Twilight is my favorite, but please fix that.
EDIT: In the description, it says "faled" instead of "failed".
2138656 Ah, excellent! I love it when someone actually gives me a nice little bit of criticism and corrects something!
Thank you for setting that straight!
Yes something I enjoyed
2138671 Don't forget to capitalize the A in "an".
2138732
I hate my shift key...
You mean like this?
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2138775 Exactly like that!
Some mistakes in grammar, but otherwise I found this story to be hilarious!
I'd advise downloading Ginger: it's a free proof-reader that is easy to use. Also, I'd advise going to Paperrater.com: it's also a proof-reader, and is a bit more comprehensive than Ginger.
I will DEFINETLY favorite this!
2138814 Yes, I'm usually extremely careful of my grammar. This, however, was written in about... Fifteen minutes? But I shall check those sites out for my other stories! TO NARNIA!
This story had some grammar hiccups here and there and also you reused a few phrases. But I liked it, it was short and readable and that good shit, but it could've been better. Make it better, pal.
6.5/10, would clop to in a pinch.
2138883 Can do! I must stop writing stuff in fifteen minutes and not editing it, even if it is a joke story like this!
2138904 Are you kidding? Don't insult joke stories! They're the bomb! I've got a horrible joke story in the works about Scootaloo. It's gonna be better that Spiderses, Cupcakes, and My Little Dashie in a Blendtec (tm) blender!
7 dislikes? Why? This was funny as hell.
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2138952 Ooh, interesting! Take this watch with honor!
2138991 Thank you very much! I now have more watchers than watchees! Also about the story, spoiler alert: Prince Blueblood and Mayor Mare fuck each other with Wii remotes
WAIT DON'T UNWATCH ME PLEASE!!!!!
2139029 Don't worry, it's not that easy to get rid of me... Oh, no... Once I'm watching you, it's permanent!
2139054 Well then you'd better buckle in, kid!
2139075 Buckled in and ready for awesomeness. Also, I apologize ahead of time for the shameless promotion!
Allow me to place this optional link to another of my completely random stories!
The Misadventures of Dovahkiin
Click or don't click, I just though I'd throw it out there!
2139111 I got banned from /mlp/ so I have all the time in the world for awesomeness!
so yeah
i think this deserves a feature
2139242 Featured? Oh my, you bring honor to me.
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OMg I lold so hard
2139325 Happy to provide the lols!
Why would you "counter" something you are totally fine with?
2139884 For the glory of Discord, of course!
YA HAD ONE JOB TWILIGHT. ONE JOB. AND THEN YA WENT AND FUCKED IT UP.
I lol'd. This was both funny and a refreshing change of pace. Green thumbs for all!
2139983 Glad to hear it served its purpose of causing laughter and disrupting the flow of things!
2140002 Indubitably.
Let's see here...*Pulls out spas-12 and shoots derpy in face killing her* One problem down....<_< *Burns AppleJack alive* *Throws Celestia into Meat Grinder*
Other than that the story was AWESOME
2140446 Thank you ever so graciously, I do say!
2140461
Oh and Twilight being Luna's student/Butler is gonna lead to a lot of lol's
2140474 Might do that a story one day...
2138775 And she teleported away.
"Trollolololololllll, heheheee. LALALALA!
2140628 This. This is why I love this fandom. Normal people just are not this fun!
2140636 It's the crazies that are fun! CHOCOLATE RAIN!
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2140660 Wait, there's a song for it? Is there a song for cotton candy clouds?
2140718 Unfortunately, I don't think so...
I find nothing funny in this story, punishment is unfair and make no sense, and you made Twilight act out of character more then it is possible, I fell like this story was just a pull out frustration of not liking Twilight become Alicorn in the show, and so it deserve dislikes it received.
2140873 That is completely fine! No hard feelings here. I knew the moment I thought it that it would get some hate, such is the life of "Troll fics".
Yes.
And more yes.
2140888 Can't tell if agreeing, or... You know, because you did favorite it...
I can't brain after 24 hours of not sleeping! 
2140878
Well, my suggestion is to not make troll fics, I know it is good way to take out your frustration, but lately many fan struggle to accept this change, and many overreact or argue about it for no reason, there is no need to add fuel to the fire.
2140926 Honestly I don't think he cares about Twilight becoming an Alicorn. This was likely something he just did because he could do it and because it would have been mildly entertaining to right. This wasn't meant to be some hate fic, it is at its core a comedy with rather dry direct humor. Sometimes dry direct humor is pretty funny.
Should be "disappointed"
I didn't see any other errors.
I DID get a good laugh out of this. Upvoting and favoriting.
2141029 That is actually correct. Making a allusion to this meme...
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But thank you for pointing it out!
Glad you enjoyed.
2141029 I think they were referencing internet humor with that one, kinda like with the "Trollestia" moment.
Edit: Author confirmed while I was reading.
Ah well, ignore my comment.
2141060 I shall have to look for more of your stuff.
2141115
Didn't think of that lol